It’s my pleasure. 
I think it’s kind of hard not to get that part. 
If you want more romance just wait for the wedding chapter. 
Have you read “I Could Get Used To This” on fanfiction.net? If you haven’t then you need to go read it…like NOW. 
Yes!!! I’ve read it about one year ago, it was the first fan fiction I’ve read with that kind of scenes!! that is the reason why I like it with more romance ha ha ha (obvious with Lightning and Sally)
We could talk about this all day. I’m gonna PM you.
The next installment of “Personal Affairs” is here! This story is actually turning out to be longer than I thought it would which is a good thing I guess. Anyways, I won’t keep you waiting, enjoy!!!
CHAPTER TWELVE
Time seemed to drag by in an excruciatingly painful manner. However so, he didn’t dare enter the medical room. After some period of time he heard his voice echoing outside of the clinic. McQueen felt drained and exhausted but managed to make it to the clinic entrance. Just outside the doors he found Mack.
“What in the name of Ford are you doing here? You trying to make me lose my job kid? Where’s Doc? We have to hit the road!” Mack bombarded him with questions.
He’d already forgotten about the Piston Cup race, this had seemed like the longest morning of his life. “I can’t Mack. It’s Sally, someone’s hurt her real bad. I think she’s in shock. I’m…I’m scared she might die,” McQueen choked out.
Mack’s voice dropped, “Oh my gosh…I’m sorry McQueen. Look, just try and stay calm and go talk to Doc. I don’t know what we should do, there isn’t much time.”
McQueen drew a shaky breathe and struggled to keep his composure. He nodded and headed back inside. Doc was whispering with the receptionist but their voices lowered as soon as he entered. He was sure they could hear his heart pounding beneath his frame. McQueen realized he had never known how much he truly cared for Sally, not until this moment.
Doc slowly approached McQueen and gave him a deep sympathetic look. “We’ve got her stable right now but she’s lost in a coma. There’s no telling when she’ll wake up…if she ever wakes up,” he explained solemnly.
“What do you mean ‘if’? How can you talk that way about Sally?!” McQueen exclaimed.
“McQueen, that has nothing to do with the medical diagnosis. She’s just like any other car. Just because she’s close to us doesn’t change a thing. She lost a lot of oil, she’s lucky to still even be alive,” Doc said.
He closed his eyes tightly in disbelief. “Can I see her?” he asked slowly.
“I’d rather you not, at least not this soon. It will only hurt you more,” doc whispered softly.
“I know who did this Doc. It was Chick, I don’t even doubt it. We have to catch him Doc, look what he’s done!” McQueen yelled furiously.
“I know Rookie. No other car would have such a strong desire to hurt someone so close to you. I’m afraid there’s nothing we can do though. He’s got a pretty good alibi of being out in L.A. preparing for the Piston Cup. We’ve got no evidence. We can’t win on the case of your rivalry alone. They’ll think you’re just trying to take a stab at Chick,” Doc told him.
It grew silent as the truth settled in the air between them. McQueen was lost for words. Doc had a good point but there had to be a way, somehow, somewhere. The answer floated across the room from behind him. A male’s voice spoke with ease, “Have you considered a witness yet?”
You may not have noticed but I tried to use a more proper form of dialogue (making sure I start a new paragraph each time someone new speaks). Just a little improvement I tried to make. Feedback and comments are appreciated to keep me motivated. :smiley:Random fact: This entire chapter was hand-written by candle light at 9pm a few days back when the power went out in my neighborhood. LOL, back to the story though…
CHAPTER THIRTEEN
McQueen threw himself into reverse. He didn’t have to search the room, his attention was immediately drawn. The speaker was an attractive orange Lamborghini. His body was strong but his eyes seemed to wear a nervous mask. The Lambo’s green eyes flickered from face to face. Despite the strange look in his eyes he looked confident and convincing. Something about the way he moved, the rhythm of his drive, it reminded him of Sally. He seemed to posses what McQueen liked to call “lawyer features”. They were things like expressive yet mysterious eyes, quick wit and a profound essence of casual grace. He slowly put two-and-two together in his mind; there was no doubt this car had to be Justin.
Justin rolled forward before parking in front of him and Doc. “Please, let me introduce myself. I’m Justin Driverson. You must be Lightning McQueen.”
“Yeah, I am. Uh, this is the town doctor Doc Hudson. You’re Sally’s ex-lover,” he replied meaning for the end to come out as a question rather than an accusation.
Justin’s windshield shot up, “She told you about me? Wow…” he trailed off.
McQueen broke the awkward silence, “So tell me what you meant by that remark of yours,” he pressed. There were so many things he wanted to ask Justin but that would just have to wait.
Justin stared shamefully at the floor and collected his thoughts. There was no easy way around the truth this time. “I did it. I’m the one who stabbed Sally. And I’m Chick’s attorney. Through a series of complicated events I got involved with this…idea of his. He convinced me to do it; offered me all kinds of rewards. He said I’d get paid for one thing…a lot. Above all though he told me I’d get revenge.”
McQueen was frozen with shock. The very car who threatened to take Sally’s life was parker right before him. This guy was supposed to be her best friend. He felt sick to his tank at the thoughts running through his mind. Though still, he was here. Justin knew he’d done the wrong thing and here he was trying to fix it just as much as they were. He risked being turned in for the crime, with unnameable consequences. He’d come though, to confess in attempt to right his wrong. McQueen flashed back to his own mistakes, all the things he’d done wrong. Just as Sally had taken trust in him to change it was now his turn to take trust in Justin.
“Thank you for telling me. I found her this morning and brought her here, she’s in a coma right now,” he explained.
Justin nodded sadly, “That’s how I got here. I went back for her McQueen, I swear I did. When I found her missing I figured you’d saved her.”
McQueen stared back into the exotic car’s eyes. They were both fighting for the same thing; Sally’s life. He knew Justin wasn’t here for her romance; he genuinely cared for her as a friend. He almost let his guard his guard down to cry when Doc finally spoke.
“We’ve got all the information we need. Get in the trailer Rookie,” he ordered.
McQueen shot a glare at his crew chief, “Are you serious? You must be kidding! I’m not going Doc, not this time.”
Doc remained un-phased, “It’s what Sally would want, you’re going.”
“I don’t care what she wants! It’s not right so I won’t leave!” McQueen shouted back.
“Go. Now,” Doc said gruffly.
“And what about you? I can’t race without a crew chief!” he argued.
“I have to be here. Somebody has to keep a watch on Sally in case she wakes up.”
“I could look after her,” Justin piped up, “that is, if you trust me.”
Lightning blinked in surprise. He was really going to have to race. He looked to Justin, studying his face the way Sally had sized him up that first day in court. This was his decision now and he was no lawyer so instead he went with his gut. “Come on Doc, let’s get in the trailer.”
Any thoughts on this chapter? Sorry, I don't mean to be annoying by asking every time, just encouraging. :slight_smile: Thanks again for reading though.Sorry I didn’t post a chapter last week everybody! cricket cricket Well, I had exams and stuff and seems like there was no big rush anyways… However, I’m going to make up for it by posting two chapters this week now that I’m out of school. So just a little note on this next chapter, it kind of wrote itself. No joke, I think it skipped my brain and just went straight to the pen. I had no intentions of writing this chapter, it just kind of happened. It’s amazing the doors your mind can open! So I apologize because this chapter was meant to be a little more exciting but turned out differently. Let’s see how it goes!
CHAPTER FOURTEEN
It was a long and stuffy ride to California Raceway. Neither McQueen nor Doc attempted to make an actual conversation. The odd phrase was spoken but otherwise they were both lost in their own worlds. Every thought he composed somehow found a way to trace back to Sally. He gazed sadly out the small trailer window at the passing scenery. Nothing seemed to provide a distraction anymore.
McQueen’s eyes shifted to his crew chief parked just a few feet away. Doc was always good at keeping his cool but at the moment he was looking rather torn up. He appeared upset and distraught more than McQueen would have expected.
“Doc? Is everything alright?” he asked.
He hesitated before answering, “Listen Lightning, there’s something I’d like to talk about but I don’t want to startle you. You’ve got enough stress already; I don’t want you aging faster than your old man.”
McQueen was a bit confused but he realized Doc was going to open up to him. It was a rare occurrence for his mentor so he grabbed the opportunity. “Maybe we could talk about it at the next rest stop?”
Doc nodded slowly and they carried on towards L.A. in the solemn silence.
An hour later Mack pulled over into a truck stop. McQueen was relieved to stretch his tires and ordered some gasoline for Doc and himself. They took their drinks to a quieter spot and sipped from them for a minute or two. He figured it was probably best to leave the talking to Doc when he was ready.
“You know, I was once married,” he paused before adding, “still am.”
Lightning nearly choked on his drink; this guy never ceased to amaze him. He waited patiently for the old car to continue.
“I used to have a lot of mistresses when I was at the top of my game. I’m sure you’ve had a few in your time and don’t tell me otherwise Rookie. I know the life. In and out of bars, meaningless moonlight kisses, every racer’s been through it. I suppose I never expected love back then, didn’t even truly know what it was. But then I met Donna, sweetest girl I ever met. I knew she wasn’t just another.”
Doc stopped to catch his breathe. He didn’t have to continue, he could just leave it at that. Despite the pain he made himself keep talking. “Well, one thing led to another and next thing I know we’re in love. We didn’t get married until we were quite a bit older but every year of it was bliss. When I think about us two I see a lot of us between you and Sally. And I know how you’re feeling right now Rookie, Donna was 40 when she had a three car collision with a transport.” Doc’s voice began shaking, “She was injured very badly, nearly paralyzed. I stayed by her every second until she died a year later from health complications. I know that agony of living in constant fear. That feeling when everything is foggy, grey and unknown. I really regret making you do this now McQueen. I’m sorry. We can go back to town right now if you want, I’ll understand.”
Lightning blinked back tears wondering how Doc had managed to hold his pain inside for so long. It was no wonder Doc was upset, he knew just how he felt. McQueen was overwhelmed with an indescribable feeling. Sally’s situation had reopened his old wounds and Doc had chosen to show him those scars rather than hide them. He wasn’t sure he’d ever even felt this close to his own father.
A few tears slithered down his hood as he gave Doc his deepest sympathy and sorrow. “I could say I’m sorry for your lose but I’m sure it’s not enough. All I can do is thank Donna and the Manufacturer for letting me meet the most incredible car on this planet.” His voice fell to a weak whisper, “I’m doing this race Doc. For Sally, and Donna, and you.”
*Weeps* So there you go, a glimpse into Doc's past. It was pretty short but I still hope you enjoyed it. Next chapter is going to throw a bit of a twist into the plot, that's all I can say. Please drop a comment!!! :nerd:I love your fanfic, MissCarrera! Although there were several grammatical errors, I think the structure of the story is very well laid out. Everything written seems to have a very defined purpose, and I like that in stories. I also really liked the part from the Cars video game behind the waterfall… I knew exactly what it was as soon as you wrote about it being narrow and dangerous. 
Looking forward to the next chapter, so keep up the good work! 
Snipe! Hey there! Thanks for the great feedback! Yeah, I try my best to root out the grammar errors but I always miss a few. Something I should work on I suppose! I am so happy you knew what I was talking about at that part! LOL, that’s my favourite Cars video game. And as promised, I said I was going to post a second chapter this week to make up for the missed one last week so here it is…
CHAPTER FIFTEEN
“Look it! Her eyes is openin’!” a loud Southern voice exclaimed from her left side.
“Shh, let her get her bearings,” a soothing one replied from her right.
Her eyes felt heavy but she managed to open them to the bright artificial lighting. The room smelt sterile and the air surrounding her was cool. The sensation felt like de ja vu, reminding her of her first night in Radiator Springs after breaking down. Slowly she gained the knowledge she was in Doc’s clinic.
A fuzzy static sound came from the corner. In a faint daze she located the small portable television. She watched McQueen’s image captured within its tiny frame. At last she awoke to the reality; she was alive.
“Miss Sally? You ok?” Mater asked gently.
She quickly met his inquisitive gaze and smiled weakly, “Mater…hey there. What are you doing here? Where’s Doc?”
Mater grinned with pride, “Oh boy Miss Sally! You’ve missed a bit! Doc’s outta here wit Lightnin’! He told me I best stay here wit yur pal Justin ‘til you woke up.”
Sally’s eyes widened and she felt sick. She tried to drive forward but stopped when she felt the surge of pain from beneath. She held back a whimper as Justin emerged from her other side. He carefully manoeuvred his way around the medical equipment to park directly in front of her.
“Don’t freak out Sal. I know what I’ve done, it was all wrong. Chick convinced me to do it straight out of jealously. I was out of my mind with anger so I agreed. When it came time though I regretted it so much, I saw what a mistake I was making. After we took off I snuck off to go back for you. You probably don’t remember but McQueen found you first. I wound up here soon after and he and I spoke. He’s a great guy, and he trusted me to stay here with you in case you woke. Him and Doc are still at the big race but I promised them I’d take care of you. That’s all I ever wanted to do…” he trailed off.
Sally was blown away. He’d committed the crime and was accepting full responsibility. Suddenly she was struck with a rush of impulse. This was the guy she had known all her life, the one who looked out for her no matter what. He was the one beaming at her as she won her first case, the one who had held her tire while she got that pin stripping tattoo. She was hit with a sudden urge to kiss him one last time.
She knew it was wrong, utterly unfaithful. She couldn’t fight the feeling though. She’d inherited the trait from her mother, one she’d never liked. But it was that same streak of impulse that had gotten her the tattoo, made her almost kiss McQueen that day at Wheel Well and most important, told her to run away from L.A. If she kissed him it could go one of two ways she figured. Either it would bring her final closure or stir up old emotions. The curiosity was irresistible and she could see the desire reflected in Justin’s own eyes.
Justin could feel himself begin heating up. Sally hadn’t looked at him that way in an eternity. He wanted to deny the look but he couldn’t, it was so distinct. He remembered every lonely night after she’d left. The ones he had spent yearning for that exact look, one he would never forget.
“Mater, why don’t you fetch Flo for me?” he asked carefully.
“Why sure! Be back soon then!” Mater answered eagerly before speeding off.
They were all alone now. Justin stared intensely into her eyes, sensing the fire glowing just behind them. He’s gotten this far but the risk was still too much. However, he couldn’t leave the words unspoken. “Sally…do you want,” he began.
“Don’t speak,” was all she returned.
Her response caught him off-guard but he took it as his cue. Cautiously he pulled forward inching towards her. He closed his eyes and listened to her gasp as their lips brushed for a split second. He breathed softly onto her lips before making contact.
Sally jerked away and flung her eyes open. She grimaced from the ripping pain of her undercarriage and caught her breathe. “No Justin. I knew there was a reason I chose not to bring you into my future,” she stared longingly at the TV, “and I think this is it.”
Now I hope the ending of this one makes sense, it's kind of like a read-between-the-lines type thing. Justin sure likes to stir things up now doesn't he? :sunglasses:Great chapter! I’m pretty sure I got that last part… I’ll have to wait until the next chapter for verification, but it wasn’t confusing at all. I can’t wait to see what’ll happen between Lightning, Sally, and Justin… sounds like we may have a rift growing between them! 
Looking forward to the next chapter!
Alright, I’m glad that part made sense. Hehehe, yes you will have to wait and find out! I’m looking at getting the next chapter out possibly tomorrow. 
Just as I hoped, I’ve got the next one ready! This isn’t one of my favourite chapters and it’s kind of short but I know we’ve all been waiting to find out “Does McQueen win the Piston Cup?!”. This chapter also flickers a bit between places so I added some dashes to help keep things easier to follow.
CHAPTER SIXTEEN
“There are only ten laps left now kid, better make ‘em count,” Doc directed over McQueen’s radio.
Against even his own expectations Lightning had secured himself a place in third position. He was currently trailing no more than a second behind Chick Hicks.
“If you’re ready for it I think you could snag Chick’s spot real soon,” Doc advised.
“I’ve been waiting all season for this! Hell yeah I’m ready for it!”
“Alright, keep calm. Just continue drafting him ‘til I give you the signal,” he ordered.
McQueen swallowed with anticipation. He couldn’t wait to see Chick’s expression as he stole into second. One last time, Lightning prayed that Sally was watching him back in Radiator Springs. Then he locked all his focus on the track, preparing for his move.
Shortly later his moment came. Exiting turn three his radio crackled, “Go for it.”
McQueen gunned his engine down the straight-away. He slid to the inside with effortless grace and found himself side-by-side with Chick. Chick’s face portrayed shock and fury as he realized what was about to happen. McQueen returned his look with a dark, hateful glance. At last, McQueen roared his engine and finished with a clean pass.
“Nice job, Rookie,” Doc complimented from the sidelines.
Lightning grinned, “You know, I’m not a rookie anymore Doc.”
Doc chuckled, “You’ll always be a rookie to me hot-shot. Now come on, let’s finish this race strong.”
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Back in town the residents were cramped around the TV in Sally’s room. The receptionist had protested against it at first but gave in after Mater’s pleas. After their little fluff, Justin had taken off for a drive while the remainder of the gang stayed to help Sally cheer McQueen on.
It was the final three laps and McQueen was holding steady in second place. This was the best he’d done all season and Sally’s heart swelled with joy for him. She knew he wouldn’t be able to claim first but he’d be content with at least beating Chick. Once they took Chick to court he would probably never have to see him race again. Chick would be out of his life, just what he wanted.
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“Again, congratulations on your second place finish today Lightning. I’m telling you, next year the Cup is all yours buddy.”
“Thanks so much King. I really appreciate your words but if you’ll excuse me I have to hit the road. I’ve got a bride back home that I don’t want to leave waiting,” McQueen responded politely.
The King’s eyes grew with surprise. “Well, I won’t keep you then. I’ll see you around,” he nodded in understanding.
Little did King know that McQueen was hoping he did still have a bride awaiting his return. He quickly gathered up the crew and had them board their respective trailers. Before climbing into Mack himself he stopped for a moment. He gazed out to the bright lights of the track with its milling crowds and hot, black pavement. He was glad he’d come in second, for today he couldn’t wait to flee the spotlight.
Sorry folks, it's not all butterflies and rainbows! McQueen didn't win this time! But I tried to watch my grammar in this one, so tell me if you find any errors so I can wipe them out! Any other thoughts on the chapter or story in general are great too! :slight_smile:Grammatically, this chapter was excellent. I’ve been reading a lot of Cars fanfics the past few days, and it really makes a difference when words are spelled correctly. Doesn’t throw you off the story so much. I suppose this was a bit of an “in-between” for the story though, right? Worked out alright for me, being short and all, cause I don’t really have a lot if time today. I liked the part where Lightning passed Chick… when I read it, I visualized when Lightning passed Chick at the beginning of the actual movie. Not sure if that was intended or not…
Anyways, that was another great chapter, looking forward to the next one, and keep up the good work!
My grammar question was directed at you so thank you for answering. I’m pleased that it was all good and I totally agree. I read Cars fan fics all the time and spelling/grammar mistakes can be a huge turn-off. Also, yes, that is exactly what I intended it to be like! You know just what I’m talking about which is awesome to hear. Yeah, I would call this an in-between chapter. The next one is more emotional but there’s one coming up that I just can’t wait to write. You can probably guess what it is though so I’ll keep the plot to myself!
Now, I normally aim to release one chapter a week but I’ve had some spare time so I thought I’d give you the next one earlier. This one gets really cheesy near the end but bear with me, this is a romance story and it has some meaning behind it.
CHAPTER SEVENTEEN
Dusk had turned to dark as Sally stared longingly at the heavy metal doors. She had faked sleep to drive the nurse out of her room several hours earlier. Now she was alone with her unsettled heart in the empty clinic room. Never before had she ached so much to hear Lightning’s voice. With her strong-willed personality the decision to wait up all night for him came without a doubt.
It was well into the night when she finally heard Mack’s loud engine rumble down the street. The team’s chatter rang out clearly through the still silence. A mix of Doc’s gruff voice, Fillmore and Sarge’s bickering and strands of Italian floated through the open window. She heard not McQueen’s voice but his engine first. Her heart fluttered as she listened to him as he tore down the street.
The next two minutes passed in a blur of actions. McQueen busted through the heavy double doors as if they were velvet curtains. Their eyes met for an instant before he was upon her with uncontrolled kisses.
After welcoming his passionate lips she pulled away while her eyes flooded unexpectedly. His loving touch had triggered a pang of guilt from within her.
His eyes gazed at her, brimmed with threatening tears. He choked back this new, unknown emotion and whispered, “Sally…” He observed the monitors and wires surrounding her small frame. “You’re…” he started.
“Alive?” she finished, “I know. And it’s only because of you Stickers.”
McQueen smiled gently. An indescribable feeling washed over him. Pride, love, disbelief, he didn’t know. But this moment felt better than any race he’d ever experienced.
“I’m sorry about your race today. Still no Piston Cup I guess, but you were amazing to me,” Sally encouraged.
“Thanks Sal. There will always be another season next year anyways,” he replied.
“That’s a long wait from now…” she said.
McQueen grinned adoringly back at her. For once, the words he felt rolled right off his tongue, “You know Sal, sometimes its harder waiting for the little things. Like waiting to wake up next to you or kiss your pretty face again.”
Sally was breathless as a single tear slipped from her eyes.
“Funny thing is, I didn’t even plan that one,” McQueen admitted sheepishly.
Sally smiled, “Maybe that’s because sometimes it’s easier to say the words that come from our heart instead of ours minds.”
Lightning simply kissed her fender in response. He snuggled up warmly beside her amongst the nearby machines. They sat quietly, both of them nearly falling prey to sleep.
“I love you Sally,” he said tenderly.
“Which was that from?” Sally asked carefully.
“Both,” he answered.
Sally lifted her windshield with a perplexed look.
“My heart ‘cause I feel it and my mind ‘cause I can’t stop thinking it,” he concluded.
“Oh, Stickers,” she sighed, “I love you too.”
:laughing: I told you it was pretty cheesy at the end! It gets better though, I promise.This last chapter is my favorite chapter (so far!). No lie. I LOVED IT. Or maybe I’m just a sucker for cheese. 
But I think it was SUPER sweet and it had me going “Awwww!” more than once. You are excellent at writing Lightning/Sally fluff.
“My heart ‘cause I feel it and my mind ‘cause I can’t stop thinking it,” he concluded.
This part did me in, the “Awwwwwww!!!”-ing would not stop.
I also like the story of Doc and Donna, I think it was super cool of you to put that in there. And I’m happy Lightning beat Chick, at least!
I’m super excited to see what’s going to happen next! I wonder if Lightning will ever find out about the little kiss between Justin and Sally and what his reaction will be (if he finds out. I personally hope he does, cause as much as I am for a sucker for cheese, I’m an even bigger sucker for drama. ) Also, what’s going to happen to Chick? Will he get what he deserves? Let’s hope. 
Update soon, my friend! <3
Awww! Thanks so much! Yeah, that’s my favourite line of that chapter personally. Hehehe, so many questions you are yet to find the answer too! I’m looking at getting an update out tonight so some things should be revealed then. Oh, and I’m glad you liked the Doc and Donna bit. I didn’t originally plan that but when I did put it in there I didn’t want it to be the typical bringing in a new OC thing that everyone always writes just so Doc can have a love interest.
I’ve already gotten up to chapter twenty-two hand-written but it’s getting them typed up that holds me back. But, with that said, I still have a new chapter to present you with! Enjoy!!!
CHAPTER EIGHTEEN
The next five days blended together like the recollection of an old dream. Day and night, Sally was kept cooped up in the stale-aired clinic room. McQueen stayed by her side nearly every moment he could in support. Residents drifted in and out to send her their best wishes and sympathy on her recovery. She noticed that through all the visits Justin made not one appearance.
Slowly, over the days, wires were removed from her body. The room seemed to grow as one-by-one the monitors were wheeled away. Her check-ups and tests became fewer and far between.
Doc sensed her restlessness and finally granted her freedom. “Good news, Sally. You’re fluid levels are back in balance and the puncture is healing well. Based on your condition we’re ready to release you,” he casually said.
Sally looked at McQueen before grinning, “Oh, thank you, Doc! I’ve been dying to get out of here!”
“I know, I know. We’re going to give you some pain killers in case you need them and daily antibiotics until that wound heals up,” Doc’s eyes shifted to McQueen then back to Sally, “You take it easy though. I know you two…McQueen you better not tempt her into anything!”
McQueen’s eyes darted around the room, unsure of what to say.
Sally laughed, “Doc! Well, don’t worry; we have some business to take care of first. The lawsuit against Chick remember?”
“You’re right. I suppose we’ll be in touch soon then.”
McQueen broke from his awkward, shy trance. “Sal, I thought you were dying to get out of here?” he whispered. He’d spent enough time in the clinic himself and was eager to leave.
At his interruption she cast him a side-long look. Oh, what a kid. Bored already! she mused.
Doc, who with his old age had still picked up on what McQueen had said, shot her an amused smile. As if he had read her mind he nodded goodbye allowing the couple to escape the clinic.
Outside, the feeling of hot morning sun enveloped her body immediately. She was too young to be gone without fresh air this long.
McQueen looked on from her side, lost in a state of awe. The sunlight reflected off her body as naturally as the clouds moseyed along through the light, blue sky. He found himself wondering how she managed to be this stunning without even trying.
Sally exhaled in a relaxed and dreamy manner. She peered over at Lightning’s goggle-eyed expression and bit her lip with flattered embarrassment.
He gave an apologetic but dorky grin, “S-sorry,” he stuttered.
Sally batted her eyes playfully, “Come on, we’ve got work to do!”
OK, I lied, this one doesn't reveal much. <img src="//pixarplanet-forums.s3.dualstack.us-west-1.amazonaws.com/original/2X/4/4d009dd141f26b0a611a818d8d3d4fc9f50168cf.gif" width="15" height="15" alt="8D" title="Chuckle"/> Its a bit of a filler but things are gonna start picking up. All in good time my friends, can't rush through the necessary stuff. I hope you liked it, personally the end part of this chapter is my favourite. :sunglasses:Doc’s eyes shifted to McQueen then back to Sally, “You take it easy though. I know you two…McQueen you better not tempt her into anything!”
McQueen’s eyes darted around the room, unsure of what to say.
Teeheee! Lightning, you bad boy. We know what you’re up to.
I like this chapter! Even though, it was just a filler. It’s still important! At least Sally’s health has improved, yay! I’m wondering where my boy, Justin, went off to. I’m sure he’ll pop up soon, though. Your grammar is excellent in this chapter. Actually, the past few chapters have had perfect grammar! As always, looking forward to you next update! <3
LOL! You liked that huh? I really like the interest that my readers seem to have in Justin, especially since I created him myself. And yes, he will be returning in the very next chapter actually! Good to hear that the grammar is fine too, I can really see why writers have an editor. My word program is pretty good at catching the mistakes though which helps!
The past two chapters were short, yes, and didn’t really further the story, but were nevertheless fun to read. I like that part at the end of the latest chapter when they drove out of the hospital and Lightning was all mystified, and the “dorky grin”. And gee whiz, what’s Justin up to now? The grammer is so good in these two that I didn’t think about it at all, for good or bad, until after I’d read the them. Your character development is good too… I think you’re doing a great job at keeping their characters true to the original without making things awkward. Anyways, both chapters were great, and I’m looking forward to the next!