Al-Bob's Story Thread

Fandom Fan Fiction
#1

Should i attempt this story?

  • Yah-It has good potential
  • Nah-Story just a little too weak for production

0 voters

I’ve got an idea or fan fiction to propose to reviewers…

My story is a sequal to the Incredibles with certain changes.

The Plot is as follows;

Van Estaban a distant relative of Bomb Voyage is befiended by a known enemy of the incredibles. The two attempt to create a series of inventions and productions to destroy the entire race of supers. Unfortunitely the government gets word and sets forth the incredibles to defeat this new foe. Can they defeat this new foe or will the inventions and creations utterly overwhelm them?
Includes new characters; Flex, Heather, Van Estaban…

#2

Oh yes, it sounds very, ver intresting! I would love to read something like this. I believe that this story will excite a lot of readers. GO on ahead and start it up!

Kinda conicidental, but I have a similar story to yous (about a villain trying to eliminate the SUper race.). BUt I can’t wait to see where you’ll go with it.

#3

It might have potential but on what i red it’s a little weak, but i’m sure you can come up with something diverting ! :wink:

#4

I love new inventions, and The Incredibles, go for it! :smiley:

#5

The Star Swordsman shouldn’t every superhero movie have some plot to destroy the opposite side??

Pixar.Rocks. Thanks for the comment…now i now it will require a little more meat.

A113 Thanks for your post it helps encourage me…

Okay the first post wil be within the next two weeks…
(for precaution incase something turns up)

#6

Al-Bob: I disagree. NOt every SUper Hero story requires the villain to destroy the oppisition. Take the Incredibles for example. All Syndrome wanted was to become a respected Super Hero. Destroying the Incredibles wasn’t part of his plan, but it was nessecary for him to do so so he wouldn’t be stopped.

On another note, I can’t wait to read it. Good luck.

#7

Just posted Chapter 1…its rather dull since it introduces a little bit about the book so bear with me.

ANnther episode will hopefully air next week. (saturday)

Here it is-
pixarplanet.com/forums/viewt … 889#102889

#8

Cool Al-Bob. I’m reading it right now. You’ll see my comments later.

#9

Second Chapter Coming Soon

#10

I saw it. I read it. I posted what I thought in that thread.

#11

Story completed…will contuinue to use this thread to talk about next stories…

List;
Monsters Inc. 2 (halted)
Walle 2 (optional)
Toy Story 3 (growing)
Interactive Story (taking flight)
Ansonia (steady)

these are my stories that are currently under construction…if you guys have any hints advice please feel free…i always look for inspiration.

#12

I’ll tell you I am super excited for the Interactive story.

#13

great i thought it was pretty whimpy when i first thought of it…rather lame storyline.

#14

here is something else…

The Terrific Three-

An Adventure Series Following the Three New Supers Dash (Superfast), Electragirl, and Flex and the new villians they meet.

rate 1-10…

#15

Hmmm, Well, it does have Dash in it. But if you are going to put in your own characters in a sequel, I would let them develop a little more before going to one. So part of me is a little excited for it, and part of me isn’t.

#16

i see…i would need to envelope the reader with Flex and Electragirl a little more…will work that part out…

#17

What you could’ve done is extended the story to more chapters. The longer you get a reader to read about your own characters, the more they will become attached to them.

#18

yah…attached just like your avatar :slight_smile:

#19

A way you can tell that your readers are attached to your own characters is when they start feeling for them. When your characters are happy, the readers are happy.

#20

exactly…will work on prologue for Terrific Three…