Droid Revenge

I idea for the droid brain was derived from the movie when all of Mr. Incredible’s moves were already programmed into the robot. It does have an artificial memory system that it uses to learn but the reason Estababn wants it is becuase it has the fastest “processor” in the world. It could be attached to anything and instantly make decisions that could protect someone. Even when faced with Superhero’s.
Corecting “D”

oh and one more thing…to not get Kris mistaken with Chris i had to change the guys name…Dillion.

Chapter 5


Lucius was just as startled as Heather was when suddenly from the master bedroom of the Parr’s he was roused and forced into a kneeling position on the floor with his hands behind his back.

“Okay Old Man, where is the family?”

“They’re out for the night.”

“When will they return? “

“Sometime tonight or tomorrow.”

“Search the house for the boy. Bring him in here with the man.”

Soon Dash was sitting on his knees next to Lucius with three men tying their hands up.

“Are you okay Dash?”

“Yah, I’m okay although I don’t know who these guys are?”

“They’re just robbers come to vandalize and rob.”

The leader was soon back.

“You guys can stop that know…” the leader said although it suddenly sounded much higher in peak.

“Boss? Are you okay?”

“Yah I’m fine. I just got a sore throat all of the sudden.”

The Leader moved behind the two figures.

“You guys can go downstairs and get some of the food now.”

As soon as the men left the room the leader leaned over the kneeling figures and started to untie the ropes.

Shhhh…don’t make any noise. I didn’t know that your family could get robbed Dash.”

“Heather!!”

Shhhhh!!!

“What are you doing?”

“I’m setting you guys free. They tried to get me downstairs but they missed. All right that is the cords loosened you guys can get up now.”

Dash and Lucius now arose to their feet.

“Dash, I want you to go into your room slowly and quietly and get something to get these robbers with.”

“Okay, I’ll be right back.”

Lucius and Dash were soon slowly moving towards their rooms and were soon inside.

Heather started to chuckle under her breath. She removed the leader’s cloak which was much too big for her.

Suddenly next to here came an object nearly as fast as light. He stopped as soon as he saw her.

“I got here as soon as I came when I heard the alar…who are you?”

Another figure soon appeared coming from the opposite direction.

“Hey Dash where are you. Ah there you ar….”

Dash and Frozone stared blankly as doorknobs at the new sight in front of them. Where Heather Price once stood was a green and grey super looking as cool as a cucumber.

“What?? Is my suit on backwards?”

Frozone looked at the new super then at Dash then at the cloak next to the Super.

“Heather??”

“What no…well I mean…okay it is me. I’m a super. So what. I mean even Dash is a super.” She said instinctively turning towards Dash.

Dash instantly started to protest feeling his face for his mask. It wasn’t there.

“Dash!! You’re not wearing your mask?!?”

After a very long silence Frozone continued.

“Well I guess we had better get acquainted with our newest member.” He said as he turned towards Heather. “What is your super name so that way we don’t have to call you Heather?”

“My name is Electragirl.”

Sweetest!!!

“Dash be quiet. What are your superpowers?”

“I possess the rare quality of pure energy, I’m extra strong in this super suit, and I can camouflage into any surrounding except for water.”

“Well, let’s go see how well we can work together.”

Three guards downstairs all saw their comrade Jimmy take the last slice of cake.

They didn’t see Frozone, Electragirl, and Dash come down the stairs.

The guards saw Jimmy start to act silly with John about having the last piece.

They didn’t see the blur go around them holding a rope.

“Auuuugh…OUCH!!!”

“There you go Fro. Three guards all in a row.”

“Good work Dash. Hey who is that over there?”

Dash turned around to the living room to see the leader of the gang. He was holding a little boy in one arm and a knife in the other.

“So you think your really smart getting my guards huh. Well how about now.”
And with the final remark the leader threw the youngster against the wall.

Keeping his eyes on the group he walked over to the prostrate figure and applied the knife to his neck.

“Dillon!” Electragirl screamed. “Do it!”

In a flash Dillon catapulted the man across the room hitting the wall. Dillon jumped across the room in a single bound picked the leader up and with a swift motion flung him out the window and into the yard.

Suddenly from the yard a loud wail was heard and another smash as Dillon tumbled back into the room bruised and bloody.

“That guy won’t give up” he said with his eyes flashing like fire. He leaped back outside only to be repulsed again.

This time as he entered into the room a sudden change had gone into Dillon. His clothes had changed from a dark shirt and short pants to a sleek dark green long sleeved shirt and pants. His face had changed from a scared and nervous character to a confident and smiling superhero. He flicked his hands and jumped back outside.

“Was that Dillon?” Frozone asked Heather who was quietly walking over to the window.

“Yah…that’s Dillon. We met five months ago when I first responded to an emergency with my superpowers. He helped me learn about being a super. He’s got a great arm.”

“Wait he’s a superhero?”

“Yep that’s right. Dillon and I have started a supers group at school. We are the only ones we know of but the group is lots of fun. We go out and help people when we get the chance.”

Dillon had just finished as Heather finished her explanation. His dark-green suit appeared to be black in the moonlight.

“Hi Heather how are you doing in your new suit?”

“Doing fine how is our little friend outside.”

“Snug as a bug against a tree.”

“Oh…Dillon this is Dash Parr and his friend Frozone. They’re the ones who were hosting the party for us.”

Frozone recovering from the shock of having the home invaded with villains and finding two new supers inside soon started to ask questions.

“Wait a minute let me get this straight. You are both friends from school and you both know that you are superheroes but you haven’t told anyone. You were over for the night and changed into your suits when we were attacked. Your real names are Heather and Dillon but your super names are Electragirl and…”

“Flex.”

“…and Flex”

“Your right Mr. Best. My name is Electragirl but my real name is Heather Price. This is Flex but his real name is…”

“I’ll tell them by name later.”

“No, you should tell them now. Besides they don’t know you exist.”

“Okay fine sure, my real name isn’t Dillon, its Chris, or Christopher. My full name is Christopher Parr.”

“Wait your Dash’s secret cousin?”

“That’s right.”

Chris then started to recount the last 5 years after he ran away from home. At the end of his adventure he told them about his powers.

“My abilities are very advanced for being a cousin. I can fly for short distances or long distances although longer ones are a lot harder to do. My arms can change into whatever I want them to be by just flicking them. I can also scan the air for information about stuff like gases, force fields, and invisible beings. This feature works great when people are hiding from me because I can scan for excessive carbon-dioxide emitting from a certain area.”

Once he finished Frozone took command. “So we have four supers who were attacked by robbers who were sent by a mysterious person.”

“Maybe they left some clues behind.” Flex replied.

As Dash looked around the house for clues Flex started to scan the air for information.

Soon the kids heard Frozone calling from the backyard. He had come across a heavy wrench that the villains had used.

“What is written on it?” Flex said as Frozone brought it inside.

“V.E.? Who writes V.E. on their devices?”

“Obviously this person does.”

“Is that an address?”

“Actually…it is.”

“East End Nomanisan.”


Al-Bob, I never got a chance to read your latest chapter yet, but stick to one chapter at a time per post? It kinda clutters up the boards.

okay i went ahead and kept the corrected text and saved it.

here is the next chapter and the other chapters are also corrected in their original posts.

(could i repost the story after i finish it?)

Why would you want to do that?

PS: I’m reading the new chapter right now.

Just becuase there have been so many changes in grammer. I guess it isn’t neccesary but would be a great way to close the thread.

Well, I wouldn’t. Posting the whole story would clutter the forums.

Ooh, intense chapter! I really, really enjoyed reading it. Keep it up. It gets more and more intense everytime.

Thanks, i probabely won’t repost it unless the story gets really popular and people flock in half-way through it.

Yes it will start to get intesive once the characters get started.

(one problem i had was introducing two new characters)

boy was that hard.

Well, I think you could’ve let the new character introduction slow down a little. I think it was a little too sudden. Once the henchmen attacked, they just suddenly came. You don’t have to change it, but next time, slow down a little.

i guess i could have introduced them in another fashion but when dash and frozone are helpless seemed like such a way to introduce helpers.

I guess i could have introduced them later (thinking of next scene) but that would have tooked out most of the excitment of the last chapter.

Well, you did a great job none the less.

Thank You

Next Chapter-end of week (maybe one week)

I can’t wait! I hope it’s sooner.

Okay this one was tricky and rather odd but it works…

Chapter 6


A Learjet 45 soon came in view of Nomanisan. Mr., Mrs., and Violet Parr were soon settled down into a hotel.

Invisiforce was the first to talk about their mission.

“Well should we start looking for V.E.?”

“Let’s get this started!”

The small group thus started late morning into the east end of Nomanisan…little did they know a keen eye was following them.

Later that afternoon the supers were resting at a small pond when Mr. incredible decided to say a decisive point.

“We aren’t covering enough ground. Let’s split up and come back here at night.”

“Sure honey, that sounds good.”

“Sure dad lets go.”

And with that, the small group became even smaller as they each headed in different directions.

As Invisiforce reached a small clump of trees in the middle of a plain, her skin started to feel awkward. Her brain instantly went into alert mode and quickly becoming invisible, she dashed into the forest. Her quick eyes quickly picked up where the object was located. She jumped!!!

Elastigirl was speeding through a portion of her forest when from her left came a sensation that made her instantly stop. A prickling went through her body as she quickly turned in the direction of the object. She quickly hid behind a tree sliding herself into a miniature version of her size. Her heart beat faster and faster as she analyzed the position of the enemy. She slid around the tree and quickly struck with her raised fist!!!

Mr. Incredible was running through a part of the bare mountainside and had just rounded a sharp bend when his senses started all going off! He quickly hid himself amid the boulders and looked around for the enemy. He spotted something in a clump of boulders nearby. He leaped and landed a hit straight into the device! His fist hit a pad of cushion that easily repulsed the hit and showed a small numbering on its display. The device then shut off and didn’t turn back on. Mr. Incredible was about to leave when the device suddenly started to hover above the air! He turned back and starred as it slid towards him. It suddenly scanned him very slowly then faster and faster! Mr. Incredible landed a blow upon the device again. This time the device dived away avoiding the hand and with a robotic hand grabbed Mr. Incredible upraised arm! In a flash, a small needle was injected into Mr. Incredible and pulled back out. Mr. Incredible screamed in pain as the device pulled the needle out and swiftly flew away. Mr. Incredible pondering over his wound and if the device had injected anything into his arm. The skin was fine but the point of injection was rather inflamed. He knew he must get back to the meeting point to see about his wound. He slowly and reluctantly headed back towards the pond.

When he arrived back at the pond Elastigirl was hovering over Invisiforce who had a scar from her arm to her elbow.

“What happened?”

“She got scrapped when she jumped towards something.”

“Once your done I got an injection I really didn’t need on my arm.”

“You got injected too?”

“You did?”

“Yah…some device I attacked. Once it gave me the shot it just flew away.”

“Strange that happened to me.”

“Well whatever it was it didn’t do so well with Vi.”

“It couldn’t find her arm so it injected it into her elbow. Then when she backed away the device couldn’t keep still and scrapped up her arm.”

“What did that device do to us?”

“I don’t know.”

Later in the evening after the party had searched some small places they returned to the pond to find it searched by some party.

“What happened here?”

“Looks like someone found our stuff and decided that finders are keepers.”

“Well now what do we do?”

“We find some shelter. Those clouds over there are forming quickly and if we attempt to get back to the facility at the coast we’ll be soaking wet and tired once we get there.”

“Bob, we don’t have any shelter.”

“No we do. While we were searching a noticed a large cave some 4 miles away from here. It’s very large and will allow us to build a fire and keep dry.”

As the party set off to the cave a party of figures in a neighborhood of trees suddenly emerged! They leaped upon our heroes and a fight ensued. Violet instantly created a force field around her parents as the figures attempted to press the attack. The leader stood back as his men advanced. The first once to reach the field drew out a small pen and with a quick slice slit the force field in half. He then opened a small box shaped hole into the field. He was quickly taken care of by Mr. Incredible as he opened the box. However, the men after him poured into the sphere and soon a mass was seen to fight inside. Invisiforce removed the field and the fight started becoming man to super. Mr. Incredible was shoving villains around like toothpicks. Suddenly the leader drew a pistol at Mr. Incredible’s head.

“Enough!” he said. And with that, he shot!

Mr. Incredible was shot to the ground as a thin twig like needle stood out of his forehead! Elastigirl soon sent the leader a blow to the chin and another to the hand. The gun dropped to the ground. Elestigirl then finished off the remaining two villains with swift kicks to the stomach. Then taking the device out of Mr. Incredible she hurriedly carried him to the cave.

The cave was nice and dry when the trio arrived. Invisiforce and Elastigirl carried the unconscious Mr. incredible into the cave.

“Should we get some wood?”

“Yes please do honey”

Soon a roaring fire was lit as the night enclosed around the world outside.

“Is dad going to be okay?”

“Yah, he is still here but his pulse has gotten much slower.”

“When will he come back?”

“Anytime tonight or tomorrow.”

“Should I stay up with you to watch over the cave?”

“Nah, this cave feels safe to me. Get some sleep Vi.”

“mom?”

“Yes.”

“Do you remember three years ago when the Government of Supers Agency wrote me and Dash into the supers log. Do you remember the name they gave me?”

“They called you Invisiforce because your DNA told us that you had a force filed power and a Invisibility power. Why?”

“Oh, I just wanted to know my real name just incase something happens to me I can have a backup name other then Vi.”

“Okay sweetie, Goodnight.”

“Goodnight Mom.”

Soon Whisper was fast asleep. Elastigirl stayed up half-way through the night until Mr. Incredible stated to stir.

“Hon, Honey!!”

“Bob, bob I’m here. Your fine, just a little weak from the injection.”

“Ohhh…phew. Owe my arm stings!”

“That is just the puncture, you really scared me for some time.”

“Where are we?”

“We are in the cave you spoke of, now get some sleep it will help your muscles relax.”

Mr. Incredible was soon back asleep and shortly afterward Elastigirl too drifted away.

Invisiforce remembers that night only vaguely. She told authorities later that…

“I was sleeping that night and had just heard mom drift off when I too started to dream. In the dream I saw the cave open up and a red heat emitted from the crack. I was startled as a figure approached lifted me up and carried me into the red searing heat. Then it all went black.”

Estaban was a happy man that night. “For one” he said. “My plans are working perfectly. I stole the droid, have used it to bring back syndrome in me, and now my last stage is about to be fulfilled. YES!!! HAWHAWHAW!!! Soon the world of supers will deterierate like snow in a furnace…Ohhh or maybe like in a volcano.” HAHAHA!!! He silently closed the door of a downstairs chamber, chuckling to himself.

(try to guess what happened :wink: )

Ooh boy, this is one exciting chapter you wrote. Probably the most exciting of all of the chapters you wrote. Very nicely done.

First off, I have 2 suggestion. At one point of the story, use their real names, then you switch to their Super names. Then, near the end, you mix both of them up “Whisper, Elastigirl and Bob”. My suggestion is just use their Super names. If they are in their Super Suits and have their mask on , then use their super Name.

My second suggestion is to give Violet a new Super name. To me, I don’t think that it is fitting for Vi to be called “Whisper” just because she was quiet back then. That was before the confidence boost she got. Now, she is a very different woman.

Finally, as for what happened, I think the needles were used to collect their DNA or their power samples. i think he will steal their powers? I don’t know, it was an idea for my story.

Ooh, exciting chapter there! :smiley: And I agree with TSS on his guess, but we shall see in the next chapter.

Can you guys list some names for Vi…i was going to use invisigirl but i already know that another story has that…

How 'bout Invisiforce?

invisiforce…hmm not bad. Has a sort of strength that comes with it. A real strong wording. I’ll put it on my list…

I like Invisiforce too. I was also thinking of Incredigirl as well.