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Postby Mitch » Tue Oct 30, 2007 10:05 pm

The Star Swordsman - Heheh. Thanks, dude. As soon as I have some free time to write I'll get back to the drawing board. ;)

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Postby lennonluvr9 » Mon Nov 05, 2007 6:02 pm

Yeah school has a way of stifling the creative flow (or least making less time for it) but no worries, I still havent read the last chapter you posted!
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Postby Mitch » Wed Nov 07, 2007 10:12 pm

lennonluvr9 - Heheh. Yes, indeed. Studies, a constant workload, and a job sure do take a lot out of a person. I'll be sure to get back into the art of writing as soon as I have the time to compose a paragraph or two onto a piece of paper (or the computer screen), though. ;)

Take your time with the chapters, by the way. No worries. :)

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Postby kageri » Thu Nov 22, 2007 7:53 pm

Well, first I must say, fantabulous work, madame. It's awesome to see how you interpreted things before the movie came out.

Second, a little bit of concrit: actually, don't worry about perusing the thesaurus. Brevity is the soul of wit, as they say, and an army of adjectives can weigh down a story. Which is not to say looking through a thesaurus is bad, since sometimes it's necessary if you feel you've used a word too many times or are being redundant, but not for everything, because sometimes simple is good. Like, "midnight-painted". I think you could just say "black" there, especially in describing a wastebasket. Just don't fall into the harlequin-romance-novel-y trap of "orbs" instead of "eyes" and stuff like that. Which you haven't, but y'know.

That's just an anal nitpicky thing. Your writing's totally awesome -- that last chapter with Colette could practically be a fic on its own. I love those little slice-of-life vignettes, where there's not really any action going on but you get a look at the inner workings of the characters' minds.
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Postby Mitch » Thu Nov 29, 2007 4:58 am

kageri - First of all, I can't neglect to say that you should write a story, dude. Your vocabulary and uncanny way of inserting a bit of wit into almost everything is most intriguing. I like it. Heheh. ;)

Secondly, I thank you very much for both the comments and critique! The latter, especially, is most appreciated. Truth be told, you're not the only one who has warned me of taking an overdose of "thesaurutheesis" (thesauri? ha...) adjectives and the like. I'm constantly striving to learn new words and apply them to everyday life, but I see what you (and others) mean in that I kinda...tip the bucket a little too far over sometimes. I must...cut...back...on...the words...! :P (snigger)

Again, thank you for the compliments and such. I love to write and would do it more if I had the time, but blast these clocks -- I don't have enough seconds to fill in the capsules! *extracts a hammer...*

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Postby kageri » Fri Nov 30, 2007 12:17 am

You're very welcome! And daw, thanks! Perhaps eventually I'll post those drabbles I wrote a little while back for that 100 themes thing. Except I didn't write 100 and they're not as wordy as I usually like to be since, y'know, only 100 words each. It's a CHALLEEEEENGE!

Yeah, you obviously have an impressive vocabulary already -- when I write I just write what comes to mind and go back later and fix it if I overused a word or something, which I tend to do and am very anal about. "What?! That sentence has two words ending in -ing! It makes them kind of rhyme! IT DISRUPTS THE FLOW, I MUST FIX THIS!" and so on.

Hah, I feel ya on the "learning new words" thing. I always hear cool words and am like "That word is awesome! I must use it sometime!" but always forget them. So I write them down. I have a notepad file of my favorite words. I'm weird. And I feel ya on the lack of time! For me it's usually a lack of inspiration. So when I get into a new fandom I go on a creative frenzy because the inspiration could leave me at any moment! Definitely keep writing, though. Your interpretations of the characters are wonderful. The aforementioned Colette chapter... it's so... Colette!

But yeah, sometimes the first thing that comes to mind is the best. It's like that Special Something that's in a first pencil sketch. When it's traced it looks cleaner and more polished but it loses some of the spontaneity.

...did I just make an art analogy in a 300-word post about writing? Dear god. Can you tell I wasn't good at sports as a small child?
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Postby Mitch » Fri Nov 30, 2007 12:45 am

kageri - Haha! Yeah, I feel ya'.... And you're welcome! ;)


kageri wrote:"What?! That sentence has two words ending in -ing! It makes them kind of rhyme! IT DISRUPTS THE FLOW, I MUST FIX THIS!" and so on.


Pfff.... (snigger)

kageri wrote:Hah, I feel ya on the "learning new words" thing. I always hear cool words and am like "That word is awesome! I must use it sometime!" but always forget them. So I write them down. I have a notepad file of my favorite words. I'm weird.


I must be weird, too, because I do the exact same thing. And yeah, exactly. I'll flip through the thesaurus just to find one or two words and end up glancing at ten others in the process.... :P

kageri wrote:But yeah, sometimes the first thing that comes to mind is the best. It's like that Special Something that's in a first pencil sketch. When it's traced it looks cleaner and more polished but it loses some of the spontaneity.


Yeah! Like you get this wonderful concotion of color into your brain and feel as if you have write it down immediately, otherwise you're going to forget it. And then you forget it and the whole composition sucks.... (snigger)

Again and again and again, thank you for ze compliments! I shall return to writing as soon as I find the time and the space and the freakin' inspiration. Woah, I sound like Linguini...

"We were just talking about my inspiration."

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Postby Colette Linguini » Mon Jan 14, 2008 7:00 am

Hi, Mitch!
I have so many things to say about your writing... Where to start!?
Well, I've just gone through all 10 pages of this post, scanning for your chapters, then quickly reading them (I would do it at a more leisurely pace, but you've written a lot, girl!). I read your chapters from before the movie came out, about your period of creative deprivation (which I totally understand and I'm glad you're over it), and then your newest Colette chapter, the only one written after the release of the movie.

And you have always been so good about reviewing my stories, I can't believe I haven't done so until now. Sorry! But in defense of myself -- again, you've written a lot!

So let me start...

Despite the fact that she is one of the best cooks in her class, Collete never fails to paste a smile on one of
her customer's or fellow coworkers' faces. No one knows where she disappears to past midnight, which is when
her shift ends.


So that was a quote by you when you were explaining your ideas about all your characters. And, no offense, but WOW you were off about Colette being all cheerful! hehe. I just found that sort of interesting. But I will say, that the second sentence of that is quite reminiscent of the movie, because like you said, she does have an element of mystery. So Colette is much more cynical and more of a realist than you made her out to be, but I like you early version. The way you have her putting on a happy face for the show which is the restaurant, then you have her go wherever she goes at midnight, and you have her forgotten dreams about life in Manhattan --- this is all so romantic! You could write an alternate universe Colette fic! hehe!

So yeah, I'm putting a lot of emphasis on Colette again, like I always do, but I can't help it! I feel the character. I friggin' am that character! haha. But it seems like you are the same way about Remy, yes? Which brings me to my next point.

I love how you write Remy. It seems like it's so natural for you. I guess that comes from understanding the character so well. Oh, and Genevieve is a precious original character. So brava!

I know my thoughts are scattered in this, but bear with me here... I'm tired. :D

In your chapter where you introduced the chefs and the kitchen and Gusteau and Linguini, etc. I did not understand that coy little exchange between Linguini and Colette. What was the thing with the 8 euro, and then he gives her 20 euro or something, then he texts her saying "sucker"? I was completely lost on what just happened? I got a hint of Colette offering... something *coughprostitutioncough* for money... with the tugging of the shirt... WHAT?! the dialogue was adorable, but I was just lost... was there a sort of bet? or playful joke? Me=completely lost. Sorry, I'm not trying to bash your work, just trying to understand. Because I liked the whole gist of it. :)

Anyway. I have to say that I loved your very last Colette fic. That, as some people have said, could be an independent story! It's adorable. I love how you mapped out her morning routine. The smashing of the alarm clock was hilarious, yet understandable at the same time. Also very in character. All the descriptions were so, well, descriptive! They all inspired some great imagery. I really enjoyed reading it. Were it on FF.net, I'd favorite it! hehe. I understand that you're busy -- so am I. I don't know what I'm doing here! -- but I'd love to read more of your writing. So when you continue, I'll check them out for sure.

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