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Random stuff I've written that is bizarrely not Pixarish

PostPosted: Wed May 12, 2010 12:47 am
by IncredigirlVirginia
This is not a "fan poem", so I put it here.


A Lovely Place



The world could be a lovely place, If we would let it be
The world could be a lovely place, If only we could see
What we’re really doing when we make someone cry
There are so many people who just want to die
We scorn them; we ruin their lives
They want to cut themselves with knives
Can’t we be kind?
Stop tormenting that kid’s mind
I think we should love these people as the one who loves us
We should not fight, mock, or fuss
They have as much right as you or I
To live free of fear that we will make them cry
The world could be a lovely place, If we would let it be
The world could be a lovely place, If only we could see
I will choose to love them, just to let them be
For they are the ones who can really see
What a lovely place the world could be

PostPosted: Wed May 12, 2010 2:25 am
by Rac_Rules
Very nice. It had a good message, and I like how it stayed mostly simple and somber instead of going into those "Waaah humanity is a horrible monster and doesn't deserve to exist" tangents poems like these often do. And I agree, for the most part.

PostPosted: Wed May 12, 2010 8:52 am
by lizardgirl
That's a lovely poem, IncredigirlVirginia. It's simplicity means the message is all the more potent, and once again your use of a strong rhyming scheme keeps it flowing really well. You're quite the poet! :D

Oh, and I've moved this to the Non-Pixar Art section of the forums as that's probably the best place for this thread.

PostPosted: Wed May 12, 2010 11:24 am
by IncredigirlVirginia
Thanks, guys!! :D

Re: Random stuff I've written that is bizarrely not Pixarish

PostPosted: Fri Nov 25, 2011 8:48 pm
by IncredigirlVirginia
This is for my best friend's birthday, so don't stone me!

The Best Girl I've Ever Met

You're always nice to everyone, even when you shouldn't be
I wish I could be nice like you, and not so much like me
You always give everyone a second chance
You shower everyone with acceptance
It's true, I wish I was like you, but not in jealousy
It's in admiration, because you're wonderful, you see
It's your birthday, I hope it's great
Because you're so special, you deserve happiness on this date
I hope one day you'll see
Just how much you've helped me
Just by being my friend
You've made me a better person in the end
I love you, as though you were my own sister
You've shaken me up, like a twister
You've impacted my life as much as anyone I know
I hope one day I can come to help you so
So, what I mean is you're the greatest friend I've ever had
I wouldn't trade your friendship for anything, that would truly be bad
I hope your birthday is wonderful
I hope it's really swell
I can't give you any present as great as you letting me be your pal

Re: Random stuff I've written that is bizarrely not Pixarish

PostPosted: Tue Jan 10, 2012 12:31 am
by Pixarfan91
Those are good. I like the friend one a lot. You should make one about us! :)

Oh yeah, spammer. Go Away!

Re: Random stuff I've written that is bizarrely not Pixarish

PostPosted: Tue Jan 10, 2012 1:51 am
by Leirin
I don't think I've even seen this thread before! :shock: Aww, the poems are lovely. I was very moved by the poem for your best friend because I know the feeling exactly. :D They're wonderful.

Re: Random stuff I've written that is bizarrely not Pixarish

PostPosted: Sun Jan 15, 2012 6:02 pm
by IncredigirlVirginia
Thanks David and Leirin!! :D

Spammer, I will not even say what I want to say, for I would certainl;y be banned, and then smote by God.

Re: Random stuff I've written that is bizarrely not Pixarish

PostPosted: Sun Jan 15, 2012 8:21 pm
by Pixarfan91
No problem.

Re: Random stuff I've written that is bizarrely not Pixarish

PostPosted: Tue Jan 17, 2012 1:00 am
by Leirin
Wow weird, I've never seen a spammer come on this section of the board. :? I'm sorry.

Re: Random stuff I've written that is bizarrely not Pixarish

PostPosted: Tue Jan 17, 2012 4:45 am
by PixarTeo
Me and my brother(Pixarmilan) Love these poems. It is so lovely. :D

Re: Random stuff I've written that is bizarrely not Pixarish

PostPosted: Tue Jan 17, 2012 5:07 am
by pixarmilan
Great poems! I think they both have great messages and great writing.

Re: Random stuff I've written that is bizarrely not Pixarish

PostPosted: Tue Jan 17, 2012 1:16 pm
by thewhitefrozone
I really like these. The first one is awesome!

Re: Random stuff I've written that is bizarrely not Pixarish

PostPosted: Tue Jan 24, 2012 11:14 pm
by IncredigirlVirginia
Thank you guys!!!! :D

Re: Random stuff I've written that is bizarrely not Pixarish

PostPosted: Wed Jan 25, 2012 6:15 am
by PixarTeo
Your welcome! :mrgreen: