Thanks for your review Captain Pan. I am glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for your comments.
Great chapter, TSS 
! I loved it 
! Let me say before anything else that I LOVED the father daughter shot at the end. Though it was small, it was very, very sweet <3 . As Captain Pan stated earlier, the dialog you gave Dash was almost spot-on 
. I also like how you’re showing the more tactical side of The Incredibles’ crime fighting style. The only things I can point out that are a little off in this particular chapter are minor-- such as some small grammatical mistakes. Like, you have a tendency to switch from past-tense to present-tense. But it’s a little thing, it wouldn’t bother most people (unless you’re an English professor or something 
). This story keeps getting better with ever chapter, TSS ! KEEP IT UP 
!
Well, I used to be a grammar nut back in my high school years, but it seems I lost my touch now. But thanks for pointing them out. And thanks for your review Violet.
You’re welcome, as usual, TSS !
Another great chapter, TSS! I liked the family’s reactions to breakfast and Dash’s excited recounting of the robbery. I also liked Rick’s plan for the Incredibles to destroy the source instead of attacking the robots themselves. I suppose if the robots are coming in endless supplies, the Cloning Machine must be somewhere aboard the ship (and possibly leading to a villain fight!).
I couldn’t help nitpicking that a Cloning Machine wouldn’t be possible in real-life since matter can’t be created from nothing (you’d have to put in bits of metal or flesh or whatever into the machine to create another copy), but since this is a work of fiction, I can suspend my disbelief a little.
There were one or two spelling mistakes like “the sun ‘peaked’ over” and “Come one”, but other than that, nothing to whine about.
As usual, keep up the awesome work, and I will await the Incredibles’ battle in the tanker!
Would that be me? 
Thanks for the review TDIT. Yeah, a Cloning Machine seems too advanced, but its the Incredibles, and fanfictions. Just let your imagination run wild.
Chapter 8: Infiltrate
Out on the streets of Metroville, chaos and commotion was everywhere. Robots destroyed everything that stood in their path, including cars, shops, trees, and homes. Terrified citizens ran for their lives. Some unfortunate people were abducted by the robots. Police officers, SWAT Troops and other Supers tried to rescue the captured civilians. Only a handful of people were taken to the carrier ship.
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Over at the Metroville Seaport, the Incredibles hid behind some stacked crates. They observed the scene. Robots in groups of six would exit the carrier every seven seconds. The family could also see more and more hostages taken onto the ship. This made the situation even more dangerous.
“What are we going to do dad?” asked a nervous Invisigirl. “The carriers are releasing more and more robots by the second. Not only that, but how are we going to free the hostages?”
“Don’t worry Vi. I have a plan.” he said. The Incredibles family began to huddle up. “Helen, you and Violet find a way to free the hostages. Dash and I will stop the robots. Remember, the safety of the civilians always comes first. We must make sure all of them are out and safe before we can strike.”
“But dad,” Speedster interrupted, “exactly how are we going to destroy all of the robots inside the ship and how are we going to destroy all of the robots inside the carrier?”
“Very simple.” grinned Mr. Incredible. “We are going to use this.”
Mr. Incredible took out a rectangular shaped device. The device looked like a calculator, with a screen on the top and a couple of buttons on the bottom. It was a bomb.
“Where did you get that?” Elastigirl asked.
“The commander of the SWAT troops gave it to me after I told him the plan.” he replied. “This bomb might be small, but it is very powerful. Dash and I are going to sneak to the engine room and plant this bomb on the main engine. Once all of the hostages and us are out, we’ll blow the whole carrier up.”
“Great plan dad. One problem.” said Invisigirl. “How do are we supposed to find the captives? They could be anywhere on the ship. And its gonna take forever if mom and I search each and every room.”
“Again, another simple answer Vi. You and your mother are going to follow the next robot that takes on board a hostage. I assume that the robots are holding them all in the same location.”
“Got it dad.” Invisigirl winked.
“Well everyone, we have our mission. Take care of yourselves, and good luck.”
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A robot, carrying an unconscious eighteen-year-old boy, made his way on board the carrier. Once the robot was inside, Invisigirl and Elastigirl ran after it, keeping a safe distance between themselves and the android. Both female Supers felt shivers run down their spine and sweat streaking down their face. Not only they had to keep up with the robot, but they also had to avoid getting caught by other robots passing by every couple minutes.
The two heroines followed the robot down below deck. They passed by long hallways and noisy rooms. Finally, the robot arrived at a door. It opened it up and went inside. Invisigirl and Elastigirl peeped through the door. Inside was a large room, about 30 x 40 feet room. In the corner of the room was a jail cell. Inside the cell were about fifteen hostages. There were four women, five men, two teenagers, three children, and one senior. Four robots guarded the cell. The robot that Elastigirl and Invisigirl followed opened the cell door, dropped the boy inside, and then forcefully shut it. It then made its way out of the room. It walked past an invisible Invisigirl and a flattened out Elastigirl, leaning against the wall.
Elastigirl reverted back to her normal shape and Invisigirl rematerialized. Elastigirl then held up three fingers. Invisigirl watched her mother’s fingers carefully as she lowered one. The countdown was on. When Elastigirl reached zero, she opened up the door and assumed a fighting stance. Invisigirl followed after her, holding her arms up in a fighting stance.
“The Incredibles!!!” proclaimed the captives. “We’re saved!!!”
“Invisigirl, you take the two on the left. I’ll take the two on the right.”
“Got it mom.” the young girl replied.
The two robots on the right side converted their arms into laser cannons. They started firing at Elastigirl. She jumped out of the way and behind a table. She tilted it over onto the side. It now served as a barrier. While leaning against the table, Elastigirl could see red ionic beams zinging past her to her right and left side. She grabbed chairs, shards, anything she found within her reach on the ground and started throwing them at the robots. In the meantime, Elastigirl began to formulate a plan to defeat the two robots.
Invisigirl battled the other two robots in close hand-to-hand combat. She kicked one robot in the chest. It staggered back and fell to the floor. Invisigirl turned around just in time to see the other robot swing a fist to the side of her head. She ducked to avoid the blow. She then jumped in the air and kicked the android square in the chin, knocking it to the ground. Invisigirl turned around and made her way toward the jail cell. She was about to open the gate when one of the young hostages called to her.
“Invisigirl! Watch out! Behind you!”
Before she had a chance to turn around, one of the robots grabbed her by her hair and pulled it back. Invisigirl screamed in pain as the robot took her to the other side of the room. It kept a firm grasp on Invisigirl’s long black hair. The top of Invisigirl’s head began to sting. When she tried to struggle free, the pain would increase. Finally, the robot yanked her hair once again. The young heroine’s head snapped back. She hollered in pain.
“Invisigirl, hang on!” called Elastigirl.
She was about to run to help her daughter when two laser blasts zipped past her face, causing her to stumble and retreat back to the barrier.
While one robot had a firm grasp on Invisigirl’s hair, the other android walked up to her. It delivered a strong roundhouse kick to Invisigirl’s midsection. The impact made Invisigirl grunt in pain. The robot then released his grip on her hair and immediately grabbed her arm. The robot twisted it until it had Invisigirl in an arm-lock hold. The young heroine grabbed her shoulder, hollering in pain. The other robot kicked Invisigirl in the stomach twice. After that, it connected a strong punch to the face of Invisigirl. The robot released her arm. Invisigirl rolled on the ground, whimpering in pain, clenching her stomach.
“INVISIGIRL! NO!!!” shouted Elastigirl, who witnessed the entire fight. She was almost in tears.
Invisigirl slowly got to her hands and knees. She then painfully rose up to her feet, her arms folded over her midsection, doubling over. Gritting her teeth, she assumed a fighting stance, ready for another round. Both robots slowly started to advance to her.
Elastigirl looked at her daughter, then at the two robots firing at her. She sighed in annoyance, realizing she had to do something. She jumped into the air and kicked both robots in the chest, knocking them down. She then ran up to the robots and jumped on their arms, breaking them. Elastigirl then stomped on both robots’ face as hard as she could. The impact destroyed their central processing system located in their heads.
Invisigirl waited until both robots were close enough. She then became invisible. After a few seconds of waiting, Invisigirl unleashed what she called her “ultimate attack.” Invisigirl connected swift but solid blows to both robots. The confused androids had no idea where she was. They tried punching areas where the thought she was, but no luck. After landing a few punches and kicks, the invisible heroine formed a force field around the two robots. Invisigirl materialized and she ran up to the force field. Screaming at the top of her lungs, she jumped up and side-kicked the field as hard as she could. The force field orb was hurled to the jail cell. Upon impact, the captives were set free and the robots inside were destroyed. Invisigirl smiled and was about to go over to her mom when she clutched her stomach and fell on one knee.
Elastigirl ran over to her daughter. “Are you okay? Anything broken?”
“I’m fine mom . . . I’m fine.”
Elastigirl helped her daughter to her feet, placing her arm over her shoulder. The civilians all exited the cell. They all walked very slowly to the female Supers. Two of the young captives went over to help Invisigirl out.
“Thank you so much Elastigirl and Invisigirl.” said one of the male civilians. “We all are forever in your debt.”
“No time now. We have to get out of here.” explained Elastigirl.
They all nodded. Everyone followed Elastigirl out of the room and down the hallways below the deck of the carrier. Invisigirl brought up the rear. Both were hoping that both Mr. Incredible and Speedster had an easier time with their job than they did.
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“Dad,” yelled Speedster, “they’re everywhere!!!”
Both male Supers have successfully made their way to the engine room. Unfortunately, there were robots already their waiting for them. Speedster and Mr. Incredible were outnumbered. Both assumed a fighting pose, eyeing each android.
All of the sudden, the robots began to slowly advance. Mr. Incredible grabbed one robot by the leg and started swinging it at the robots. He would swing right and left at every robot that dared to face the muscular hero. When the robot he was using as a weapon started to break up, he would grab another one and start swinging again.
Meanwhile, Speedster, with the bomb in his hand, ran into the crowd of robots. They tried to attack the speedy Super, but the robots would either miss or hit another android. Speedster ever took a few shots here and there when the opportunity was presented to him. Speedster then jumped into the air and landed on one of the android’s head. He started head-hoping on each robot, making his way toward the main engine. Once the young Super Hero arrived at the huge engine, he quickly attached the bomb on to it. He set the timer to four minutes. After that, he head-hopped the robots back to his father.
“Dad, the bomb has been set. We gotta get outta here now!”
Mr. Incredible nodded. He grabbed one of the robots, picked it up, and threw him to the other robots, knocking most of them down. Mr. Incredible and Speedster ran out of the engine room and made their way to the top of the carrier. Androids started chasing after them.
“How long did you set that timer for?” Mr. Incredible wondered.
“Four minutes, why?”
“That isn’t enough time for us to go back the way we came in!” gasped Mr. Incredible.
“Oops,” said the young boy, “sorry.”
Mr. Incredible laughed, “Don’t worry, we’ll jump.”
“What?” Speedster gave his father an expression that looked confused and apprehensive at the same time.”
“Trust me.” Mr. Incredible replied.
Once the two Supers reached the top of the carrier, they made their way toward the edge. Mr. Incredible took Speedster in his arms.
“You ready?” he asked.
“Sure dad.” Speedster replied a little nervously.
Mr. Incredible leapt off of the carrier. He plummeted down on to the dock. He landed on both feet. After that, Speedster jumped out of his dad’s arms an on to the ground.
“Dad . . . promise me . . . you’ll never do that with me again.” he said wearily.
Mr. Incredible laughed. He then saw Invisigirl sitting on a crate, still clutching her midsection. Elastigirl and the rescued civilians were standing next to her. Mr. Incredible walked over to them. He picked up Invisigirl in his arms.
“We better get out of her. It isn’t safe. The carrier is going to explode in less than a minute.”
Mr. Incredible lead his family and the civilians away from the docks of Metroville and across the street. Once the last civilian reached the other side of the street, the carrier exploded, destroying everything inside. Supers, troops, and civilians would either shut their eyes from the blinding light or cover their ears from the deafening sound. Afterwards, when the light faded and the noise decreased, a loud cheer was proclaimed throughout the city of Metroville. Husbands and fathers hugged their wives and children. Troops patted each other on the back. Supers that had the ability to fly flew all around in the air. The Incredibles breathed a sigh of relief. They made their way to the Incredibile and drove back home.
WOW, TSS ! That was the best action scene in this fanfic so far . Great job! As for corrections, again, just some minor imperfections in the grammar. No big deal.
You did great with the intense action going on in this scene. As usual, you were specific and detailed without being wordy. You give the reader a very vivid picture in their mind without boring them, a talent of yours that I strongly admire . Helen and Violet’s fight scene was intense. I hope Violet’s OK. 'Cause the way it sounds, she really hurt herself, if her dad had to pick her up and carry her home. And Bob and Dash’s combat sequence was quite good, too. I loved Dash’s enthusiasm (even if it does get him in trouble sometimes ). You had Bob’s assertiveness down-pat. And I like the dialog you gave to the civilians.
Another great one, TSS ! KEEP IT UP !!! I’m eager for your next chapter.
Thank you for the review Violet Parr. As of now, you are my favorite reviewer and i am always eager for your reviews. Thank you for your kind words.
BTW, Violet wasn’t badly injured. I thought it might be sweet if her dad carried her back to the Incredibile. After all, you were the one that told me that you adored father/daughter moments. If you thought that was sweet, prepare yourself for a few chapters later.
Thanks, TSS ! That was really sweet.
And I’m glad Violet’s OK . That was sweet of her Dad to do that. (I guess I just forgot to say that in my review). But that was really kind of him <3 . I do love those Father/ Daughter moments, and I can see you’ve been putting a lot more of that in this fanfic. I’m happy you took my advice. I can’t wait to see what else you have planned next for Violet and her dad .
What? I thought I was! 
And I’ve been the most loyal, most comprehensive, and longest-standing, and I… how could you… sputters and bawls 
Joking, joking. Ooh, it’s on, Violet Parr. 
Heheh, anyway, great chapter. I think this is the best fight scene yet. I like how it’s also a race-against-time sequence to save the hostages and get them off the ship before the bomb explodes. I loved Violet’s “Ultimate Move”, Elastigirl using the table as a shield, Bob swinging a robot round like a sledgehammer, and Dash head-hopping the bots. Very ingenious fighting techniques, so kudos for pulling them off with style and creativity. I also liked the little character nuances like Dash telling his dad not to jump again, or how Bob carries Elastigirl to safety. It’s these little actions and words that add character to your, well, characters, and makes your stories more well-rounded and developed. Keep it up. As usual, awaiting next chapter excitedly.
Okay TDIT, before you blow, I’ll say both of you are my favorite reviewers.
Thanks for the reivew.
It’s OK, TDIT . It’s not a competition . I don’t mind sharing the spotlight, or even giving it to someone else completely. I’m more of a backstage person anyway .
Haha, you’re just like Violet! But it’s okay, your reviews for TSS are great too.
TSS should feel lucky he’s got a little fanbase going on here.
TDIT: Well, its a small fanbase, only two people. But when you combine you guys and the reviewers at fanfiction.net, I have a total of 4 followers of this story. So thanks a lot. Its small, but its nice.
Maybe you could plug it in your sig, TSS? Just a little? Only takes a few words, so you can squeeze it in…
Hey, even having a fan base is a pretty big deal . Give yourself some credit. You deserve it .
TDIT: Are you suggesting making a siggy to advertise me fanfic? Hmmm, never thought of that. Plus, I don’t think that it would get more readers. But maybe I’ll do it. I just need a little . . . help, if you know what I mean.
Violet Parr: Yeah, its small, but I’m happy. BUt when I started writing TI fanfics years ago, I had a very, VERY large fanbase.
Okay, I decided to update earlier than usual because I shall be gone the next couple of days. I will be traveling to the Bay Area of California to celebrate my grandpa’s 80th birthday.
Chapter 9: Nomanisan Island
Morticon, the Commander, and Metamorph all rode a motorboat towards Nomanisan Island. Once they reached sandy beach, the trio hopped off the boat. They ventured into the jungle. The three villains walked for about thirty minutes when the Commander reported to Morticon.
“Sir, the attack on Metroville has failed. The Incredibles have destroyed the carrier ship, all of the hostages have been rescued, and our robots were overwhelmed by the combined forces of Super Heroes and the SWAT team.”
Morticon laughed. “Oh Commander, you think I am really worried? In fact, I am quite pleased that the Supers won today.”
“But I don’t understand sir.” the Commander replied.
“Commander, you don’t have to win a battle to have your mission accomplished. You see, we are now able to analyze and study the Supers fighting ability. In addition, the robot invasion was only a distraction for our real mission.”
Finally, Morticon, the Commander, and Metamorph arrived at Syndrome’s old base. The Commander walked up to the larger entrance doors and punched it as hard as he could. The impact knocked the door off of its hinges and on to the ground. The three made their way inside.
“Which way boss?” wondered Metamorph.
Morticon smiled. “Look for a door that has the words “Top Secret” on it.”
The trio walked down the hallways of Syndrome’s base. it was completely abandoned. There was dust everywhere. Most of the lights were flickering. The monopods were completely out-of-order. They checked every door on the first floor. Finally, they came to a large brown door. It had the words “Top Secret” labeled on it. Metamorph reached for the knob and twisted it. It was locked.
“Step aside my shape-shifting friend.” The Commander said.
He went up to the door and kicked it with such incredible force. The door broke off of its hinges and fell to the floor.
Inside was an incredibly spacious room. There was a large desk in the center of the room with papers, blueprints, and computers scattered everywhere. Toward the back of the room was the last prototype of the Omnidroid. Morticon, the Commander, and Metamorph made their way toward the desk.
“Summon the robots to Nomanisan. I want this room cleaned up and have everything brought back to our island.” commanded Morticon.
“What do you plan to do with that large robot sir?” The Commander asked, pointing at the Omnidroid.
Morticon flipped through pages of the Omnidroid blueprints. Every blueprint had the design of every Omnidroid, machine, and weapon invented by Syndrome. Morticon flipped to the very last blueprint. On this page was Syndrome’s most powerful and deadliest weapon.
“Oh I’ve got big plans Commander. . .really big plans.”
Hm… well, if you’re interested, I guess I’m up for another promo sig… PM me your brief and I’ll see what I can do from there…
Anyway, nice ‘breather’ chapter. Like how it ends on a cliffhanger. I also loved how The Commander keeps barging into rooms by knocking doors off their hinges. I am a bit disappointed they’re reusing Syndrome’s Omnidroid again (if I think this is where it’s going), as I hope they woulda come up with their own original plan. I may be wrong, however, so we’ll see how this turns out, but for the moment, this chapter’s okay for me.