The Incredibles Trilogy: A New Threat

[The_Star_Swordsman]

TDIT:

How’s the second installment, coming along, TSS? Don’t mean to hurry you, just asking as a curious fan.

It is going fine. But I’ve been on a few blocks lately. One of my most recent blocks was because I have a hard time describing what I wanted. I also had a hard time planning out how to write my chapter. I was also thinking, "I wanna do a quality job on this chapter, but it’s so hard. I just want to move on to the next chapter because I know exactly how to write it out.

My second block (which is going on right now) is because of school. The end of the semester is approaching, and that means a lot of study, finals, and busy work, and less time for working on my fanworks.

Other than that, the story is going on fine. I know exactly what to write and have my entire trillogy generally outlined out. But facters beyond my control is preventing me from making any swift progress.

I’ll reiterate some points to improve for your next volume: Try to have different action sequences. Part of the fun of The Incredibles is the sheer variety of adrenaline-filled moments; car chases, gun-fights, and sneaking around a baddie’s lair. There were moments of brilliance like the robot cloning themselves on the ship, or the museum fight, but for the most part, your story were basically about fistfights and the villains torturing characters. Have a foot chase through the jungle, or a vehicular pursuit from law enforcement agents who have to bring one of the Incredibles in. Variety is the spice of life, and of fanfics as well.

LOL, you are right. most of the action in this chapter is just fight scenes and torture moments. But I do believe tha I have more of the adrenaline-filled moments as you suggested.

Well, this might be an immature spoiler, but here is what I have outlined for this story. (Look at your own risk. If you do not wish to be spoiled, please skip over this.)

[spoil]Intense Moments in the second installment.

The Incredibles waiting/praying fro Violet at the hospital
Tony’s/Kari’s Interrogation
About 3 fight scenes (Dash, Bob, and Violet)
Abduction
An intense life-risking rescue
Begining of an invasion [/spoil]

Also try to create situations for ‘incidental heroism’, like Dash stopping a schoolyard bully, or Elastigirl being trapped in a bank robbery as a hostage. Readers might be impressed by grand-scale showdowns, but it’s the little moments of everyday courage that will be the most memorable.

I’m not sure if I have any of those in my outlines for the second and third part of the trillogy, but I will try my hardest to find a way to incorporate the subtle heroisms as you suggested. But it’s not going to be easy because I have never thought of it. Thanks for suggesting it though.

And always remember that the character is the most important, even before story. You can have a very average story, but if your character is compelling enough, the audience will love it, compared to a cardboard character with an epic storyline. Try to have more opportunities for the other Parrs to have their own adventures, unless your fanfic is purely about Violet alone (Again, watch the movie to see how they tied in all the various family member’s adventures into a cohesive whole, instead of following just Bob, for example).

Well, I’m not so sure if characters are more important than the story but I agree with you that characters are very significant to the story. And trust me, unlike my first story which was nearly all focused on Violet, this story will feature more of all of the other characters [spoil](due to an unforutate circumstance)[/spoil]

Good luck!

Thank you!

[Violet_Parr]

TDIT- Thanks !

TSS- You’re welcome ! I’m happy to do it. (BTW of topic my review for V-V3 is coming up, I just wanna take my time writing it to get everything correct.)

The second story sounds great so far! You’ve got me sitting on the edge of my seat wondering about [spoil]this “unfortunate circumstance.”[/spoil] I can’t wait for it! And, I agree with TDIT. I wouldn’t demand it immediately in your next fanfic, 'cause as you said, you never thought of it, but quiet heroism’s might be nice in the future. (I’m not criticizing your old work, just promoting TDIT’s suggestion for improvement.) I had actually never though of it before, either, but it does sound like a god idea! (Thanks, TDIT . I think I’ll take that into consideration in my fics.)

Anyway, TSS, keep up the great work ! I can’t wait to see part 2 !!!

[The_Star_Swordsman]

Thanks Violet Parr. I can’t wait to read your review. And thanks for the encouragement.

[Violet_Parr]

You’re welcome, TSS ! Is it still going well for you?

[The_Star_Swordsman]

Descriptions are pretty hard for me in this particular series of chapter. I have an idea, and I know what it looks like in my head, but I can’t find the right words or describe it the right way.

But as of now, I’m off that block. Now I’m gonna write up a fight scene. This should be easier because I’ve had this planned out way before, so I know the sequence.

Right now, the biggest obstacle for me is procrastination.

[thedriveintheatre]

I can’t wait, TSS… be sure to keep my advice in mind on making your action scenes as interesting as possible! For inspiration, try watching a few Buster Keaton/Jackie Chan films and see how the character uses his environment and incidental props as weapons… then incorporate those into your fight scenes!