TSS's Fanfiction: The Incredibles: Syndrome's Return

[Violet_Parr]

SUPER story line!!! (excuse the pun) I admire your writing skills. By the way, thanks for your welcome to Pixar Planet. And you can call me Violet just not “Vi” I hate that

ANY WAY… nice job! I particularly liked chapters 4, 5, 9, 10, 19, and 20. 20 was definetly my favorite. (Although the chapter where Violet kicks the mean girls’ butts in dodgeball comes in a close second <img src=“{SMILIES_PATH}/grinandwink.gif” alt=“;-D” title="Grin and

Wink" /> !) I’m sitting on the edge of my seat waitting for the next capter to be posted. The story itself is awesome and it really sounds like you have the characters down pat.

The only things I didn’t like so much were, at the beginning, you kind of made Violet sound like a cry baby. She doesn’t seem like the kind of person who would whine about her problems.( Unless that’s what you intended)Actually, she’d probably keep it all inside and then explode all in a moment.(Like you depicted in the dinner table scene)
And when Violet was attacked and injured by the Omnidroid, Bob didn’t seem to care that much. He almost seemed distainful. I know if I was her father and she was that badly injured, I wouldn’t leave her side until I knew she was gonna be ok. But that’s just my opinion because I think Violet and her dad are very close. & The only other thing is the giant octopus . But, hay , it’s your story so do with it as you wish. I hope you take my criticism in the best way possible.

Some little highlights that I really liked were things like when Jack-Jack was trying to say “violet” and all he could say was “Bi-let” (that was so cute!). And when Tony came up behind Violet, coverd her eyes and said “Hello beautiful!” (I thought that was sweet <3 )My favorite part, though, was when violet came home and had to tell her parents she didn’t have her powers anymore. I could definitely see Bob blowing up like that. It was a shame that Violet was so afraid of her father . All childeren sould respect ther parents, but they should never have to fear them. You did a great job expressing the emotions there.

To make a long story short, I love your story!!! I cant wait for the next chapter!

[The_Star_Swordsman]

Thank you for your review Violet. I am glad that you really like my story.

to everyone, sorry for the delay. I will try to post my next hapter as soon as possible. My computer has recently been infected with viruses and everything has been sorted out, but my internet has been really messed up.

[The_Star_Swordsman]

Warning: Violet Parr is about to get beat up in this chapter. If you think this chapter is going to scare you, you don’t have to read it. But here is the next update.

Chapter 26: The Concluding Combat

Invisigirl walked through the jungles of Nomanisan Island with her newly mended suit on. She searched for her family. It was almost 12:00. Finally, the teenaged heroine found Mr. Incredible, Elastigirl, Speedster, Frozone, and Jack-Jack pasted onto a large boulder by a sticky ball. Excited and overjoyed, she ran towards them.

“Mom, dad, Dash, Lucius, Jack-Jack!” she called.

“Violet!” cried everyone in unison.

“Ah Violet.” said a voice.

The teenaged girl stopped in her tracks and saw Syndrome in the sky. He descended and landed right in front of her. Invisigirl stood her ground with an angry glare on her face.

“So Violet, what is it going to be?”

She looked at the camera, then at her family, then at Syndrome. Elastigirl called out to her. “Don’t do it Vi! Don’t do it!”

Invisigirl looked her family. Then, she threw the camera down on the ground as hard as she could. It instantly broke on impact. To add even more damage, she constantly stepped on the broken camera until she knew for sure it was damaged beyond repair. Invisigirl then glared at Syndrome.

“Okay, it’s destroyed. Can I have them back now?”

Syndrome gazed down at the camera. Next, his eyes met Invisigirl. “You sure you did what I asked you to do?” he asked, advancing slowly toward Invisigirl. “You look like you are hiding something.”

Invisigirl slowly backed away. Apprehension flowed in her body. “What are you talking about? I did as you said.”

All of the sudden, Syndrome grabbed her Super Suit and lifted her into the air. His eyes gave a petrifying glare. Invisigirl dangled helplessly and in fear.

“Where is the tape?” Syndrome inquired.

Invisigirl said nothing. She looked down at the ground. Syndrome violently slammed her on a tree, but kept a firm grasp on her Super Suit. Invisigirl felt a jolt of pain rush through her spine.

“Don’t lie to me. I can read your mind. Now I want you to tell me. WHERE IS THE VIDEO TAPE?!?!?!”

I don’t have it.” whispered Invisigirl.

“Say that again. Out loud so that everyone can hear you.” commanded Syndrome.

Invisigirl looked at him. “I don’t have it!”

Syndrome threw the teenaged heroine. She violently slammed on to a boulder front first. Syndrome slowly advanced toward Invisigirl. She struggled to get to her hands and knees.

“You know, all you had to do was bring both the tape and the camera. It was so simple that you could’ve easily rescued your loved ones. But now you had to be defiant and make things even more difficult, I am going to make your death ten times more painful.”

Syndrome pulled his hand back. Invisigirl formed a force field just in time before Syndrome connected a punch to her. She then became invisible. She quickly got onto her feet and punched Syndrome in the face. Invisigirl followed it with a kick to the stomach, then an uppercut to the chin. All of these hits only stunned the Super Villain. Just before Invisigirl could connect another kick, Syndrome grabbed her foot and threw her to the ground.

“That tickled.” Syndrome laughed. Invisigirl quickly got to her feet. “No matter what happens Invisigirl, you can’t hurt me.”

Angrily, Invisigirl ran to him. She unleashed a series of punches and kicks to Syndrome. Unfortunately, he avoided every strike. Syndrome grabbed Invisigirl’s foot before it connected to his face. He then shoved the Super lightly to the ground. Invisigirl got to her feet again.

“Stop toying with me!” demanded the heroine.

Syndrome grinned. “If you insist.”

Invisigirl ran to him again, only to have Syndrome’s fist plowed into her face. She recoiled slightly. She ran right back at him again. She threw punch after punch. Syndrome evaded each strike easily. Invisigirl jumped into the air and thrust a kick to him. Syndrome snatched her leg and threw her violently to the ground. Invisigirl got up slowly because of the pain surging through her body.

“VIOLET!!!” called Elastigirl.

She tried to break free from the sticky ball holding her down. Mr. Incredible, Speedster and Frozone tried to do the same. And poor baby Jack-Jack just knowing he was powerless to help either his sister or his family. Unfortunately, their efforts could not free them.

Invisigirl finally got to her feet. But a solid jab to the face knocked her off of her feet, driving her back. Invisigirl slowly got to her hands and knees. She nursed her sore face as Syndrome slowly approached to her. Invisigirl saw him advancing and quickly got to her feet. Syndrome then kicked her in the stomach. She doubled over, clutching her midsection. Syndrome followed with a punch to the face, then a palm strike to the gut. Invisigirl was sent to her knees, writhing in pain, clenching her aching stomach. Syndrome grabbed her by the hair and lifted her off the ground. He then connected a crushing uppercut to the chin. The strike sent her hurling across the area, and slamming into a tree. Syndrome ran to the dazed Invisigirl. He lifted her of the ground and slammed her front-first onto the same tree. After he dropped her to the earth, Syndrome grabbed her by her hair. He tossed Invisigirl up into the air. Just as her feet were about two feet from the ground, Syndrome delivered a devastating punch to the face. The blow made Invisigirl recoil and stumble backwards. Syndrome then swept her to the ground. The teenaged heroine landed on her back. Syndrome then lifted his foot up and viciously stomped Invisigirl in the stomach. Invisigirl rolled on the floor, groaning in pain, grasping her midsection.

“Had enough?” asked Syndrome.

Invisigirl painfully and tardily got to her feet. She was still clenching her stomach from the last attack. She then got into a fighting stance. Invisigirl glared at Syndrome, shaking her head.

“I won’t give up, not until you have been defeated.”

Syndrome gave a menacing stare. He started to charge at her. Invisigirl formed a force field around her just in time before Syndrome could attack. Each punch he delivered bounced off the force field. Consequently, Invisigirl would grow weaker with each hit her force field took. Finally, Invisigirl let her force field down. Syndrome kicked her hard in the chest, sending her crashing into a tree. Syndrome advanced toward the heroine, who was slumping against the tree she slammed into. Syndrome grabbed her long dark black hair and lifted her to her feet. Invisigirl slowly opened her eyes.

“Say cheese.” Syndrome grinned.

Invisigirl’s eyes widened in horror as Syndrome unleashed his attack. He started with a brutal right hook, which was followed by a left hook. He then gave a devastating uppercut to the chin. Syndrome then delivered an impacting right cross to the young hero. The punch plowed into her face. Invisigirl recoiled in pain as she dizzily stumbled backwards. Syndrome concluded with one colossal punch to the stomach. Invisigirl was sent to the ground. She clenched her aching midsection while writhing in pain.

“VIOLET NO!!!” cried Elastigirl, who was now breaking out into tears.

Syndrome glanced at the family, who watched in horror the beating the young heroine had to take. He then fixed his eyes on Invisigirl. Syndrome’s eyes started to glow. He then discharged a red laser beam from his eyes. The laser blast was a huge one. It knocked Invisigirl off of her feet and plastered her onto a boulder. Syndrome didn’t stop there. After that one big laser blast, he then fired a barrage of lasers from his eyes at the defenseless Invisigirl. He does this for about a minute. After that, he discharged one gigantic laser blast from his eyes. Invisigirl took it at full blast.

“LEAVE MY SISTER ALONE YOU BULLY!!!” Speedster commanded angrily.

Mr. Incredible tried with all of his might to break free. Still the sticky ball kept him confined to the boulder. Elastigirl was now weeping with little Jack-Jack. Frozone also tried to escape but it was no use.

Invisigirl, after the onslaught of attacks, was now a mess. Her hair had been tangled for being grabbed and pulled a lot. Both of her eyes were black. Her cheeks were swollen, and all, if not most, of her teeth knocked out. Her back is bruised. Her stomach ached to no end because of all of the powerful shots she took to her midsection. Unfortunately, that was only the damage of her body. Her Super Suit was totally mutilated. There were scrapes and tears every where. Her mask has been ripped clean off of her face. One glove was ripped at the bottom. The other had the top part of the glove torn completely. Both of her boots have been destroyed, leaving her bootless and barefooted. She couldn’t move without pain surging through her body. She still got to her hands and knees.

“Pathetic.” spat out Syndrome. “Such a pity.”

Syndrome fiercely punted a kick into the stomach of Invisigirl. She rolled onto her back, clutching her stomach once again. Syndrome then fired a zero-point-energy beam at her. He violently slammed her back and front side of her body against the trees of the jungle. The impact was so devastating, the trees would break and fall to the ground. After that, Syndrome hurled her up into the air. She was projected so high and was sent to a different vicinity of Nomanisan.

Elastigirl cried and begged. “Please, leave her alone. Don’t hurt her anymore.”

Syndrome turned to her and gave an evil grin. “I’ll just kill her in front of you. Until then, if your daughter wants this to stop, she must beg for me to stop.”

Invisigirl fell from the sky. She plunged into the ocean. She sank deeper and deeper, with oxygen depleting every passing second. She tried to swim to the surface, even pain rushed through her body every time she moved. Finally, she surfaced from the water. She gasped for air, wiping the water from her face. She tried to stay afloat in the ocean. She looked up and saw a humongous tidal wave. It was about to crash onto her. Invisigirl took a deep breath and submerged. The wave tossed and turned her underwater. She flipped around several times as the wave rolled in the ocean. One minute later, Invisigirl resurfaced, gasping for air, coughing the water out of her mouth. She tried to swim to shore. Because of the pain, she swam slowly towards Nomanisan Island. Unfortunately, more and more tidal waves collapsed on to her. Invisigirl repeated the same process of submerging, flipping, tossing, turning, resurfacing, gasping, and coughing. She does this for three consecutive waves. Finally, the last wave rolled onto the beach of Nomanisan. She crawled onto the sand. Invisigirl laid on the beach, panting heavily. She was exhausted and decided to rest.

Meanwhile, Syndrome looked all around the beach and across the ocean. He was the one that sent the tidal waves. He was searching for Invisigirl.

“Hmmm, she must’ve drowned.” He said with a sigh. The sigh later became a snicker. “Oh well, I had some fun with her.”

Syndrome flew back into the jungle. Two minutes later, Invisigirl woke up. She looked all around. She noticed that she was still on the beach. Invisigirl tried to get to her feet, but fell back onto the sand, cringing in pain. Seconds later, the pain eased. Invisigirl tried to get up one more time. She slowly got to her hands and knees. After that, she tardily pushed herself onto her feet. Finally, she was able to limp back into the jungle.

“I can’t give up.” thought Invisigirl. “No matter what, I just can’t die.”

“I have good news for you. Violet Parr, a.k.a: Invisigirl, is now dead.”

“NOOOOOOOO!!!” cried Elastigirl, bawling even harder than before. Jack-Jack also joined her. Speedster couldn’t help but cry as well. Mr. Incredible looked down at the ground in sadness. Frozone was completely shocked.

“You. . .you. . . YOU MONSTER! WHEN I GET OUT OF THIS, I WILL KILL YOU!!!”

“Oh come on Mr. Incredible. Be a man and take it. I mean, what kind of Heroes break after one casualty? I mean people die. Live with it. And also. . .”

Suddenly, a purple force field formed around Syndrome. Everyone gasped in surprise. Then out of nowhere, Invisigirl materialized, running toward the encapsulated Syndrome. She jumped and kicked the force field orb, sending it rolling deep into the jungle. Invisigirl fell to the floor, panting in pain.

“Violet! You’re alive!” proclaimed Elastigirl.

“Violet, get out of here now!” Mr. Incredible ordered. “Get out of here before. . .”

Too late. Syndrome zapped Invisigirl with his immobi-ray. He lifted her into the air.

“I can’t believe it! Once again, I am caught off guard because of me monologueing.” snickered Syndrome.

Syndrome forcefully slammed Invisigirl’s body onto the ground. The teenaged heroine wailed in pain. Everyone else watched helplessly at another beating.

“SYNDROME! STOP PLEASE!!!” pleaded Elastigirl.

Syndrome ignored her cries. He grabbed Invisigirl by the hair and lifted her to her feet. After that, he gave a vicious knee to the gut. Invisigirl was sent back to the floor, clutching her stomach. Syndrome grabbed her hair again and lifted her off of the ground. He connected three crushing punches to her stomach. The strikes made her stomach affliction worsen. Syndrome dropped her to the earth again. Invisigirl writhed in pain, holding her midsection. Syndrome grabbed her by the neck. He started to choke the life out of her. Invisigirl gaged and coughed as she struggled for one breath of air. He continues to strangle the young girl.

“Syndrome, please stop!” implored Elastigirl with tears in her eyes.

“You want me to stop?” asked Syndrome.

He released Invisigirl’s neck. She fell to the ground. She started to couch excessively on her hands and knees. Syndrome grabbed her by the head and lifted her up into the air. He squeezed as hard as he could, cushing her poor skull. Invisigirl screamed in pain as she dangled helplessly.

“Hey you idiot! My mom said to stop!” screamed Speedster.

Syndrome grinned at the young boy. He then slammed her head vigorously onto the earth. The impact creates a huge hole in the ground in addition to aggravating her head injury. He the stomped hard on her back. She cried as she flips over. Syndrome then stomped on her face and her stomach. Syndrome then zapped her with her zero-point-energy beam. He slammed her onto a boulder, causing it to crack on impact. Then he slammed her into a tree. Syndrome then connected a kick to the face, sending her off her feet. Syndrome then zapped her again and hurled her up into the air. Gravity got a hold of her as she plummeted back to the earth. Before she crashed to the ground, Syndrome punted her in the gut in mid air. The kick sent her up into the air again. She fell back to the ground again, but Syndrome kicked her in the stomach once again, juggling her in the air. Finally, Invisigirl landed on the ground. She clenched her stomach as she rolled on the ground in pain.

“Syndrome. . . stop. . . please.” Invisigirl said. Her pleas were very inaudible.

Syndrome grabbed her hair and lifted her on her feet. “Thank you for asking so politely.”

He gave a very powerful punch to the face. He then followed with a herculean kick to the stomach. Those two blows sent Invisigirl to the ground. She laid on the earth, panting in pain. She could not move a single muscle. Her face was beaten to the limit. Her stomach felt like Mr. Incredible giving one thousand blows to it. Syndrome approached to the downed Invisigirl. His eyes began to glow.

“Say good bye Invisigirl!”

Invisigirl closed her eyes, ready to embrace death. Everyone else yelled in horror.

“VIOLET! NO!” They all cried.

Mr. Incredible tried harder than ever to break from the sticky ball. Elastigirl wept as she knew she was helpless. She tried everything but her energy to escape had suddenly drained on her. Speedster cried harder than ever before. He didn’t want to loose his one and only sister. Frozone also tried his hardest to free himself.

Jack-Jack was bawling. He reached his tiny arms out to his big sister. Tears ran down his eyes. Tears of sadness turned into tears of rage and anger. Jack-Jack glared at Syndrome. Suddenly, with out warning, the baby fired two blue beams from his eyes. It nailed Syndrome right in the chest. Syndrome hollered in pain. Jack-Jack tried to keep the laser vision going, but after he blinked, the projectile seized. Syndrome clutched his chest as he gave a menacing stare at the infant. He started to walk towards him. Jack-Jack cried as he drew closer.

While all of this happened, Syndrome failed to see Invisigirl slowly but painfully get to her feet. Once she did, Invisigirl became invisible. This caught the attention of Syndrome however. But before he knew it, she formed a force field ball, enclosing Syndrome inside. Invisigirl reappeared and kicked the force field ball, sending it rolling deep into the jungle. She collapsed to the ground after that, panting, moaning, and whimpering in pain.

Jack-Jack gazed his eyes at the sticky ball. Once again, the blue laser discharged from his pupils. The laser melted the sticky ball away, freeing the Supers. Once they all dropped to the earth, they all rushed to the injured Invisigirl.

“Honey, Dash, take Violet and Jack-Jack to safety.” Mr. Incredible commanded.

Elastigirl nodded, taking her daughter in her arms. Speedster picked up his baby brother and ran with her. Both Supers ran for about two minutes into the jungle. After that, they found a good shelter for Invisigirl and Jack-Jack.

“Mom, I’m gonna help dad an Lucius out.”

Speedster ran back to the battle. Meanwhile, Elastigirl was trying her hardest, but the tears would find a way to fall from her eyes. Jack-Jack crawled up to his sister and placed his head on her.

“Oh Violet. How could he do this to you? How could he be so cruel?” wailed Elastigirl.

A tear fell from her face. It landed on Invisigirl’s face. She slowly started to wake.

“M. . .mom?” She whispered.

“VIOLET!!!” Elastigirl wrapped her arms around her, locking her in a tight embrace.

Invisigirl felt a sensation of love flowing through her body. “Mom. . .” was all that she was able to say.

“Oh Violet, how could he do this to you? Why did you have to go though all of that suffering, just for us?”

“I’m. . . I’m. . . mom I’m sorry.” She whispered.

“Oh honey, it isn’t your fault. Don’t blame yourself. You have tried harder than I have ever seen. You also went through more than I could ever imagine. That was really strong of you Vi.”

Invisigirl smiled. “Thanks mom. . .”

Mr. Incredible, Frozone, and Speedster all angrily advanced toward Syndrome. He slowly retreated.

“Syndrome, I said when I got out, I was going to kill you.” said Mr. Incredible cracking his knuckles. “And that is exactly what we are going to do!”

Mr. Incredible charged at Syndrome, unleashing punch after punch. Syndrome easily dodged them all. He could not avoid being swept off his feet, thanks to Speedster. Frozone then froze Syndrome’s body onto the ground. As the three Heroes advanced, Syndrome’s body started to ignite. His body became engulfed in flames as he melted the ice. Syndrome levitated into the air. Frozone fired his freeze ray to extinguish the flames. Syndrome flew around to avoid the blasts of cold. Mr. Incredible picked up a tree and hurled it to him. Syndrome fired a fire blast a the large tree, making it disintegrate before it could hit him. He then fired an outpour of fireballs in all directions. The three male heroes ducked for cover. Speedster got to his feet quickly and threw sand into Syndorme’s eyes, blinding him. Frozone then fired his freeze blast at him again. It hit the villain right in the chest, extinguishing the flames. Syndrome fell back to the ground. Mr. Incredible slowly walked towards him. Unfortunately, when he got close, Syndrome zapped him with his immobil-ray. He slammed the muscular Mr. Incredible into the other two Supers.

“You are going to regret doing that.” Syndrome said through his gritted teeth.

Syndrome walked to them. All of the sudden, Elastigirl grabbed his legs, hoisted him up into the air, and forcefully slammed him hard on the ground. Syndrome got up but an extended kick connected to his chest. Elastigirl leapt over him and landed next to the other heroes.

“Hey, what did I miss?” she inquired.

“Nothing much. We are just having a hard time defeating this dude.” replied Frozone.

Syndrome got to his feet as the Supers all assumed a fighting stance. Syndrome realized he was outnumbered and got a little tense. Speedster came on the attack first. He ran circles around Syndrome. This created a cloud of dust, which blinded the villain once again. Syndrome saw a blur of the speeding hero and tried to strike at him. Unfortunately, he missed every time.

Mr. Incredible came to attack next. He left into the dust cloud and tackled Syndrome to the ground. Both Supers rolled on the ground, trying to pin each other. Mr. Incredible successfully pinned his nemesis on the earth. Syndrome grinned at him and kicked the brawny Super off of him. Mr. Incredible was sent slamming into a boulder.

Frozone tried to attack next. He formed an ice spike and discharged it at Syndrome. He managed to leap away. He landed softly on the ground. Frozone then fired his freeze ray at Syndrome in an attempt to immobilize him. Syndrome fired a blast of fire back at Frozone. Both blasts collided as both Super used all their energy to push the blast toward each other. Syndrome gave his blast a little extra push, and the fire blast sent Frozone off of his feet.

Elastigirl then came to attack. She unleashed punches and kicks at Syndrome. Syndrome blocked each strike. Elastigirl then leapt backwards, did a back flip in mid air, and landed on her two feet. From her distance, she thrust an elastic kick to Syndrome’s face. She then delivered a double punch to the sternum. She then grabbed Syndrome’s two ankles and hoisted him up into the air. She finished with a powerful slam to the ground.

Speedster than jumped on top of Syndrome and unleashed a nonstop barrage to the face. Each hit was as rapid and devastating than the last one. Syndrome suddenly grabbed Speedster’s arm. The young hero gasped as a threatening glare was upon Syndrome’s face. The villain started to crush Speedster’s hand. Hearing the bones crack, the ten-year-old Super hollered in pain.

“Now I am really angry!”

Syndrome horrifically slammed Speedster hard into the earth. Then, he threw him violently onto a boulder. The boulder cracked on impact. Frozone then skated over to Syndrome. Syndrome grinned and fired a fire dragon from his hands. The fire dragon wrapped its body around the Hero. Frozone yelped as the dragon not only burned him, but drained his energy as well. Afterwards, the fire dragon disappeared. Frozone panted on the floor in pain.

“LEAVE HIM ALONE!” shouted Mr. Incredible.

Syndrome snickered as he zapped him with his zero-point-energy beam. He lifted Mr. Incredible and slammed him viciously on his son. He then threw him hard onto Frozone. Finally, Syndrome used Mr. Incredible as a battering ram on trees and rocks. When he was finished, he dropped the almighty Super onto his son.

“You’re lucky that ladies didn’t have to go first.” mentioned Syndrome, now looking at Elastigirl.

“You sick. . .”

Elastigirl threw a long punch. Syndrome side-stepped it and grabbed the heroine’s hand. He yanked her in. Once she got close, Syndrome punched her across the face. She recoiled in pain. Syndrome the kneed Elastigirl powerfully in the stomach. She was sent to her knees; her arms folded across her abdomen.

“I guess you will be the first one to die Elastigirl.” told Syndrome.

Suddenly, a red devil leapt onto his head and started to beat on the villain’s skull like a drum. It was Jack-Jack in his devil form. Devil Jack-Jack sunk his teeth into the shoulder of Syndrome. He squealed like a girl. Syndrome then grabbed the baby devil. But Devil Jack-Jack ignited. It was now a tiny fire baby juggling in Syndrome’s arms. Syndrome roared in anger and held the baby in his hand. No matter how hot it was, Syndrome refused to let go. With all of his aggression, Syndrome threw Jack-Jack onto a pile of soft plants. It didn’t hurt, but the shock that Jack-Jack received made him cry in fear. Syndrome approached to the baby.

“I’ll kill you first!!!” He said, bringing his hands closer to Jack-Jack.

“NOOOOOO!!!” cried Mr. Incredible, Elastigirl, Speedster, and Frozone.

“Hey Syndrome.” called a voice.

Syndrome turned around, only to have a bright beam hit him. The Supers looked at who was shooting. It was Invisigirl. She fired Syndrome’s own Super Power Absorber Plasma Ray at him. The beam made Syndrome grow weaker each second. Syndrome was sent to his hands and knees.

“I. . .I’m. . .” gasped a surprised Super.

“Powerless.” finished Invisigirl.

Syndrome looked down at the ground in defeat. Mr. Incredible went up to him and punched him in the face. That blow knocked him out. Everyone looked at the beaten up Invisigirl. After she dropped Syndrome’s power draining gun, she collapsed. Elastigirl caught her in her arms.

“Lets go home.” said Elastigirl.

[Violet_Parr]

Wow, TSS, that was intense! Awesome! Ouch! You weren’t kidding! Poor Violet really did get beat up BAD!!! I hope Bob steps up this time and helps her, seeing as it was kind of his fault it happened. Maybe if he had reacted better she wouldn’t have run away and felt the need to fight all alone to redeem herself. He’s been kind of harsh to her, and I’d like to finally see a sweat moment between them.

The action scenes were great! I like how you were so precise about the moves, and in discribing Violets condition after she had been beaten. I felt like I was experiencing it myself. Great chapter, TSS!

By the way, I hope I didn’t offend you when I was talking about those few things that felt a little akward in the story. It’s just, I thought you said you welcome constructive criticism and that’s all I was trying to be – constructive.

Anyway, keep up the great work, TSS! It’s turning out awesome!

[Al-Bob]

Great chapter…rather hard to read on a full stomach but a great fighting chatper that rivals all others. You did a good job of not getting too descriptive…it was well written.

I also enjoyed the fact that it took a machine to destroy Syndrome…with all of that power i would hate to see Syndrome get destroyed by a human…it just doesn’t seem right.

Review 9/10

[bright_dot-dasher]

I applaud to the way you gave Violet such determination and courage. I love those tight-packed action scenes. Very intense and well written. It’s a brilliantly expressed story.

[The_Star_Swordsman]

Violet Parr: Thanks for your review. Kinda nice to hear from someone who seems to have some experience in fighting bad guys. And I am not offended at all with your criticism. In fact, it takes a real lot to hurt me. I welcome any and all reviews, good and bad. Again, thanks for the review.

Al-Bob: I was trying to convey that Syndrome’s downfall was caused the the very machine that gave him power. Thanks for reviewing. Still trying to shoot for a perfect 10/10 though.

BDD: Thank you for the review.

[The_Star_Swordsman]

Since I posted my latest chapter really late, I think it would only be fair to post this chapter without the week long wait.

Chapter 27: At the Hospital

Violet slowly opened her eyes. She found that she was in a room with white walls and birds painted along the top. She rolled her eyes to the left and a bright sunshine beamed to her face. Violet tried to sit up. The first movement sent a surge of immense pain throughout her entire body. She collapsed back on her bed, panting and whimpering in pain. A minute later, the pain diminished.

“Violet honey, take it easy.” said a voice.

Violet slowly turned her head to the right. And right in front of her was her mother with baby Jack-Jack sitting on his lap.

“Mom. . .”

Violet. . .”

Helen helped Violet sit up on her bed. It was hard for the young girl as pain rushed through her body with every movement. However, she was so happy to be back, safe, and with her family, she didn’t care how much it hurt. Next, both mother and daughter shared a long embrace with each other. Tears were cascading down from the two heroines’ eyes and streaking down their faces. Jack-Jack just sat there, smiling.

“How are you feeling sweetie?” asked Helen.

“I’m still hurt, but I’ll be alright.” Violet replied.

“You really scared me to death back there Violet. You didn’t have to do that. I never thought Syndrome could be so merciless to you,” Helen touched Violet’s face, “even to a young Super like you.”

Violet sighed. “I’m sorry for worrying you mom. I couldn’t stand Syndrome impersonating a hero. I had to do something. Even if it means getting myself beaten up.” She looked into her mother’s eyes. "You taught me that being a hero is not about the glory and praise. The true meaning of being a hero is doing the right thing when any other option would seem the easy way out.

“I thought you were going to die Violet.” said Helen, brushing Violet’s hair behind her ear. “Call me crazy, but watching you getting beat up probably hurt me more than you actually taking it.”

Violet smiled. Helen smiled back. A moment of silence followed.

“So mom?”

“Yes honey?”

“When the Omnidroid attacked the city, I was fighting it alone. Things didn’t turn out the way I hoped, as I was defeated. But before it finished me off, you guys showed up. How on earth did you know that I was in trouble?”

Helen answered, “We were at home. When your father turned on the TV, he saw the Omnidroid attacking the city. He was about to jump into his Super Suit when I stopped him. I reminded him that we were out of commission and are not allowed to do hero work. So he, Dash, and I just watched, assuming Syndrome would just fly in and save the day. We were very surprised to see you fighting. The moment we saw you, we were all shocked. We knew you couldn’t stop that thing by yourself, so we had no choice but to break the rules and save you.”

“Thanks mom.” smiled Violet. Her smile then slowly became a frown. “I thought you were mad at me and don’t care.”

“Violet, what on earth are you talking about?”

Violet looked at her mother with a solemn look. “I thought that having no powers would be something good. I wouldn’t have to cancel my dates with Tony, I would have more time with my friends, but thanks to my Super Powers and Hero Work, I have no social life at all. I was ecstatic to be granted with an opportunity. I was surprised to see that none of you guys took it the way I wanted. Dad threw a fit and almost punched me. That was when I thought that neither he, nor you didn’t love me anymore and wanted me out because I wasn’t a Super.”

Helen wrapped an arm around her daughter. “Violet honey. I wasn’t mad. I was just surprised. I thought you were happy that people liked you for who you are, not what you are. I mean, why does Tony like you? He could’ve gone out with any girl, even the most beautiful, most popular girl in your school. Tell me why did he choose you?”

“Well, he likes me because I’m smart, kind, cute, and pretty.” Violet started to blush. “I mean, those are only few of the things he told me.”

“You see? Tony likes you because of who you are to him. He doesn’t care if you are a Super. All he cares about is you.”

Violet beamed. “Really?”

“Absolutely.” said Helen. “The powers make you special Vi. It isn’t a curse. Your powers are a gift to you. Think about it. How many people would be dead if you weren’t there to save them?”

“You’re right. I was being selfish. And I’m sorry that I thought you would be angry and would never love me again.”

“Violet, we will always love you. We don’t care if you do or don’t have powers. We don’t care if you are a Super or a Villain. You are part of this family and no matter what, we will always love you.”

Violet felt a warm feeling throughout her body. She was fighting back her tears, happy knowing the immense love that her family has always given to her.

Helen got to her feet and headed toward the door. “You should be out the next day. I’m going to feed Jack-Jack. It’s his lunch time. Dash and your father should be here in a couple of minutes.”

Violet smiled. As she waved good-bye, she collapsed right on her bed. She fell into an easy sleep as the day drifted by. The next day, Violet was healed to a full 100%. She left the hospital and arrived at her house. . . at the same time Rick Dicker returned.

[Al-Bob]

Great chapter at the hospital…really felt the emotion of the moment for Vi.

(once the story is officially completed i’m going to give my overall review…that will be your best chance for 10’s)

Review 9/10

[The_Star_Swordsman]

Thanks for the review Al-Bob.

One more chapter to go after this everyone.

[Violet_Parr]

Good one, TSS! That was a great chapter. It was great to see Helen reassure Violet that they still loved her even after what she did. Although, I do think that Violet would have spent a lot more time in the hospital after such a horrible beating (but, hay, ya never know with super heros ).

Just a thought, maybe it would have seemed a litlle more emotional if Bob would have been the one to console her, since he was so hard on her before hand. And I know I’ve said that before, I just thought I 'd plant a bug in your ear for the next chapter. Because I’d really like to see him apologize to her before the story’s over. But, it’s still your story, so it’s your choice .

If you are able to work for Pixar, are you hoping to present this story to them? You should! It's Great! It would make an awsome sequel to "The Incredibles", and I think most of us would LOVE to see more of Violet. <img src="//pixarplanet-forums.s3.dualstack.us-west-1.amazonaws.com/original/2X/b/bb09ea74af61a9afee85f2221eb7ed07d9454777.gif" width="15" height="15" alt=":-D)" title="Grin and Nod"/>  All it needs is to be run through Brad Bird, and you're GOLDEN  <!-- s;-D --><img src="{SMILIES_PATH}/grinandwink.gif" alt=";-D" title="Grin and 

Wink" /> ! I can’t wait to see what you do with the next chapter. Keep up the great work!!!

[The_Star_Swordsman]

Here it is everyone, the final chapter. Thank you to all who read and reviewed.

Chapter 28: Aftermath

“Good morning America. I’m Wendy Day. Our top story today: Syndrome, the great Super Hero of Metroville, has been revealed to be a big fraud. The Super apparently has been pretending to save people’s live when in actuality, he has been setting everything up so that it would appear that he was at the right place at the right time. Here is a clip of him setting up a situation. He is unaware that he is being recorded.”

(A clip is displayed. It shows Syndrome dropping an unconscious boy into the ocean. He then started moving his hands back and forward. At the same time, the waves of the ocean grow bigger, approaching the defenseless and struggling boy.)

“In addition to that, we have another clip of him confessing right in front of the camera.”

(A clip of Syndrome is shown)

“Are you finished? Okay, I admit it. I did it. I started all of those accidents and events. I started the fires, paid people to rob, kidnap, and destroy just so I could be a hero. I even called the giant octopus to try to drown you. After you rescued the boy before I had the chance, I had to do something heroic.”

(End clip)

“Thanks to the Incredibles and Frozone, Syndrome has been defeated and the real heroes are back. He is now in the NSA Super Villain Prison. And in other news today, the National Supers Agency is currently holding a ceremony. We bring you live to Luke Atmi for details. Luke. . .”

“Hello there Sunny. As you can see behind me a Super is about to receive an award. As you can see behind me that civilians fans, and other Supers are here to witness this “Incredible” event. . .”

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The ceremony was held in front of City Hall. Many sat in chairs as the Mayor of Metroville stepped up to the podium.

“Good day every one. As Mayor of this city, I would like to introduce to you the Chief Executive of the National Supers Agency: Rick Dicker!”

Rick walked up to the podium. A roar of applause was heard from the crowd as Rick shook the Mayor’s hand. After that, Rick spoke into the microphone.

“Citizens of Metroville, I cannot express how proud I am to be in a city with such fantastic civilians and incredible Supers.” proclaimed Rick. The crowded cheered loudly. Rick grinned and waved his hand for silence. “And speaking of Supers, you all remember Syndrome right?” A loud boo followed after that. Rick tried his hardest not to laugh. “I know, but the reason why we are here today is because the NSA would like to honor and congratulate six special Supers. Without them, Syndrome would still be around “saving” our lives.” Everyone laughed. Rick turned toward the Supers. “When I call your name, Please come up and receive your Medal of Valor.”

“Mr. Incredible!” The muscular Super Hero proudly walked to Rick and shook his hand. He later bent over as Rick placed the medal around his neck.

“Speedster!” The crowd cheered.

The excited young Super dashed to the podium. Rick placed the medal around his neck. Speedster was so excited as he was walking toward his dad, he tripped and fell on his face. The people in the audience laughed as the embarrassed ten-year-old hero got to his feet and made his way next to Mr. Incredible.

“Frozone!” People shouted and screamed as he made his way to Rick. After shaking his hand, Frozone spoke into the microphone.

“I don’t know about you guys, but Frozone thinks that Metroville has the coolest people in the world!” Frozone spoke as the crowd went wild.

“Elastigirl and. . . the baby of the Incredibles!” As the civilians applauded, she came up to the podium, carrying Jack-Jack with her. Rick placed a medal around Elastigirl’s and Jack-Jack’s neck. The heroine smiled as Jack-Jack cooed into the microphone. People in the crowd laughed.

“Well, we are still trying to find a name for our little boy right here.” exclaimed Elastigirl, tickling the baby.

She made her way next to the other Supers. The people clapped their hands and shouted at the top of their lungs. Rick made his way toward the podium.

“Before I introduce our final Super, there is much that you all must know. She was the real reason why Syndrome is gone and the real heroes are back. She has showed to al of us that a true Super Hero is a person who does the right thing and who sets an example for many to follow. She went through so much just to do the right ting. And, beside her mother Elastigirl, she is considered one of the greatest Super Heroines of all time. Ladies and gentlemen: Invisigirl!”

Invisigirl’s applause was by far the loudest and the longest. She beamed and walked over to the podium. She was in awe. Never in her life had she felt so proud of herself. She shook Rick’s hand and bent over. A medal was placed around her neck. After that, she looked at the audience. Tears of happiness started to fall from her eyes.

“What a crybaby.” said a sickened Speedster. All he got in return was a slap across the head from Elastigirl.

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After that, the Supers made their way toward the civilians. For the next two hours, Mr. Incredible, Elastigirl, Invisigirl, Speedster, and Frozone all signed autographs and took pictures with the civilians; while Jack-Jack was placed in the care of Rick Dicker. After that, the crowd left.

“Well everyone, let’s go home.”

Everyone agreed. Frozone skated away. The Incredibile drove in and the family started to make their way inside. Just before Invisigirl got in, someone called to her.

“Excuse me, Miss Invisigirl?”

She turned around. To her surprise, Tony Rydinger was standing right in front of her. His body was shaking, indicating his nervousness. In Tony’s hands was a piece of paper, a pen, and a camera.

“C. . .c. . .could you. . . would y. . .you. . .uh. . .please.” he stammered.

Invisigirl placed a finger to his lips. She beamed as she took the paper and pen.

“Of course I would Tony Rydinger.” answered Invisigirl, signing her name on the paper.

Tony was shocked. “H. . .how did you know my name?”

Invisigirl gave the paper back to Tony. She grinned. “I remember you. For some reason, I always love to save your life. Besides, I remember this one girl who was a big fan of me. He name was Violet Parr. She has told me so much about you.”

“Really?” He asked.

“You bet! She said you were cute, cool, kind, smart, funny, and everything anyone could ask for in a perfect boyfriend.” said she. Tony blushed. Invisigirl turned to Elastigirl. “Hey mom, could you please take a picture?”

Elastigirl sighed but took the camera from Tony. Both teens smiled as the picture was taken. Afterwards, Tony took his camera.

“Well, thank you so much.”

“You are welcome.” said Invisigirl. Tony turned to leave. Invisigirl called out to him once again. “Tony?”

Tony looked at her. Invisigirl made her way toward Tony. She wrapped her arms around him and kissed him right on the lips. The next ten seconds seemed to have gone by so slowly. After that, Invisigirl winked at him before hopping into the Incredibile. Tony felt so amazed, he shouted at the top of his lungs. Invisigirl sighed romantically.

“Violet and Tony sitting in a tree. . .”

“DASH, SHUT UP!!!”

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The next day was a Saturday. It was a pretty normal day for the Parrs. Then, the doorbell rang. Helen went to answer the door.

“Tony, what are you doing here?”

“Well, sorry for the surprise, but I was wondering. Can I talk to Vi? Maybe take a walk with her, just for half an hour?”

Helen smiled and called, “Vi, Tony is here to see you!”

Violet came down the stairs. She was wearing a pink sleeveless shirt and a blue skirt. She waved at Tony as she slipped into her flip flops. After that, the two walked around the block.

“Tony, before you tell me anything, I would like to say sorry about you’re camera.”

“Don’t worry about it Vi. It’s just a camera. I would rather spend time with you.”

Violet blushed. She turned to Tony. “So how have you been?”

“Incredible. I got an autograph and a picture with Invisigirl! She is so incredible, I can’t describe it!” Vi tried her hardest not to blush but it was so hard for her. Tony gazed into Vi’s eyes. “She also told me what you said about me. She told me that you said that. . .”

“. . .you were cute, cool, kind, smart, funny, and everything anyone could ask for in a perfect boyfriend?” She interrupted. Tony nodded. “Well Tony, I meant it! Besides, I always love to be with you.”

Violet planted a kiss right on Tony’s lips. A few seconds later, Tony’s eyes broadened.

“Wow, deja vu!” awed the teen boy.

“What?”

“Nothing.”

Suddenly, a explosion was heard. Both teenagers looked and saw a tank with missiles mounted on the side was slowly approaching. On the tank was a huge skull and cross bone sign. Both realized that another villain has come to attack the quiet suburban area of Metroville.

“Vi come on, we have to get out of here!” said Tony. As he turned around, he saw nobody. He witnessed people fleeing from their homes, but no Violet. “Violet? Violet?” he called.

From behind a tree, an invisible Invisigirl slipped on her Super Suit and placed on her mask. She stared at the large tank, and smiled. Invisigirl reappeared as she ran toward the tank; a smile was upon her face.

“Showtime!”

[Al-Bob]

Sorry about not getting this our sooner…the pc crashed on me right as i wa about to post my review so i’ll have to start over.

Review;

Adventure-9.5/10
Storyline-10/10
Characters-9.5/10
Romance-9/10 (this is my worst review catagory)
Developement-9.5/10
Places-9/10
Description-8.5/10
Spelling-10/10

Bonus (Personal Thoughts) Review-9/10

Overall Review-9.3/10

An excellent story that will captivate the hearts of Incredibles Fans across the globe. The intriguing storyline is a real “gripper”. Full of laughs, romance, and adventure this story brings out the best that the Incredibles have to offer. TSS has done a great job in making this story one that is intriguing, full of suspence, and yet light and family friendly. I congradulate TSS on making such a great story. It will go down IMO as one of the best fan fics here at Pixar Planet.

[The_Star_Swordsman]

Al-Bob:

In response to all of the scores:

Adventure: Thanks. The whole story is indeed one giant adventure for Violet. She fights bad guys and travels to a lot of settings.

Storyline: Usually, a 10/10 means that Pixar could show this as a possible sequel. (Yeah right )But still, thanks for the 10.

Romance: Well, I tried to have the Tony/Violet relationship pretty solid, strong, and believable. This isn’t a romantic tale, but if I can get a 9 for maintaining the strong relationship, then thats good for me.

Characters: They’re the Incredibles. You gotta love them.

Development: Thanks. NOt really much to comment on this.

Places: Well, I tried to go everywhere. Suburbs, city, school, jungle, ocean, NSA HQ, yeah, that covers alot.

Description: I could do better next time. I didn’t want to describe something so much that it pulls the reader’s attention away from what is going on in the story.

Spelling: Before I post a chapter, I spell check it twice, post it up, then reread it for more errors. I am not the best speller, so there should be more errors.

Awwww, thanks Al-Bob. You have given me one of the best reviews for this story. It is well detailed yet full of comments. Thank you. You have been one of my favorite reviewers. I hope you review some of my future TI stories.

[Violet_Parr]

Great job, TSS!!! That was an awesome story! Very suspensful. I would definitely like to read more of your fanfics, and you know you’re a good writer when your audience keeps coming back for more. Here’s my review:

Adventure-9/10
Storyline-10/10
Characters-9.5/10
Romance-9.5/10
Developement-9/10
Places-9.8/10
Description-10/10 (I love how you were able to give the reader a vivid mental picture of what was going on and how every thing looked without being too wordy)
Spelling-7/10

TSS, you are truly an excellent writer. I can’t wait to read your future writings about “The Incredibles.”

P.S. do you think you could give us a sneek preview of what you have planned next?

[The_Star_Swordsman]

Violet Parr: Hmmm, spelling a 7/10 huh? Oh boy, I definetely gotta work on that.

Thakns for your review. I am incredibly glad that you liked it violet parr. Heck, even you yourself might have experienced something like that. Anyways, for whats next, I am working on something. Maybe I might give some info about it the farther along I am working on it.

[Violet_Parr]

Well… your spelling wasn’t all that bad. There were just a bunch of little mistakes here and there. It’s really not that bad. They were mostly typeo’s on small words and could easilly be corrected.

Oh, I almost forgot, I loved that Violet/Tony moment you wrote at the end. <3 That was so like them. You could really tell how nervous Tony was when he asked Vi- I mean “Invisigirl” for an autograph. And then she kissed him! Wow, he was having a good day, wasn’t he?

Anyway, great story! I can’t wait to hear what you have coming up next!

[The_Star_Swordsman]

You thought Tony was having a good day, think about Violet? Probably the most memorable of her entire life.

[pixarfan9099]

Are you gonna publish that? I’d read it!

[Haunt]

Well done! I wish I had that kind of stamina to write that much. You’re quite the author! Really makes me want to take up the ol’ pen again.
I hope to see more one day