The Incredibles Young Generation - The Dark Messenger

Not too long ago (yesterday), I just thought up of another cool idea for an Incredibles fan fiction. Now, I know that I already have an on-going fan fic still in progress, but I thought that this Incredibles spin-off special would be really cool as well.

Before I discuss about this upcoming project, lemme state the fact that this is, in fact, a crossover with the characters of The Incredibles (another some other characters) would be placed in a scenario very similar to what was portrayed in another franchise, which you have to guess what it is. I don’t think you guys would have much trouble, though.

Here is how the story goes:
Six children, while on their winter break, were on a vacation together with the entire school, despite the cancellation of lessons due to the (winter) season. While resting about idly along the camping ground, an earthquake appeared abruptly out of no where, creating several cracks across the earth and thus, sending the children plunging into the depths of the earth.

When they were awoken, they found themselves to be trapped on an island surrounded by oceans that seemingly stretched on forever. The island seemed to be a tropical paradise at first, but hostilities soon threatened their very lives, forcing the children to fend for themselves.

Along the way, some of the children who don’t have superpowers had seemingly picked up extraordinary powers on their own! What is the mystery behind this island? Will the children be able to make it out alive? Find out all that in An Incredibles Winter! Only on…

Pixar Planet forums.

Comments and suggestions please. :slight_smile:

Well, you got me intrested in a story like this. I think it sounds like a really cool idea. Go on. I really want t read something like this.

Note that this would be more of a character development based fan fic rather than a story development based fan fic, so don’t expect a lot of intertwine story clashes with The Incredibles franchise here. As state, the scenario (the story, basically) will be of another franchise, but occurring to the characters of TI.

The six children, the main characters, basically, would be:

Akai Tanner - You met him in my first fan fic, now read more about him as the courageous leader of the team!

Tony Rydinger - Your favorite friendly lover! There will be many clashes between him and Akai, but that’s expected. :wink:

Violet Parr - Of course, who could miss out this cute Super of love? Expect to see lots of love triangle drama happening between her and our hot-headed duo. :wink:

Buddy Pine - Yes! Your favorite villain is joining alongside our team of heroes as a… hero?! This story would be an insight to his character and a built up as to why he became who he is - an annoying fan boy turned evil genius.

Kari McKeen - Joining our force field generating super heroine would be, of course, the bracers filled best friend of purity. She would be a little spoiled child in this story, so be sure to strap on your seat belt when she comes around!

Dashiell Parr - The hopeful little brother missing out on such an excellent camping trip?! Not a chance! There will be, of course, a lot of drama happening between him and Violet. In fact, he gets lots of screen time in this story! :slight_smile:

And that’s it for now. I will start work from tomorrow. It will take about a week or so before the first chapter will be up (since the chapters are about the length of an episode of a TV series, it shouldn’t take too long… I hope). Till then, remember! The adventure is just beginning. :wink:

Edit:
Yeah, my mistake. It’s six children; not seven. :stuck_out_tongue:

It sounds interesting. I say go for it! :smiley: I’m sure you can handle multitasking in fanfiction.

Yeah, that sounds intriguing! I’m interested to see how this plays out…and if you thought you’re multitasking, I’ve got one crossover fanfic up and running (which you still haven’t commented on…ugh! :stuck_out_tongue:), several new sigs in the works for the impending release of the Wall-E DVD, a newly released trailer of upcoming attractions, and a James Bond Disney trailer dub coming out soon!

Beat that! blows raspberries ;-p

God, I’m should become a film publicist…:slight_smile:

But hey, yeah, get going, man! I can’t wait! And I think I know what franchise you’re crossing…I’ve got my boarding ticket for Oceanic Flight 815. :smiley:

Phew! Never expected bright dot-dasher and thedriveintheater to be interested in this risky take on, too! Well, I say, welcome aboard, maties! :smiley:

And well, it’s not really multi-tasking… :stuck_out_tongue: See, I actually decided to put all my attention onto this for a very good reason. Since this is more of a series-based fan fic, I have to put up the chapters fast, meaning that I have little time for, well, other stuff. But no worries, because since this is a series-based fan fic, there is always a halt in between seasons. :wink: In other words, after I put up a good three to four chapters or so (in about a month), I’ll be ready to work on the other stuff.

However, you don’t have to worry about The Traitor Game, because that one is still ongoing regardless of this fan fic’s progress. I know I haven’t put up my post yet, but I’m still trying to balance my schedule so, be patient! :stuck_out_tongue:

And good try, thedriveintheater… but no. :stuck_out_tongue: I barely watch Lost. :laughing:

The first chapter will be called,
Stranded? The Island of Adventure!

Be sure to catch it tomorrow!
And remember, the adventure is only beginning.

~ WBoon :sunglasses:

Sweet…i haven’t been on for awhile so i didn’t know of this for awhile…It looks great wboon. Absolutely writable. Go for it…will wait for that first chapter.

Finally! Chapter 1 is up! It was a fun time (and surprisingly, an easy time, too) writing this, so I hope you have fun reading as well!

Clickie.

I think I’ll post it here as well.

Theme music!

[i]There is a butterfly within me
That wants to go where it is windy
And fly away, but I know I will see you again
Unnecessary thoughts inside us
Will only serve to divide us
Leave them behind -- there's no time to be fooling around!

Just hold on, whoa, whoa, whoa, whoa, whoa! I wonder when we will know where to go...
I say now whoa, whoa, whoa, whoa, whoa -- I cannot even see what tomorrow will be!

Though it may seem like nothing is clear
In this world where our dreams disappear
We must still cling to our hopes, even when it seems like we won't achieve them!
Though my wings may not seem to be strong
I can use them to help us along
I bet that we can still fly ON MY LOVE[/i]

[b]The Incredibles Young Generation[/b]

Earth. She is mysterious, flooded with secrets, and continues to intrigue us with each passing day.

In the summer of that year, strange events occurred all over her. In Southeast Asia, the paddy fields dried up from drought, Heavy rains flooded the Middle East, and Egypt suffered from freezing temperatures.

For a group of kids lodging out with their school in their winter break, little did they know that this signalled the beginning of their adventure in an unknown world…

Though the season had grip the land of any heat, a thin ray of sunshine shone its warmth across the icy region, making its descend towards a nearby tree of the camping ground, where one of our heroes, wearing a light piece of yellow-edged blue tee with a pair of brown shorts to match, laid blissfully across its branch with his legs jovially crossed away.

“Huh?” he jumped in surprise when the heated beam touched the corner of his cheek.

Akai Tanner, 5th Grade elementary school student.

Other campers across the site had perceived more of such glimmer streaming across their view.

One of which, a young brunette child with long, glistening strands of hair cloaking her face from one’s eyes, wearing a short-sleeved yellow tee with a curvy collar surrounding her slender neck and an average set of blue straight jeans, was also a 5th Grade elementary school student named Violet Robert Parr.

“Ah!” another 5th Grade student camper with a thick-collared Kelly-green sweater, Tony Rydinger, moaned upon eying another mystifying ray.

Concentrating on the laptop laid out across his lap a moment ago till a disturbance – in the form of another particle of snow floating across the screen – lured in his attention, Buddy Pine, a 4th Grade student, gasped at the astounding sight.

“Huh?” groaned a young 5th Grader whose fashion taste did not seemed to be much of a fashion-minded, Kari McKeen, in her cotton white tee shirt and dull, olive pants, while ascending a stack of steps till she too was stunned by the solar radiance.

It was clear that all, despite the variety in their stylish clothing, were filled with doubts upon encountering that phenomenon; sunshine in the middle of winter.

Adrift? The Island of Adventure!
With the increasing temperature, it was natural for a huge lump of snow to fall off a treetop, initiating the start of early spring.

“This is very odd indeed,” commented Akai to his fellow campmates gathering around the front of a wooden lodge, his left hand tucked in his waist as he gazed up at the intense blaze of the solar rays, with his right cupping his eyes to shield them.

“Maybe it has to do with all the strange weathers across the globe,” Violet remarked, her hair still flooding her visage.

“At least it’s getting warmer,” Rydinger inserted, his tawny hands rubbing the side of his arms, despite his remark. “It’s hard to believe it’s winter.”

“We should hurry back to where the adults are,” Kari piped out from behind the group while pointing upwards. “The longer we stay here…”

“Finally! Some warmth and comfort,” Buddy interrupted loudly – unintentionally, of course –upon finally entering the group.

Amidst the emitting rays of thermal, the last thing that would appear… appeared, dramatically catching the attention of all – with its captivating beauty and bizarre nature.

“That’s…” Buddy started, having unable to believe the sight before his eyes, especially after the previous phenomenon.

“An aurora!” exclaimed Tony cheerfully, obviously unbothered by the strange occurrences.

“It’s my first time seeing one!” Akai added, equally satisfied by the wondrous scene.

“But that’s weird!” Buddy debated amongst the cheering. “How can there be an aurora in America?”

“You’re right…” Tony agreed, finally seeing the abnormality of the situation.

“Er, we should get back to the camp where the adults are…” Kari reinserted her suggestion once more.

“Yeah,” Violet acknowledged her best friend’s view, her mind unaffected by the marvel’s allurement. “We should probably inform them about this.”

As the discussion of their next action went on, a third abnormality appeared – once again, above. This time, it was nothing of this Earth.

Due to the aligning aurora flooding the sky, it emerged as a small hue of green at first, but it was enough to shift Akai’s attention behind the aurora.

“Hey, what’s that?” he asked the group.

As the group stared away at the latest abnormality, the spiral vortex became clearer and was, seemingly, closing In on them… As abruptly as the phenomenon appeared, a circular illumination centred on the vortex, before exploding into five balls of crimson light… and crashing in the direction of the five children.

“Ah!” they exclaimed in surprise, having not to expect any danger from such entrancing sights.

‘Crash!’ ‘Ptchsh!’

One by one, each ball of red light smashed into the melting snow, whipping it up into powdery waves fogging the area.

Fortunately, those destructive ‘comets’ did little damage to any; they merely littered bits of snow across the children’s garments.

“Everyone!” exclaimed Tony upon the clearance of the smoke of snow, shaking off some snow off his glistening brown hair as he sprung up. “Are you all right?”

“Yeah, somehow,” Violet replied, her right knee set on the ground whilst helping Buddy up on his feet.

“That was surprising,” Buddy remarked, having a little shaken up.

“Wh-What was that?!” Kari asked out loud while resting on her butt after her fall.

Just then, another illumination, this time beneath a layer of snow, diverted Buddy’s attention below, causing him to crawl towards the shimmering glow.

“A meteorite…?” he thought out loud.

As he performed further scrutiny, he realised the light was coming from within one of the holes made by the crashing objects. As its glow became stronger, a shape began to form and began to float gracefully out of the crack. It had a slender part protruding out on both sides, like wings.

More of such items also began to rise from the impacted areas of the snow and towards the other four children; a spherical glow surrounded those objects as they ascended.

Children, being as curious as they are, the five naturally pulled themselves up to grab hold of those mysterious items before they could float out of their grasp.

“What… are these?” Tony mumbled to himself as he, along with the others, slowly expanded their hands to make further observations on the interesting trinkets.

It had a frightening face painted across their body, almost shaped like a mini totem, especially with the wing-like parts attached to the sides.

However, as their ponder went on, the ‘totems’ began to glow once more, but this time, it seemed to trigger something else, something threatening… a tremor.

It soon grew to become tremors, and then, the entire earth crust started to quake, knocking the children on their butts once more. Panic gripped their lungs, but before they could decide their next immediate action, the terrain below them began to let way. The stable ground as they knew it was of no more, they were falling into the depths of the earth, into the pitch black darkness below as their screams gradually faded away. Though one of them could easily fly out of there, his shirt had restricted Akai from protruding wings from his back, causing him to continue plunging deeper and deeper into the earth and, soon, unconsciousness…

The screams had stopped. Nevertheless, darkness still blinded a set of eyes, till consciousness momentarily crept onto his mind.

“I’m okay…” Akai mumbled to himself, still a little unaware of his situation.

As he looked around, however, he realized that he was lying across somewhere, somewhere that was no campsite he knew of. With some struggle, he managed to get up on his feet, before surveying the area he had been violently thrust into.

No snow littered the land. They were replaced by lush green grasses and tropical trees with colourful fruits suspending from them.

“Where am I…?”

“Tanner student!” shouted a familiar voice from deep within the trees behind.

It made Akai jumped a little – just a little. Fortunately, it was no foe. He turned around to find a child about his age in an orange blouse and olive shorts having to also landed in the unknown location.

“Oh, Buddy,” he remarked with relief.

“Thank goodness,” replied Buddy Pine – with equal relief. “I thought I was all alone here.”

“Where are the others?” questioned Akai in a somewhat rhetorical manner, not really expecting Buddy to have the answer, despite his intelligence.

“Not sure…” Buddy replied expectedly, “I have no idea what’s going on here…”

“This place…” mumbled Akai, trying to grab hold of their helpless state. “We should check this place out.”

Having to be adventurous since youth, climbing a tree was no feat for him. To better survey their location, Akai effortlessly clambered up a rather slim trunk before sitting above one of its branches.

Having to come to a camp, he was naturally somewhat prepared… even if it meant that he only carried a miniature handheld telescope.

“There’s an ocean,” he commented, too softly for Buddy below to catch it.

As he swayed the scope across the area, he caught sight of colossal mountains rising above the thick forest; mountains he had never seen before.

“I don’t remember seeing mountains like those before… Where are we?”

As he continued scrutinizing more parts of the area, a clicking sort of noise appeared out of nowhere, luring his attention among the clouds.

“Hey, what’s that?” he exclaimed upon catching a crimson object streaking across the sky.

Akai focused his scope on it, then realizing it was merely a red beetle making a loop-de-loop.

“A red… stag beetle?”

A red stag beetle whose jaws filled up the entire circumference of his scope.

Surprised, he pulled away his tool while expecting to see a red beetle flying just in front of his face with some inches in distance. It was flying in front, indeed, but it was about twenty feet away, and hovering in his direction with his jaws spread wide open…

“AH!” he exclaimed.

The wide jaws of death slashed away the top part of the plant, creating a mighty blow that shook the very trunk itself. Fortunately, Akai was fast enough to fall off from the branch while clutching onto it with his legs, causing his body to be suspended under the stem.

Buddy witnessed the whole thing – obviously. He stared in fright as the gigantic bug swivelled around towards the partially sliced tree, readied to launch another attack on the seemingly helpless young child.

After launching himself up on the branch once more, Akai had yet to notice his assailant’s return, till Buddy’s remark alerted him.

“Akai, watch out!”

“Huh?”

Upon finally realizing the danger behind him, however, he was still unable to react accordingly to eradicate himself from his tight situation.

‘Darn it, I couldn’t use my superpowers with Buddy around…’

Regardless of his dilemma, the stag beetle went on ahead and lashed its jaws towards the seemingly defenceless human. Just as Akai was about to meet his doom, he secretly – and hurriedly – tucked his right arm under the bicep of his left arm. Three dark and slender claws protruded out from the tip of his fingers, before they were shot out from his fight hand towards the charging head of the giant beetle, causing the large insect to divert his target.

Though the sneak attack managed to save Akai from being chopped into bits as the top half of his sitting was a moment ago, it could not stop the large wind force produced by the red beetle when it made the sharp turn above, causing the light-feathered child to be blown off the branch and onto the solid earth below.

Fortunately, the fall was of little height, thus merely causing Akai minor pains across his waist, though his buddy had saw it otherwise.

“Tanner student!” Buddy exclaimed with concern upon rushing towards Akai.

“I’m fine,” he assured Buddy, ceasing to rub his sore back to ease his worry.

However, Buddy’s worries were increased once again as the giant red beetle made its return.

“That giant red beetle is heading towards us again!” he yelled while pointing towards the sky.

Having just seconds to confirm Buddy’s statement, Akai immediately rushed forward into the dense forest, hoping to make their escape from the troubling episode quickly.

“Come on, this way!” Akai uttered, stopping just a few feet away to signal his campmate to follow. “Follow me!”

As the two hastily made their way through the devouring forest, all the crimson monster had to do was merely slicing away with its big red jaws as it made its pursuit towards the two panting youngsters.

“Puff… puff… I can’t… go on… anymore…” Buddy huffed vigorously upon halting in his steps, causing a surprised Akai to make a sudden brake.

“Come on, we have to keep moving!”

“You… you go on… aheaaaaaa…”

Before managing to finish his sentence, however, in an attempt of place his hand against a nearby tree for support, his hand phased through the bark and thus, causing Buddy to fall into the tree’s core, while his torso was cut off from view.

“What?!” blurted an astounded Akai, unbelieving the sight before him.

With little time remaining before the aggressive insect made sight of him again, Akai decided quickly and charged into the tree with hopes that he would go through the bark as the moaning Buddy did. Swiftly, he pulled his semi-conscious friend out of the intangible tree and headed straight into the tree.

“Let’s go!” shouted Akai while clutching Buddy under his arm.

Instead of smashing their faces against the bark, fall onto the ground and wait for their doom, they gasped with astonishment, having to find out that that they had entered a hollow cylinder room as tall and slender as the tree was.

“This place projects a hologram of a tree on the outside…” commented Buddy on what he pictured as a probably explanation.

Outside, unrelenting with the scientific discovery, the big red beetle continued to slice through the thick tree barks as easily as scissors cut thin sheets of paper. Hearing its awful clicking and the terrible chopping noises it made outside, the pair could not help kneeing in fear, their shaking hands clutching their shivering head as they prayed that the hologram would hide them from perception as it hid Buddy’s torso earlier on.

Chopping, slicing, dicing as it flew. Akai removed his hands and raised its head to listen carefully on its movements.

Seconds passed. Silence. It was never quieter anywhere. Buddy removed lifted his head as well under the impression of safety.

“It’s all right now!” interjected a familiar voice, breaking the serenity.

With hope, they slowly stepped out of the illusion, only to see yet another campmate as they phased their head out of the tree.

“Violet!” exclaimed Akai with some presence of happiness in his voice.

“That was a close one,” she pointed out with a light smile somewhat visible behind her curtaining hair.

“No way,” Akai answered proudly as he and Buddy brought their entire body out into the open, “it wasn’t anything serious.”

“Right, I’m sure,” Violet smiled in a sense of friendly sarcasm, to which the duo smiled back with awkward blushes.

“Guys!” uttered another familiar voice from another direction of the forest, this time of a male.

“Tony!” replied Akai in a somewhat relief manner upon seeing his campmate still in one piece.

“You were all here?” questioned Tony, who was somewhat feeling he was the only individual separated from the group that had fell through the earth.

“Yeah… we were attacked by a giant red beetle, heh heh…” Akai grinned cheekily whilst rubbing the back of his head.

Of course, his reply left Tony in a slight confusion.

“Huh…?”

Just a slight one.

“Okay! That’s everyone, right?” Akai commented upon presuming everyone had gathered together.

“”Wait!” interjected Violet having to notice a missing individual. “I’m sure there was another with us…”

“McKeen student!” Buddy cut in. “Ms Kari McKeen isn’t here!”

“Oh yeah,” noted Tony, “That pony-tailed girl with the bracers. She said she have to give me something at the camp just now…”

From such a statement, interest would naturally be drawn into the subject as metals magnetized onto a magnet. However, before the group could inquire about the object of interest Kari was to give Tony, a scream diverted their attention; a scream of a familiar individual…

Hurriedly, they rushed in the direction of the cry, hoping to reach her before whatever ominous events that would happen happens.

They soon reached an opening in the forest, where, from amidst the tree across the wide plain, a terrified red-headed female scrambled out of the foliage, panting and squealing as she dashed with her might.

“Kari!” yelled the group in desynchrony.

The final camp member was apparently safe, just somewhat spooked up by something, a status which halted the four in their steps as they wondered what scared their fellow campmate.

The familiar series of clicking noises appeared again. They were spreading from the trees Kari had ran out of. Not a second later, the expected creature to emerge burst out from the greenery only to greet them with its murderous jaws.

“It’s that giant red beetle!” exclaimed Akai in surprise.

A little too stunned to get away from the threat, the group stared on as the large insect flew above their head, unleashing a gust of wind as it did, before moving on to slice another pair of trees as it hovered away.

With their assailant out of sight, Violet took the opportunity to move in on Kari and checked her condition. The shaken child was clearly exhausted; her eyes were shut tight as she tried to catch her breath slowly.

“Hang in there,” Violet piped out abruptly from the side while kneeing down beside her, her hand grasping Kari’s shoulder lightly to further calm the campmate down.

“Miss Parr!” Kari replied with surprise, having to discover she was not alone.

Bad bugs do not go away easily. Soon, the giant beetle made its return around the sky and sped towards the five with only the intent to kill.

“Here he comes again!” Akai alerted.

“Get up and run!” exclaimed Violet to Kari as she helped her pony-tailed friend up, before joining the group in escaping the frenzied savage.

Nevertheless, they could only run so far. The agile creature, despite its size, was able to catch up with the group shortly. Its powerful jaws continued to serve its purpose by scissoring through the immense forest swiftly with ease. Before anyone knew it, those lethal weapons were merely just inches from the children’s tail, if they had any.

“Get down!” Tony warned before pushing Violet onto the ground, just in the nick of time to prevent her from being chopped up by the set of appendages.

The batch of trees in front of them were not as lucky, however.

“Wha-What is this?!” Kari questioned rhetorically, just as a fallen branch – a debris of the forest created from the beetle’s deforesting – crashed some distance away from her. “What kind of place is this?!”

“Here he comes again!” Tony pointed out.

“Darn it!” Akai cursed, stamping his feet on the ground. “No way am I gonna let myself get beaten by him!”

“Akai, don’t!” Violet begged while helping Kari, who had fell on her feet again in the midst of escaping, up from the ground.

“She’s right!” agreed Tony assertively. “We have no weapons to defend ourselves with!”

‘Maybe you don’t, but I do!’ the thought flashed across Akai’s mind. It was clear what he needed to do.

“There’s no choice but to run away!” added a kneeing Buddy in a desperate tone.

So, the children began to scamper away once more. It was becoming an tiring activity, but it was all they could do at the moment.

After what seemed to be a run that had lasted forever, the children came to a stop. However, it was not due to relief, but obstruction.

The group had arrived at the edge of a cliff.

Tony took a peek below. A wide river laid beneath them. It seemed somewhat safe to jump, but there was a chance of them crashing onto sharp rocks incapable of being perceived from their view above. It was a dangerous task.

In other words, they were trapped.

“It’s a dead end!” Tony declared to the others. “Let’s look for another road!”

“A-Another road…?!” Kari retorted in despair, her hope decreasing with each moment. “Wait a minute… where’s Akai and Violet?”

Before the group had the time to ponder whether if their assailant had got the upper hand on their two missing campmates, the forest behind them started to rumble, spewing panic among the children and causing them to dive onto the dirt.

The red beetle made its way to the cliff edge, almost slashing off the tanned skin of Tony this time, if not for his quick duck from the attack.

With wide open air this time, the beetle was free to swivel back to the children for another attack soon. Fortunately, its swivels are wide and time-consuming.

“Now’s our chance…!” Tony remarked after getting on his knees quickly after his plunge.

However, the beetle did not see it that way. It saw it as its chance to finally land a blow on the unaware child who had his back towards it.

“Tony!” shouted a faint voice some distance away.

With no time at all to find out the identity of the being, Tony scurried for his life as he ran towards the forest. But the beetle was much closer this time, and its jaws were just a few feet from slicing his fragile flesh.

‘Ptch!’ the noise appeared from nowhere, and so did a tiny projectile in the shape of a serrated claw launched out by a masked person dressed in a unique navy blue costume with the insignia, ‘CK’ stitched across his chest…

The sharp point of it made contact with the beetle’s face, causing the insect to divert away from its initial target. However, its new target this time was the masked hero who had interfered with its hunt.

“Ah!” he shrieked in pain upon being struck by the creature’s mighty jaws.

A grateful Tony could only shout out as he watched his saviour crash to the ground, while the assailant moved on to its next targets; the other children.

“AH!” screamed Kari and Buddy, able to only watching the swift beetle seal their fate in the split second.

Somehow, however, their fate was obstructed by an invisible barrier, save a faint purple glow across the centre.

The beetle had some trouble slicing through the barrier at first, but with another swivel and the launch of another tackle, not only was the barrier broken, but the creator of it was revealed when her invisibility was broken. It was another child under disguise, this time a slender brunette female in a red suit.

Unfortunately, having taken a blow on her ‘force field’ seemingly took her out, too, knocking her utterly unconscious, even though she managed to send the assailant crashing into the forest behind when it made a turn too sharp for it to manoeuvre.

“Oh no...” Kari moaned upon seeing her rescuers lying unconscious across the kill field.

“Moron!” Tony scolded angrily as he knelt in front of the male hero. “How can you be so rash?!”

Though heavily injured, Tony’s concern was enough to get the masked child to forcefully turn his head around so that he could face his grateful friend.

“Heh...” he mumbled weakly, “protecting people... is what we do... What could I have done? Selfishly watch you... get killed?”

“You...”

“Miss, are you okay?” asked a worried Kari as she rushed by the side of the other injured child in disguise.

“Why did you do that?” Buddy questioned with the same amount of concern.

“Asking why I saved your life...” the heroine frailly answered while coughing throughout her reply, “...is a really stupid question, isn’t it?”

“Hang in there, girl,” Kari inserted with tears flooding the corner of her eyes, “you’ll be alright...”

Though the good guys suffered a major defeat, the villain had yet to be fallen. Just as everyone continued in attending to the injured two, the awful series of clicking reappeared once more, catching Kari’s attention.

Indeed. Bursting out of the fallen trees it crashed into a moment ago, the giant red beetle stood once more, its jaws snapping angrily, forcing the children, while carrying the two saviours, to back up against the edge of the cliff.

“That thing...” commented Tony, the male child in his arms. “It’s still alive?”

Step by step, the insectoid inched towards the five, readied to take a strike at them at any second.

“Darn it...” continued Tony, “at this rate...”

Satisfied with the position its victims are in, the red beetle snapped its jaws again, as if to further its intimidation.

“I have to go,” the masked child in Tony’s arms remarked.

“Huh?” replied Tony.

“I... have to fight!”

“What are you talking about?!”

“He’s right,” added the other child in disguise, her arms around Kari’s arms for support while her long dark hair flowed gracefully down from her shoulders. “You guys won’t be able to defend yourself.”

“Don’t be absurd!” Kari cried out in reply. “Even if you two work together, you won’t be able to beat him!”

“But we have to!” the male one exclaimed while trying his might in struggling free from Tony’s grasp.

“Oi!” Tony remarked, trying his might to ensure that doesn’t happen.

“Here we go!” shouted the female one zealously, before successfully struggling free out of Kari’s arms when she least expected.

As weak as ‘blue suit’ might had been, he still had sufficient strength left to break free of Tony’s normal human strength, allowing him and the other seemingly equally reckless fool to charge into battle, despite their weak state.

Naturally, the beetle was equally surprised, twisting his head to the side in wonder.

“Don’t do it!” Kari desperately yelled in a final attempt.

“You’ll die!” Buddy added, hoping to get the pair back before another tragedy occurred.

“STTTTTOOOOP!” Tony shouted despondently whilst rushing towards the duo in his own crazed attempt to rescue them.

When all hope seemed lost, however, a glimmering glow of hope still appeared... in the children’s pocket. Unknown to them, a dark spiralling patch of pitch black, similar to that seen at the campsite by the children, hovered above their head among the chaotic havoc.

Within the swirling vortex, another light had emerged from it, as with the golden light that had emerged from the green light earlier on. However, this one was of rainbow colour, a combination of the seven colours in the five beams of light.

As the new illuminations were beamed down on the five – even the pair of masked strangers – the darkness of the vortex seemed to have consumed the area, bringing a hue of blackness over the surrounding. As the mysterious phenomenon went on, the previous glow from the children’s – including the masked ones – lower body grew stronger, and so did the five. The surge of light had seemed to increase their strength somehow, and apparently, heal injured pair.

“Wh-What’s this...?” Kari inquired, while feeling a sort of tingling feeling herself, as if something was crawling across the tip of her fingers.

Suddenly, amidst all the confusion, a sound resembling the act of slapping against an object appeared from the side, followed by the voice of a surprised and, rather unhappy Buddy Pine.

“Hey, what’s up with this?!” he piped out while attempting to remove a series of vines from his wrist.

Vines that had protruded from Kari’s fingertips...

“Wh-What?” she replied with equal confusion to the matter.

“Hey, c’mon, let me go!”

As Buddy continued to break free of the vines, the same ticklish feeling was surging through his fingers as well. Before he realized it, electric sparks formed around his hands, thus leading to Kari yelping out in pain as the sparks had shocked the vines which, seemingly was part of her body.

“Whoa! Cool!” exclaimed Buddy, having to discover his newfound powers.

The others were utterly confused about this, of course, especially Rydinger, who had felt a freezing feeling down his throat. As he tried to vomit out whatever it was down his neck, however, his breath had seemed to create... snow, above Buddy’s shoulder, triggering his turn to yelp this time.

“What?!” Tony uttered.

The three children were all very surprised but yet very excited about their cool new abilities, so excited they almost forgot about the enemy just a few feet away.

Nevertheless, as confused as the masked pair were at that time, the trembling clicking of the giant insect in front of them got them to return their attention towards their assailant.

Though both could not confirm the other’s identity, upon looking at each other’s eyes, the two knew that they were on the same team, trying their very might to defend their friends.

“Let’s get’im!” exclaimed the one in the blue suit before he leapt onto the black armoured chest of the large insect, only to be swiped away by one of its big red claws.

That, naturally, caught the other three’s attention once more, having to worry about their friend’s injured status, ignorant that he had fully recovered.

“This is nothing!” the masked child exclaimed, his feet standing stably above the ground.

“Let’s go help them!” shouted Kari, before running towards the bug herself.

This was of course worrying to the others, including the two original super-powered beings who were concerned about the level of her powers.

Nevertheless, upon arriving in front of the large beetle, Kari was able to handle her powers easily. She threw forward her arms and lashed out ten streams of vines from her fingertips onto the insect’s body, trapping her enemy who was attempting to hover away once again.

Seeing this, Buddy was intended to help, too. With little time to lose, he immediately rushed forward while the beetle was still entangled by the vines and shot out the electrical energy from his hands, sending the beetle crashing on its claws.

Having seen enough of the others’ powers, the blue-suited Super did not want to risk any more chances of others getting hurt. Hurriedly, he rushed forward of the two newbie Supers and fend them behind.

“Everyone, stay back!” he yelled, before protruding wings from the back of his intangible suit.

While the beetle was still down, he quickly flew towards its head and unleashed another series of claws at its face, backing it up by a little.

Unable to wait any longer for their turn to get back at the gigantic beast, the Super in the red suit and the ice-breathing Tony, who had yet to try out his new powers, dashed towards the beetle for their turn.

Using all her force, ‘Red’ lashed out her arms to the side, generating a hard-hitting force field as she did.

At almost the same moment, Tony sprinted in and exhaled a gulp of his ice breath towards the beetle’s head. Combined with the force field a second earlier, it forced the beetle stepping backwards by the tremendous force they unleashed on its body.

For the beetle at then, an excited hunt turned into an infuriating revenge. In rage, it let out a loud roar after the attacks paused for a while, its jaws raised onto the sky as it prepared its own attack.

“All right, one more time!” exclaimed the blue suited Super.

And together, they fired all their attacks once more. This time, the five combined attacks were overwhelming enough to send the injured beetle crashing into the forest on its back. The enemy was seemingly defeated.

Staring in shock, the five children could not believe their eyes. They, as children, had defeated a giant beetle.

“We did it...” the blue suited Super mumbled.

Relief finally returned to them at last, as they cheered at each other for their valiant effort.

“That was so cool!” exclaimed a hopping Buddy, prancing around with happiness and joy.

“You guys were amazing!” remarked the red-suited Super whose name had yet to be declared. “Great job!”

“We did it, Tony!” Kari added while cheerfully clapping and jumping away.

Nevertheless, their comfort was short lived.

Just as the blue suited Super was about to present his greeting to his female partner, the all too familiar clicking noise got the long haired brunette’s attention onto a set of deadly jaws just inches behind him.

“Look out!” she warned.

Her heeding could not had came any more impeccable, or it was probably just the blue suited Super’s pigheadedness that got him to get a good look at her horrified eyes first before he turned around to see what she was talking about. Fortunately, he was still fast enough to dodge the giant beetle’s claws, causing the appendages to slam on the ground instead.

Unfortunately, its strength was powerful enough to send a crack across the ground – the ground which was along an edging cliff...

As anyone would had expected, the crack dealt onto the rocky flooring broke off a large portion of the mountain the children were on, causing them to fall off it along with the broken section as well.

Yes. For these five children, it was the beginning of the longest, and shortest, winter vacation they ever had.

[i]When I wish on a star, with my pride riding on
The blowing wind,
I can see a tomorrow that cannot be easily erased
By today.

I wish
I like to know why we are here.
Can somebody please tell me right away?
What we see
might not possibly be everything in the world

I start to shiver with cold,
so I wrap my arms with a jacket.
Before I realize it,
it becomes invisible
and quickly turns into hope!

When the rain of the future
Wets my cheeks, I sought
To remember
To be passionate,
Like in that day, that time

When I wish on a star, with my pride riding on
The blowing wind,
I can see a tomorrow that cannot be easily erased
By today.

I wish[/i]

Where is this place?

Searching for answers, the children find themselves at a beach. But it also happens to be a giant hermit crab’s dwelling!

Caught by surprise and injured by its enormous power, all hope once again appears to be lost.

But just then, our blue suited Super’s unknown power is unleashed!

Next time on The Incredibles Young Generation:
[b][u]Explosive Power! Chimera Kid[/u][/b]

Now the adventure is beginning.

Wow…that took me twenty minutes.

I posted my review on fanfiction but i’ll do a seperate one here for ya…

Review-
8.5/10

It holds great details and excellent scenes but lacks in understanding the scenes. I found it rather hard to understand the transitions but that all depends on the reader.
I can’t wait for the next chapter to see what else happens to the quartet.

Good chapter, even though I am ging to dock points off of my review for lack of originality. :stuck_out_tongue: Still a clever idea. I like the little crossover-spinoff idea. Keep it up.

So, what you guys think of the way I portrayed Buddy as a friendly, respectful character (even going to the point of calling Akai, “Tanner Student”)? Being a hero for a change. lol

And what about the interchanges made between Akai and Violet? Kinda cute, huh? :stuck_out_tongue:

I have to agree with you on those two points…you really did a good job making Buddy seem less unrespectable and villany and the interaction between the original supers is just plain comradory…its great.

lol If you think he’s ‘angelic’ now, you haven’t seen anything yet. Right, TSS? :wink:

Are you referring to TSS’s fanfic?? Cuz that won’t be an example anymore.

Buddy seems to be suitable for a friend but it will take a while for me to get use to him using real super powers to fight bad guys.

Oh, no, I’m not referring to his fan fic (which I’ve only managed to read one chapter of). I’m talking about a story arc coming up that would affect Buddy as a character, something which TSS should know very well about.

Oh…my…gosh! Digimon Adventures? I used to watch that as a kid so many years ago! That brings back good memories… :smiley:

Anyway, yeah. Nice chapter, I thought you were gonna use Digimon, but it’s a nice mash-up of the Digivices giving them superpowers instead…

I find it weird Buddy Pine would be the same age as the Supers and friends, and that he would he be addressing them in Japanese formalities… but I guess that’s your interpretation of the crossover…

The chapter was a little long and I kinda got exhausted reading it on a computer screen, but the action is well-paced for its length.

I love this quote:

Laugh out loud! 8D

Good that you took my advice to use more synonyms for ‘said’ and ‘inserted’ to describe conversations…

Anyway, can’t wait to see the next chapter at the beach…got any change to make a phone call? :wink:

And sorry to bug you again, but have you read my own Cars/TV show crossover? I’d really love to hear what you think of it, and whether it’s feasible enough to continue… just leave your feedback on the thread or on the Fanfic account… thank you! :slight_smile:

Aw, dang, you got me. :stuck_out_tongue: Alright, first thing’s first.

Buddy, as you might have missed, is a 4th Grader, meaning that I purposely placed him in this Grade so that he’s at least a year younger than the rest - not the same age. :stuck_out_tongue: But yeah, due to this being a spin-off of The Incredibles, not having any direct relationships with it, there are certain differences between this story and the actual movie (which portrayed Violet receiving her costume when she’s at the 7th Grade).

And yeah, I tried to keep it as one full blown this time because I don’t want it to be partial like my previous stories. I think it’s a better format for readers to find out immediately when happens after one event or another rather than having to wait a day or two before discovering that a character has been killed off (for example). It really keeps the feeling of a television show.

So, what you readers could do is to take a break at some point after reading a certain amount of the chapter, making it like a commercial break of a TV show. :laughing: This would help you to ease your mind after a while.

Besides, you need your hourly eyes break. :wink:

I actually had a really tough time trying to figure out whether or not to use Digimon in the story, because the Digimon themselves brought so much character into play, it is a big waste not using them. However, since this is of the ‘superhero’ genre, I also wanted to keep it under that genre rather than altering it into the fantasy genre.

That line made you laughed? I thought that line had more deepness in it. :stuck_out_tongue:

Naturally the ‘geeky’ one would be the one making the phone calls. For those of you who know your Incredibles characters well, you should know who I’m referring to. :wink:

No, don’t spoil it - again - TDIT. :stuck_out_tongue:

Last but not least, I have to say I am really embarrassed that I have yet to comment on your fan fic, even though you had commented on all of mine. Sorry, but my schedule right now is really tight - trying to rush Chapter Two as fast as possible. But, I promise you, my review will be up by tomorrow… er, hopefully, heh heh. :stuck_out_tongue:

No worries, just a friendly reminder. :wink: I’d rather you give me a thought-out and comprehensive review than a rushed-one. Take your time, and I can’t wait for the 2nd chapter! :smiley:

November 25th Update
Unfortunately, due to my working in the promotion video for the fan fic, the next chapter will be a while before it is completed. However, have I got a treat for you guys.

Now, as you know, the characters in my fan fic are placed along the story line of Digimon Adventure. Some of you might had asked, why Digimon Adventure? Why did I use this underrated cartoon with probably very shallow meanings to it as a plot line of something that’s meant to be deeper?

I have something that will prove you wrong.

I didn’t make this, BTW. I wish I did, I wish the promotional video I’m making is at least half as good (heck, one quarter will do) as this freaking awesome video.

Ever since I watched TDIT’s latest WALL-E MV, no videos have ever rocked me as hard as this one, folks. I teared up a lot of times at the beginning of it. Its awesomeness and the excellent use of synchronicity was just so great I have to share this with you guys.

Just scroll to the bottom of the page for the link if you want to skip my speech prepared for the initiation of the video.

For those of you who might have guessed it, certain characters (in my fan fic) are portrayed with the traits of particular characters in Digimon Adventure. For those of you who’s still in doubt, lemme enlighten you on which character belongs to which Digimon Adventure character’s persona.

[spoil]Akai Tanner -
Taichi Yagami/Tai Kamiya

Tony Rydinger - Sora Takenouchi

Violet Parr -
Yamato Ishida/Matt Ishida,
Taichi Yagami (in terms of his relationship with his younger sister, Hikari Yagami) and
Sora Takenouchi

Dashiell Parr -
Takeru Takaishi/T.K. Takaishi and
Mimi Tachikawa

Buddy Pine -
Various due to special story lines he will take up

Kari McKeen -
Mimi Tachikawa and
Jyou Kido/Joe Kido[/spoil]

Jack-Jack -
Hikari Yagami/Kari Kamiya

I shall emphasize on why they are portrayed as their respective characters later in a sorta ‘foreword’-like speech, which will last about three to four pages long, but before that, let’s reveal the glorious video I’ve been waiting to show you (I know you guys are still not excited about this so I wouldn’t say “the video you guys’ve been waiting for”).

Ladies and gentlemen, it’s showtime!
youtube.com/watch?v=spCz4WaE … re=related

Watch in high quality for a better viewing experience. :wink:

Don’t click on it unless you have already watched the entire Digimon Adventure series, or prepare to have the plot revealed and spoiled!!

Now, what does this video have to do with my fan fic? Well, the scenes the characters you see in the video will kinda be what the scenes in my story looks like, so I’m kinda spoiling the story to you through a video illustration.

As you can see, some of those scenes are pretty teary and sorrowful. IMO, when a scene takes up a tragic scene that makes you want to cry, that’s when the story lines are the deepest. Thus, you can see why I chose this anime to be the base story of my fan fic.

Here’s a brief textual illustration of what will happen to the story according to the video.

[spoiler]With the world and their parents watching beneath them, the seven children stand together in the realm of darkness in a state of conscious death, reflecting about their adventure and how they have came too far to give up. Even when considered to be dead, the children’s hope was still shining brightly across the grimy land. Light has consumed the dark, hope has engulfed despair, and the people of Earth gazed at their young heroes with equal faith and confidence.

“You can do it,” they said.

"The light of justice will not be dominated by the wretched evils of the savage,’ the children remarked.

cue Brave Heart

As the children fought on, their battles were fierce and, at times, full of tears and the death of friends. However, with hope and light by their side, they continue striving for peace.

Their adventure is only beginning.

“Light. Hope. Honesty. Knowledge. Friendship. Love. Courage.”

“We are the Chosen Children, and we shall strike justice into evil!”
[/spoiler]

I hope you enjoy the video as much as I did, and I hope you cried as I almost did. I’ll be writing my ‘Foreword’ only after you guys have posted your views about the video, so be sure to post! Please. :stuck_out_tongue:

Thanks and see you in a while!
~ WBoon

P.S.:
Do you see now, TSS, why Brave Heart is a better choice of a song than Butterfly? :stuck_out_tongue:

All I can say is you have never got me so excited for another crossover fanfic since BDD’s “Super Spy Wizard” story.This time, you are combining one of my favorite animes ever with my most favorite movie ever. I can not wait to see how this is all going to turn out.