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Postby thedriveintheatre » Fri Oct 17, 2008 12:58 pm

I have not 'talked' to you before (because I'm a greenhorn on Pixar Planet), but I find your fanfic interesting. Your school for superheroes kinda reminds me of Z.oom or the Mutant Academy. I'd like to see your spin on it. And I really hope your problems work out okay. I'd love to see the rest of your story. I'll write a more detailed review at a later date. See ya around!
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Postby Al-Bob » Fri Oct 17, 2008 2:25 pm

Vekoma wrote:Sorry for the lack of updates but at the moment I don't really have a lot of feeling for writing.

A while ago some bad things happened in the family and im still having some serious moodswings and issues now and then that just makes a hell out of my life at the moment. I hope to have a update ready soon though.


Sorry to hear about that...please take your time.
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Postby Vekoma » Sun Dec 07, 2008 9:12 pm

New page up!
I hope to pick up some pace again soon now I am feeling a lot better lately.
(I also started with my art again albeit a bit slowly, it's been a while since I made something.)
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Postby The Star Swordsman » Mon Dec 08, 2008 5:55 pm

Its glad to read from this story again Vekoma. Really nice chapter. The farther I read, the more intense it got. i really loved the ending. I wonder [spoil]what the shadowy creature really is.[/spoil] I guess I won't know until the next update. Keep up the great work.

PS: I think you spelled someone's name wrong. Frozone's real name is spelled Lucius. :wink:
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Postby Vekoma » Mon Dec 08, 2008 6:04 pm

Oh. right, my bad ><
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Postby The Star Swordsman » Mon Dec 08, 2008 8:12 pm

Don't worry about it. :wink: I'm just glad to know that you haven't abandoned this story.
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Postby Vekoma » Wed Dec 10, 2008 7:19 pm

No update on the misterious creature yet, as it was time to switch to the Parr home again.

The song Violet was listening to was: 'Say the same' by 'Hoobastank'

Link: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=wS6sCaP-aW4
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Postby The Star Swordsman » Thu Dec 11, 2008 12:44 am

Wow, that was such a sad chapter. I feel very sorry for Violet. It makes me wanna cry with he. I'll tell you that I have experienced a similar situation like hers before. Well, a great chapter once again. I can't wait for an update.
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Postby Al-Bob » Thu Dec 11, 2008 6:03 pm

Wow...both chapters were well written and had significant meaning on the story.

Review-9/10
The gore and blood waws a little too much for me but the idea behind it was great. Can't wait to see who "Shadow" is...
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Postby Vekoma » Mon Dec 15, 2008 1:19 pm

New page is up now and new characters are introduced!

Some info: Most of the story I am writing down is something I already had worked out for a comic I was going to make but never got off the ground.
Some pages were made in the past of the introduction for the comic, but I decided to skip those and focus on one thing that was supposed to become a side story of the main arc in the second year.
In my opinion the whole superschool has a lot of potential and I wanted to dig deeper into that and set the main arc (the one with the shadow) aside to become the sidestory and set my focus on the school and its adventures there.
Aaron, his mother Rose and his father John were new supers who would be relocated to Metroville early in the main story of the first year.
The old character pages that were made:

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The info given here and there isn't very accurate anymore but most of it still is the way I visioned it.
Aaron's superpowers are a bit different now as he is more of a "copier" of superpowers.
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Postby The Star Swordsman » Tue Dec 16, 2008 12:19 am

Great job with the new chapter and introducing us to Aaron. Really great and strong character. I can't wait to see how he gets involved with Violet and her adventures. Keep it up. I love this story.
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Postby Al-Bob » Tue Dec 16, 2008 1:17 am

The Character of Aaron was a great added twist to the story and should play out to be of great importance. Will wait to see what his character is really like since he seems rather upset all the time. He should fit in with the old Violet very much.

Review-9/10
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Postby The Star Swordsman » Thu Mar 05, 2009 8:02 pm

I really loved the last two chapters. Let me post my individual reviews for both of them.

1) Seems like Violet is going to really enjoy this school. Who knows what adventures will come while she is over there. A really enjoyable chapter. I hope that Vi makes good friends and does well in her classes. Then again, if she did run into a couple of bullies, then that could create a really nice, enjoyable side-conflict. Keep it up. I loved how Bob told how Helen was once like Violet back at the school. Really nice description.

2) My biggest focus for this chapter was the kind of games they would play at the Super School. I love your idea of capture the flag. In fact, i have got a similar game in mind when thinking of possible games for a Super Hero School, but explaining it would take up so much time. :lol: Great chapters. I can't wait to read more.
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Postby MadonnaAaron » Fri Dec 06, 2019 4:56 pm

A113 wrote:It's getting better by the chapter! :o

One thing: at the end of each post, it says "toughts" sintead of "thoughts[/b]".


Yeah same. Loving it.
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