A Toy Escapade- #1 in The Pizza Planet Saga

After thinking about his chapter for a while, I have finally decided that it was time for me to put my hands to the keyboard once more. Sorry it’s short :blush:, but I need something to fill the gap between the last chapter and Adam’s next narrative. Plus this is a crucial plot point.
Ok, just so you know, the random numbers are corrupting of the data. I explain it down below if you don’t understand what that means.


Chapter 2: The Inexplicable
November 23, 1995, 11:36:12
Today was inexplicably odd. Adam just came and took out my automatic transmission that he installed. What's going on? I can't seem to be able t0 rec011 prop0010. Have 1 been exposed to a vi10s? Or is my Ar100icial intell010nce fail011? Slow01 I be110e mo11 confu001. I wi01 h11e t0 in100101te thi1 ma001r mo01 in dept0. I shou11 sto0 rec010i1g bef011 I0 compl1tel0 tak10 ov11 my 10stem.
END RECORDING

Well, You're probably wondering, why is his data corrupted? Why is it just 1's and 0's? and What are all of those words? I'll tell you.
The data's corrupted (messed up). I'm not telling you why, but it's not because of the automatic transmission being removed.
It's 1's and 0's because it is in binary code. 
And the words, here is an "english" translating:

Chapter 2: The Inexplicable
November 23, 1995, 11:36:12
Today was inexplicably odd. Adam just came and took out my automatic transmission that he installed. What's going on? I can't seem to be able to record properly. Have I been exposed to a virus? Or is my Artificial intelligence failing? Slowly I become more confused. I will have to investigate this matter more in depth. I should stop recording before IT completely takes over my system.

END RECORDING

Hmm, interesting chapter.

I want to know why Adam removed the transmission. That is my guess as to why the truck is malfunctioning. I guess I will have to wait for the next chapter!

Oh and, I really like that your chapters are short. I actually have time to read them!

Very good so far. Will you be including Woody and Buzz in future chapters? I’d like to see that. :slight_smile:

Thanks love70ways and Geoff-uk1234 for the comments.

Yes woody and buzz will come into the story. How did you know?

You should ask little_chef_eva09 to add this to the fanfiction index.

I did and she said that she was busy but when she updates it she will add my story. Thanks for reminding me.

The future chapters I’ll be writing on paper on the bus ride too and from school so they should sound more thorough. Just as a heads up to everyone.

Update yay :mrgreen: . So, I had an Idea that I would include some cameos from some popular characters, but it’s interactive! Sort of like Violet Parr’s fanfic here but you guys choose the cameos instead of questions. If you would like to request a cameo by someone, please PM me or post your request in this thread and I’ll do my best to work it into the story. By the way, free virtual cookie to whoever can spot the 4 cameos in this chapter.

Chapter 3: First Day on the Job

Well... It's my first day on the job. I climb into my truck and instantly I receive a message from my boss telling me that I have 4 orders waiting. 
" Typical, I'm sure" i muttered to myself as I started the old truck.
"Turn the key, pump the gas pedal 4 times, and shift to 1" I recited from memory. The car was so old that I needed to do the same method over and over again... At least thats what they told me. The 4 orders where on totally different parts of Emeryville. My first stop brought me to a non-descript house in the back streets. I rang the bell...
"Mr John Lasseter?"
"Yes?"
"I have your pizza that you ordered."
"Yes, thanks my boy, take this $5 bill to pay for the pizza, and this $2 bill since I can see that it is your first day on the job."
"Thanks... don't you work for Pixar Live Action Studios?"
"Yes...Yes I do."
"Well, I should be on my way then. See you later."
That was... awkward to say the least. How could he tell that it was my first day on the job? Has he been following me?
Anyway, I had more deliveries. Th next stop was a tall sky scraper on the edge of town. I proceeded to get into the elevator and rise to the top floor.
"Hello, I'm Nathan Ford, how can I help you?"
"Um...I have some pizza for you."
"Ah, yes. Here you go. Thanks for the pizza do come again!" I was rushed out the door by an almost unseen force. Again, that was awkward. I totally do not understand this delivery thing. I wish Pizza Planet would've given me some actual training. The third stop was a machine weld shop located at the western side of town. The Sheet metal gate moved aside as I approached. A strongly built African American man stood facing me.
"Whad'you want fool?"
"Um..." I meekly mumbled. "I have some Pizza for a Mr. H.M. Murdock."
"Murdock, I'm gonna pummel you." I heard as the man went hulking away.
"Aw... you bought pizza for me? So kind of you sir! Please take this payment and leave before B.A comes back."
The gate promptly closed. Well... some interesting people ordered pizza today. The final stop was rather uneventful besides the fact that a red blur passed in front of my windscreen as I was driving along the road. The long journey from corner to corner of the city took the most of the day, leaving me some time to check on my truck's "AI" files. thankfully, I found that they were becoming corrupted, which I am sure is because of my ingenious move in removing the automatic transmission. I can now just forget about that since he will eventually lose all AI if I'm correct. I can now sleep in peace.

After reading some of the other fanfics around, I feel as though mine is a meek comparison. (I’m looking at you Psyche OS X, Birds of a Feather, and Star Vacation). I would prefer just to stop here and cower into the darkness, but alas, I am a person who cannot leave things half done, I must finish. And so, the story continues.

Capter 4: Madness
November  24, 7:06:54
  I am descending into a state of madness. The inability to record properly is hindering my plans to record my life down. I have formulated 2 possibilities on what could be causing the problem. Number one: I have lost a part of my AI due to my automatic transmission being removed. Many facts point against this theory, as the Automatic transmission had almost nothing to do with the creation of my AI. Number two: Someone, or something, has infected me with a virus with the intent of making me fail at my job, which I have no control over. Many other facts point towards this as the true culprit. Specifically the fact that I no longer have control over when I might randomly stop or go. Usually I can at least put it off... Until today. 
  Also, I have hacked into some government files to discover that someone is moving into the house next door to Adams. Possibly, they are very rich, as the house next door is probably 3-4 times larger than Adams. I cannot tell if they are rich.


Authors Notes: Chapters are getting longer, and if you're wondering why this chapter isn't corrupted like Ch 2, then look below! It took a while to do, and it was frustrating.

Capter 4: Madness (Corrupted Version)
November  24, 7:06:54
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I seem to have lost my whole fanbase. Not that is was big to begin with. sigh This chapter is a little confusing but it [spoil]Foreshadows a major plot twist.[/spoil] ← spoilers! Don’t read if you don’t want the story spoiled.
On with the story!

Chapter 5: Exponential Shrinkage
You know what's weird? The fact that those "Gyoza 2.0" Trucks haven't arrived yet. It's been almost a week now. Sure, that's not that long, but the delivery time said 4-5 business days. I'm suspecting Foal play here. 
Pizza Palace has had an easy time in this delivery business. Almost no orders have come to Pizza Planet recently though. Are they spicing up their pizza somehow? The orders are shrinking exponentially, according to a graph I made of the orders received per day. Only machines are capable of shrinking things (or growing things) exponentially. Natural order often has a linear shrink.  One customer of note this week was a man by the name of "Al." He ordered 3 Jumbo sized Meatball Supreme Combo Pizza's. And the address he gave was a toy barn! Yeah, it was awkward when I went to open that door. I think this man eats too much. We'll see what happens in this coming week.

I finally decided to update again! But It is getting tedious to corrupt everything. So use your imagination for now, and I’ll go ahead and corrupt it later if someone wants to see it corrupted. More [spoil] foreshadowing ahead. [/spoil]

Chapter 6: Lame
These last few days have ben rather lame I must say. The corruption has completely taken over my system, and I still have no explanation for it. My two theories have almost no new proof towards nor against them. And so, I have nothing to do but be controlled by the corruption and live my life. How lame!
The deliveries have been rather slow lately, with an average of 6-7 a day. While driving along the road, I see a lot of Pizza Palace's trucks. they must be getting a good amount of deliveries. I'll have to wait a few days to see if anything new surfaces.

It’s great that you’re persisting, even though you may think your fanbase has disappeared. Maybe you should design a promotional image sig (you know, like how posters promote movies?) to draw more traffic? Also, leave comments on other people’s fanfics, if you haven’t already done that. I’m sure if you offer your friendly advice and criticisms, people will be more than please do reciprocate! :slight_smile:

Also, you have to make your tension more immediate and intense. Curious things happening and all that are intriguing, but readers will want to see interaction between your characters and identify with them, otherwise they won’t be interested.

So perhaps you can set up an accident between the Pizza Planet Truck and one of the Pizza Palace’s trucks. Then the Pizza Palace driver threatens Adam with a lawsuit.

Or a bank robber hijacks Adam’s truck and demands him to evade the pursuing cops.

Or maybe Adam borrows the Pizza Planet Truck for personal use to fetch his girlfriend to school, and the Pizza Planet Truck doesn’t like it and retaliates by refusing to start, or squirting oil on the girlfriend or something.

These minor ‘crisis moments’ don’t have to be related to the larger arc of the mysterious hacking and corruption of the Pizza Planet Truck’s files (although it would be better if ties in), but they help to sustain reader interest. If you can show interaction or relationships between the characters (like the example of Adam using the Pizza Planet Truck for his girlfriend), even better.

Read your favourite fanfics again and observe how the writer grabs your attention and sustains it. Or watch your favourite TV shows and see how they always end an episode on a dramatic cliffhanger, rather than 'I wonder what’s going on… things are getting kinda weird."

Just constructive criticism, I like how you’re trying to develop a mystery for this story (I’m betting it’s industrial espionage or unfair business competition from that sneaky Pizza Palace… :slight_smile:), but try to make it more exciting and have little ‘character-driven moments’.

Keep on swimming! :slight_smile:

P.S. I like the A-Team and J.L. cameos!

Keep going. Interesting to read. :slight_smile:

Thanks for the comments guys. You are what keep me going on this project of mine. :smiley:
Thanks for the tips TDIT!
You didn’t hear it here, but [spoil] an “event” is going to happen in the next chapter that no one will see coming.[/spoil]

Actually, I did design a promo sig at one point, but I only ended up wearing it for one day. Here it is:

If you look at the text in my sig, there is a small link to my fanfic. Its cowering in shame.
Nice spotting of the cameos, by the way. :smiley:

Cue music: Today is:
Update Day!!! End music.

Chapter 7: The Event
Why is Pizza Palace so much more successful that Pizza Planet? Why? What is their secret? I can only ponder these questions. But today is Pizza Planets 3rd anniversary of being open! We're going to have a big party, and everyone is going to come and celebrate. It will be great!
~ 3 Hours Later ~
"Hey Jim!"
"Hi Larry"
"What's up Adam?"
Broken pieces of conversation reached my ear. All of the Pizza Planet employees where there, even my boss. Balloons where flying, all the games were operational, and it was a private party, meaning no-one without proper identification could enter the building. The main food of choice appeared to be pizza, but some people were ordering the newly added pasta. 
My boss approached me.
"Adam, the trucks still haven't arrived"
"Weren't they supposed to arrive a few weeks ago?"
"Yes, and that's the problem."
"How?"
"I think Pizza Palace stole the trucks, since they recently added Gyoza 2.0 trucks to their fleet."
"Why would they do that?"
"I don't know...I just don't know."
I was left to ponder these thoughts when I heard a gunshot out side.
I turned.
There was a man in a black latex suit, with a ski mask over their face.
He shouted "Ok, everyone on the floor!"
Everyone got on the floor except my boss.
He told the robber "By what authority?"
The robber responded by coming up and hitting him in the leg, making it falter and he fell to the floor.
"Give me all of the money in the safe. Now"
The regular cashier got up, walked to the safe and proceeded to get out the money. He gave it to the robber.
"I am going to leave now, but if any police car shows up, I'll be back."
We all stood up. I pulled out my phone and called the police telling them what I knew. Luckily, I went down by the door, and I got a clear view of all of the license plates in the parking lot. One read "OUTATIME" and the car the robber got into had a license plate that read "PIZAPLCE"

Wow, things are getting exciting! An issue I had was with the robber’s threat of “coming back if they call the police”. Real robbers would use threat of violence at the beginning of their heist, and what the victims do after they flee the scene of the crime doesn’t matter.

Also, if someone just fired a gun and asked everyone to get down, one would most likely cooperate instead of answering back like the boss. The boss could try to reason or negotiate with the robber, but unless he has a death wish or hasn’t seen a gun before, he wouldn’t act all ‘smart-alecky’, even to a crook.

The plot thickens! I hope the truck and his driver set out to solve this mystery, if bad things keep happening to them, the reader is going to wonder if they’re going to do anything about it. Please continue!

In honor of todays release of Toy Story 3 on DVD, I’m doing a double update this week! Today and Thursday. :smiley: Anybody notice the cameo by a very famous car in the previous chapter? cough [spoil]Doc Brown’s[/spoil] cough
TDIT: This robbers different. :stuck_out_tongue: Plus the boss knows [spoil]the robber by the sound of his voice[/spoil]. <-This spoiler is revealed next chapter FYI.

Chapter 8: News
After the incident I found it interesting that I regained a slight bit of control over my erratic driving. Of course, I didn't know about the incident at Pizza Planet until I checked the news like I do everyday. Wait. Hang on! I've got an incoming transmission...
[i]Wall-E![/i]
Just one of those hams who scours the radio at night. As I was saying, I checked the news since I wasn't there (Adam got a ride with a friend) and I found at that the workers had been threatened. Someone could've died out there! 

(This is a first: We're switching to Adam's perspective!)

"Why, just why?" I was talking to my self. Again. 
"I going to find out what this is all about. I have to go back to the scene of the crime!" I grabbed the keys to the truck, locked the front door, and started up the truck.

(Back to the Trucks perspective!)

It's 12:03 at night, and Adam is driving me somewhere. I don't know where exactly, but I do know that I am running out of gas. Slowly. Slowly. Slowly. Good. We're pulling into the gas station. All I care about now is some nice cold fuel.

Any new chapters :question:

Yes. I was hoping to try get one up tomorrow. :smiley:

Ok, I’m really sorry I couldn’t get to the computer yesterday to post my new chapter that I promised Snake & Robot :frowning: I hope everybody had a Merry christmas!
I can’t believe I haven’t updated for almost 2 months.

Chapter 9: Disaster
I paced. I paced some more. I paced. I couldn't get it out of my head. Who wouold want to rob the Pizza Planet Establishment? 
"Why, just why?" I was talking to my self. Again. 
"I going to find out what this is all about. I have to go back to the scene of the crime!" I grabbed the keys to the truck, locked the front door, and started up the truck. 
"Ugh, I need gas." Why do I keep talking to myself? 
I stepped out of the car for a second to pay the cashier. Then I proceeded to fill up my truck and pull out of the gas station. That's when I remembered a jingle I heard on the TV yesterday.
"Dinoco Gas! Dinoco Gas! Fill up your car with Dinoco Gas!"
I need a life.
[i]12 minutes later[/i]
"Tell me what you know!" I was shouting at my boss. My job didn't matter anymore. What did matter was this crime that had been committed.
"That's classified information Adam." 
"Why? Why can't you tell me?!" 
"Why don't you ask Briggens that?!"
Briggens. He was the boss of Pizza Planet corporation. Something was fishy here. Very fishy. I was going to get to the bottom of it. 
[i]Another 12 minutes later[/i]
"Briggens, why can't my boss tell me what he knows about the robbery? Did he even tell the police?"
"I can't tell you Adam, but I will tell you this. You're fired under the Pizza Politics Manual section 12.1 subsection 5 postscript 21 addenum 4 revision 9."
"Sir, I regret to inform you that that section talks about the proper handling of Ice Cream."
"Get out of my office. Now." The last word had an extra note of stress applied.
[i]16minutes later[/i]
I have looked through my personal archive to discover that in the Pizza Palace Pizza Politics Manual, section 12.1 subsection 5 postscript 21 addenum 4 revision 9, actually does talk about the firing of an employee. That's when I realized that I didn't talk to Briggens. Briggens has red hair. The person I spoke to had black hair.

I am possibly maybe considering returning to finish this. Is there anybody who would like to see me finish this?