Thanks Al-Bob. It actually is more of a better review to expand a bit then just say two simple words.
A very well-written couple of chapters there, TSS. It’s good to finally get to the part of the story where Violet’s powers are taken away, and we get to see the consequences for that decision. The day on the beach with Tony was a nice touch for displaying their relationship (really cute part of the story), and a great contrast to the probable big events that are sure to follow. And it was clever how you used the new camcorder gadget that Tony brought as a means for Violet to discover what Syndrome is up to next. Keep up the great writing.
Maybe it’s just me, but that and some of Chapter 19 reminded me slightly of The Little Mermaid. It was a great twist there in that chapter, but I could sense Buddy wasn’t focused on helping at all. The end really got me anxious for what was to happen next.
In Chaper 20, I felt sorry for Violet, having to go through that right after losing her powers. I could actually hear all the madness going on- like the words you wrote (well, typed) echoed into my brain as a movie. It was depressing how Vi was under so much pressure that she ran away.
As for Chapter 21, I liked how you brought out Violet and Tony’s romantic relationship. At first, I was surprised that after where you left off on the last chapter came something titled “Fun in the Sun”. I hope Vi can find a way to defeat Syndrome’s plan, get her powers back, and still be happy about them.
rachel: Thanks for the review. I am glad you really liked this chapter. By the way, they were having fun in the ocean, not nessecarily on the beach. 
It doesn’t matter. I bet you will love the next chapter. It really starts to get climatic and intense.
BDD: Thank you for your reviews.
Next update. I hope you all enjoy.
Chapter 22: Rescue and Revelation
Violet placed the camera down. She jumped up and dove into the ocean. She swam underwater toward the drowning kid. The waves were very forceful above the surface. Below, it wasn’t as vigorous, and Violet had an easier time swimming. Fifteen seconds later, Violet swam up to the surface. She resurfaced, taking in a huge gasp of air, wiping water and hair away from her face. She swam over to the drowning boy.
Meanwhile, back on the boat;
“Hey Violet, I just came to ask. . .” Tony stopped dead in his tracks. He looked around but could not find his girlfriend. “. . .where did you go?”
Tony finally saw his camera on the railing. He then moved his head and found Violet’s towel on the deck. Tony looked out to see and to his horror, saw Violet swimming in the raging ocean.
“VIOLET!!!”
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The waves bobbed Violet up and down as she swam toward the kid. A large wave came to her. Violet dove underwater. The wave tossed her under. She resurfaced again in front of the boy.
“Don’t worry. I’m here to help you.”
“I CAN’T SWIM! PLEASE SAVE ME!” cried the boy.
Suddenly, a very tall ten foot wave formed. Violet saw it, gasped and dove under with the boy. Clingining on to the boy tightly, Violet was tossed underwater. The force of the wave pushed the two under. Seconds later, the two surfaced the water, coughing water out of their mouths. Violet wiped her eyes, panting for air. She looked over at the little boy.
The boy said nothing. His eyes was wide open in fear. Violet turned around and saw another gigantic wave head right toward them. Violet gasped, took a deep breath and dove back underwater right before the wave crashed down on them. It tossed and flipped Violet and the boy underwater, in addition to pushing both of them deeper into the ocean. Thirty seconds later, Violet and the boy resurfaced. Violet gasped of air. After she wiped the hair out of her face, she looked at the boy. He was unconscious. Violet’s eyes widened in fear as she tried to swim to the yacht with both arms carrying the boy, and using her legs to kick.
“Violet! Grab on!” shouted a voice. It was Tony.
He threw a life preserver into the ocean. Violet grabbed on to it and placed the boy’s body on the inflated ring. Tony tried to pull them in. Suddenly, something grabbed Violet’s foot. It dragged her underwater.
Tony pulled the kid on to the yacht. He looked around. His eyes widened in fear.
“VIOLET!!!”
Violet emerged out of the water, coughing and splashing excessively.
“TONY! HELP ME! HELP. . .”
Once again, something pulled her under. Tony jumped in and swam underwater to save her. He was shocked to see a giant octopus was right in from of him. It had a tentacle wrapped around Violet’s foot. Tony swam to rescue his girlfriend. He tried to loose the grip of the tentacle by pulling it. After many unsuccessful tugs, Tony opened his mouth and took on giant chomp into the octopus’s tentacle. Violet was released and she and Tony darted to the surface. They resurfaced, gasping for air, and coughing water out of their lungs. The two swam as fast as they could to the yacht.
“If only I had my powers.” Violet thought to herself.
Just as the two reached the boat, the octopus grabbed Violet’s and Tony’s leg. Both tried as hard as they could to grasp the side of the boat, but no avail. The eight tentacled creature pulled them underwater once again. This time, it used its other tentacles to wrap around Tony’s and Violet’s body. The octopus began constrict its tentacles, crushing the teens bodies in the process.
As Violet and Tony struggled painfully to break free, Syndrome appeared. He stared at the squid and started to somehow telepathically communicate to the octopus. Seconds later, the creature released the teens and swam away. Violet and Tony emerged from the water’s surface. Tired and out of breath, they swam towards the yacht. Mr and Mrs. Rydinger was shocked to see their son and his girlfriend dragged on to the boat by a Super.
“Get to shore now. This place isn’t safe.” commanded Syndrome.
Mr. Rydinger nodded. He accelerated the yacht to the harbor. Mr. Rydinger was going so fast, the camera that Tony placed down on fell off and into the ocean. Meanwhile, Syndrome and Tony’s mother too busy nursing the shocked, soaked teenagers. Violet pointed at Tony’s camera as it fell into the ocean.
“I got it!” said Syndrome as his rocket boots activated. He lifted off and dove underwater.
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Mr. Rydinger arrived at the harbor minutes later. By that time, Violet and Tony were completely healed. Although a little shocked after the incident, they were able to stand up on their feet and walk. Mrs. Rydinger placed her arms on her son’s shoulders.
“Honey, are you alright? Do you need to go to the nurse? Are you. . .”
“No mom. I’m fine.” Tony assured.
Afterwards, Violet went to get her purse. Mr. Rydinger volunteered to take her home. All of the sudden, Syndrome appeared behind her. She jumped back in surprise.
“Why do you keep tormenting our family, even though we are out of commission?” she asked angrily.
He laughed. “I have a list of some things I can never get enough of.” Syndrome rudely gazed at Violet’s body in her bathing suit. “And you were just added to my list.”
Violet looked disgusted. “You’re a rude one. Please leave me alone. I had enough of you for one day.”
Violet stormed her way past Syndrome. The Super laughed. Syndrome held up a camera. “I guess you wouldn’t be wanting this would you?”
Violet turned back around and saw Syndrome was holding a video camera. “Give me that!” She demanded, snatching it out of his hand.
“Well, you’re welcome.” grumbled Syndrome.
Violet looked at the camera and saw that it wasn’t working. She tried pushing random buttons to show any sign of activation. Finally, after pressing the record button off and on several times, she gave up. She placed the camera down, hanging her head in disappointment.
“Do you want me to fix that?” offered Syndrome.
“Fix? FIX? FIX?!” Violet glared, growing both in volume and in anger. “WHY WOULD I WANT HELP FROM A BIG FRAUD?!
Syndrome covered her mouth. Tony’s dad came calling. “Is everything okay?”
“Yes of course. Violet here wants me to bring her home.” Syndrome said.
“Okay. I just drive my family back home then. Thanks again Syndrome” Mr. Rydinger responded.
As he drove off, Syndrome looked at Violet. “So, what was that again?”
Violet slapped his face. “I can’t believe you. All this time, people believed you were a hero. People worshiped you, praised you. To make matters worse, they counted on you to save their lives.” Violet paused. “You lied to them. You lied to everyone in Metroville. If it wasn’t for you, my family and I would still be full-time Supers.”
Syndrome grinned. “Keep going. Your accusations intrigue me.”
“You don’t have powers!” growled Violet. “You just extracted the DNA of the Supers of the Glory Days, cloned them, then strip them their powers. That explains that big machine in that cave in Nomanisan. You took their powers and injected them into your body! How can you be so cruel? Taking the one thing that makes these good Supers proud of who they are, and what makes them so Super. . .and just using it on yourself? How can you be so cold? You were not, are not, and never will be a Super! One thing never changes about you Syndrome. You are just. . .one. . .big. . .super. . .FAKE!!!”
Syndrome’s eyes broadened. “Are you finished?” he questioned. Violet nodded. A huge grin planted on his face. “Okay, I admit it. I did it. I started all of those accidents and events. I started the fires, paid people to rob, kidnap, and destroy just so I could play the role of a hero. I even called the giant octopus to try to drown you. After you rescued the boy before I had the chance, I had to do something heroic.”
Violet glared at her family’s nemesis, her fist clenched. “You. . . you jerk! You just wait. I’m sure the NSA would love to hear about you and your “hero work.”
“And exactly how are you going to do that?”
Violet gave him an odd look. “What are you talking about?”
“Well, you wouldn’t be giving them that camera because it’s practically broken. And besides. Who are the people going to believe, their former hero, or me?” he snickered. Syndrome laughed incredibly hard while Violet just glared at him. “Well, I better be going now. I bet there are many more civilians, waiting to be saved.”
Syndrome grinned at Violet one last time, than flew off. Violet was furious. She started punching the air, pouting, and jumping up and down to emit the anger in her body. She picked up the camera and was about to smash it. Suddenly, she froze. Her eyes were wide open as she looked at the camera. The record button. . .was on.
oooohhhh…it lives!!!
Great chapter…TSS. It had suspence from the revealing of Syndromes plan which brought into perspective the entire reason behind his superhero work. It reveals what the problems are too. The only problem is how will Vi convince the world that Syndrome is bad and evil?
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Thanks for the review Al-bob. You’ll see.
Chapter 23: Rejuvenate
Violet’s hands trembled with the camera in her grasp. She had the proof that Syndrome is indeed a fake. This could put Syndrome out of the Super Hero business and put her family back on the job. Violet knew she had to get this evidence straight to NSA Headquarters as soon as possible, but first, she needed to run one significant errand.
Violet first changed from her swim suit into her casual clothes. She then made her way past the harbor and into Downtown Metroville. She ran into a building and went into the ladies bathroom. Violet took out her cell phone from her purse. She pressed a couple buttons on her hone.
“You have selected the NSA Transport Teleporter. Please input coordinates of your current location and coordinates of your destination.” her cell phone requested.
Violet did not hesitate to put in the coordinates to Nomanisan Island. A bright beam appeared from below her and engulfed her body. Violet was teleported back to Nomanisan Island. When she arrived, she dashed into the jungle. She was searching for that secret cave where Syndrome took away her powers. For an hour or so, she explored the island. She decide to rest. Violet found a large boulder and sat against it. She panted as she tried to recollect the cave’s location.
“Why can’t Syndrome use a smaller island?” Violet complained.
All of the sudden, the large robot appeared. It was the same robot that attacked Violet after she first found the large cave. She froze in fear as it gradually got closer to her. To her surprise, it walked past the frightened teenager. Syndrome was flying right behind it.
“Just like the last time. This time, the new and improved Omnidroid can’t be defeated!”
Syndrome continued to monologue as he and the Omnidroid made their way past Violet. As the two disappeared, Violet breathed a sigh of relief. She left the boulder and resumed her search. She almost fell into a gigantic footprint, left by the Omnidroid. She got up and was amazed at the size. It was as long as her room. Vi made her way the large footprint. She then scurried to where Syndrome and the Omnidroid was coming from. She was saw, in the distance, a large cave. Violet sprinted to it as fast as she could.
Violet made her way inside the cave. She looked around, trying to find any source of her extracted powers. Violet found a table with many papers on it. She examined the documents. These revealed all of Syndrome’s designs for the new Omnidroid, blueprints on his Power Extractor, and a list of Supers and their powers. These were few of the many documents that were on the desk. Violet turned around and saw all of the Supers from the Glory Days, dormant in capsules. After examining all of the Supers, she found a desk with test tubes, filled with different colored liquids. She examined each test tube. Each had different colors, corresponding to different Supers. Violet finally found a test tube that was labeled “Invisigirl”. The liquid inside was violet colored. Violet took it in her hand. As she held it up, her hand began to tremble.
“Is it really worth it?” She asked to herself. “Throwing away my dream of a normal life, just to save the world?” Violet looked at the test tube, then at all of the encapsulated Supers. A compulsive look was put on her face. “Yes, it is!”
Violet drank the liquid without stop. It tasted so unpleasant. She almost wanted to spew it back out. When she gulped the last drop, a pleasant sensation rushed throughout her body. She closed her eyes as the liquid surged throughout all of Violet’s body system. Minutes later, the feeling ended. Violet opened her eyes. She looked at her right hand.
“Okay. . . this is it. . . one, two, THREE!”
Violet tried to turn her hand invisible. It disappeared right on the spot. Violet then tried to form a force field around herself. That was also successful. Violet’s eyes gleamed as she jumped for joy. She had her powers back. After many minutes of celebrating, she made her way out of the cave.
She made her way through the jungles of Nomanisan as she contemplated on her next destination. Unfortunately, she fell into a gigantic footprint. Violet got to her feet and made her way out. She observed the huge footprint left by the Omnidroid.
“The Omnidroid!” Violet remembered. “Syndrome’s going to unleash it on the city!”
Vi took out her cell phone and activated the NSA Transport Teleporter to teleport herself back to the city of Metroville. A bright beam of light engulfed her body as she was teleported back to Metroville.
When she arrived, she saw the huge Omnidroid attacking the city. The army was called once again to stop it. Unfortunately, they were no match for its power. Tanks were getting blown up, fighter-jets were being destroyed, and the soldiers kept on retreating with each unsuccessful attack.
“Great, this means Syndrome hasn’t joined the action yet.” whispered Vi.
Violet saw the Omnidroid decimate more tanks, planes, and any kind of force that tried to stop it. Missiles couldn’t break through the strong armor. Bullets just ricocheted off. Battle planes were swat down like flies. Tanks were picked up and tossed around like little toys. People ran around everywhere, screaming at the top of their lungs. The Omnidroid picked up a tank and hurled, right over to Violet. She screamed at the top of her lungs. Violet dove to the ground just in time. The tank hurled above and away from her. Vi quickly got to her feet. She looked all round.
“Well, I have to stop this thing before Syndrome does. . .” Violet dashed into an alley way and took out her Super Suit from her purse. “. . .even if it means doing it alone.”
Finally the real syndrome is being revealed. Lets hope Vi can defeat the Omnidroid before Syndrome gets to it. But i don’t see how she will be able to. If bullets can’t even pierce it how is Vi going to destroy it unless the machine destroys itself (again). It seems rather hopeless to me…she is going to need some help.
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Here is the next update everyone. Just a warning that this chapter is going to be a little violent. If you believe your brain can’t take it, you don’t have to read it. No hard feelings. Otherwishe, enjoy the chapter.
Chapter 24: Fight with the Omnidroid
Violet quickly slipped on her Super Suit, then put on her gloves and boots. After she placed her mask on her face, Invisigirl rushed to the scene of the action. The moment she faced the gigantic robot, the Omnidroid shot a laser at her. The beam blasted her in the chest, sending her off her feet, rolling on the asphalt. Invisigirl got to her feet. Without warning, the Omnidroid landed right in front of her. The teen heroine screamed at the top of her lungs. The Omnidroid made a fist and swung it down at the young hero. Invisigirl quickly formed a force field, just before the robotic fist came smashing down on her. The Omnidroid continued to pound on the purple force field. The more hits the field took, the weaker Invisigirl got. She was sent to her knees as she tried to keep the field up. Finally, Invisigirl couldn’t hold it any longer and dropped her force field. The Omnidroid took a big swing at the exposed Super. The blow sent her hurling into the air and through two buildings. She ended up crashing on the side of the building. A dazed Invisigirl slowly opened her eyes. She slowly and painfully got to her feet.
“I can’t let him win.” She said to herself as the Omnidroid approached. “I WON’T!!!”
Invisigirl immediately turned invisible. The confused Omnidroid looked around. All of the sudden, it’s eyes turned into a different color. It focused it’s vison on one certain point, then it fired a laser. The beam hit the inconspicuous heroine square in the chest. The impact knocked her off of her feet, and dragged her on to the street. She struggled to get to her hands and knees.
Syndrome appeared and went up to her. “You can’t beat it Invisigirl. Your force fields and invisibility won’t help you here.”
Invisigirl gave a menacing glare to Syndorme. “I don’t care. I won’t allow you to act like a hero when the city is in danger.” She got to her feet and began to limp over to the Omnidroid.
“If you need any help, just scream.” laughed Syndrome.
Beaten, sore, fatigued, scraped, and hurt, Invisigirl slowly advanced to the Omnidroid. Once she got close enough, she formed a gigantic force field around the giant robot. Trapped inside, the Omnidroid started to beat on the force field it was trapped in. Invisigirl grew more weary as the Omnidroid ruthlessly beat on the force field. At last, Invisigirl released her force field, sending the robot crashing down onto the streets. It got to it’s feet and delivered a right hook to Invisigirl, then followed it with a left hook. A colossal kick to the chin sent her flying into the air. She landed, face first, back on the asphalt. She uncomfortably got back to her feet. Unfortunately, a kick from the Omnidroid, to Invisigirl’s midsection sent her to her knees, clenching her stomach. She writhed in pain as the Omnidroid lifted her up by her hair. A devastating punch to the face projected her through the city. She crashed into a tree nearby. The large trunk broke as her spine collided on to the tree. Invisigirl moaned in pain as Syndrome went up to her once again.
“It’ll be all over soon if you just give up. I can save you from this.” He offered.
Invisigirl just ignored him. As Syndrome slipped away, the Omnidroid returned. It picked up the tree trunk that she crashed into. Invisigirl formed a force field just in time to shield herself. Inauspiciously, one swing was all it took for the teenaged heroine to drop her field. The Omnidroid swung the large tree trunk like a baseball bat at Invisigirl. She was projected through the city as she rolled on the streets of Metroville. She ended up, slumping on the side of a building. Invisigirl was now whimpering, crying, and groaning in pain. Her Super Suit was tattered and torn. The Omnidroid stomped right in front of her. The young Super’s eyes widened in fear as the Omnidroid spun it’s hand really fast like a drill. Syndrome called from the top of the building.
“I can save your life young lady. All you have to do is say it.”
Invisigirl gazed at the Omnidroid. It looked like it was ready for the kill. Tears started to fill her eyes. It dripped from her eyes, down her face, and onto her mutilated Super Suit. She shut her eyes tight.
“HELP ME!!!”
Syndrome was about to fly into action. Unfortunately, a gigantic shoulder tackle from Mr. Incredible sent the Omnidroid to the ground before Syndrome could do anything at all. Once it fell hard onto the street, Frozone glided in and froze the enormous robot in a block of ice. Invisigirl looked up and was utterly in shock. Suddenly, Elastigirl picked her daughter up and carried her away. She was then placed down in an alley.
“M. . .m. . . mom?” inquired Invisigirl.
“Violet, stay here. I promise we’ll be back for you.” commanded Elastigirl as she ran back to the battle, leaving her damaged daughter alone.
“Do you think it can stay in that thing?” Speedster wondered as the team of Supers stared at the Omnidroid frozen in the ice block.
Suddenly, the ice started to crack. The block of ice burst as the robot was released. It shot lasers at all of the Supers. Speedster ran away, Elastigirl sprung to safety, Frozone ice-skated away, and Mr, Incredible rolled on to the sidewalk. Mr. Incredible picked up a taxi cab and threw it to the Omnidroid. The explosion fazed the robot, but it countered by throwing a large bus, filled with civilians at Mr. Incredible. He was prepared to catch it when Frozone created a large, thick, soft, sheet of snow for the bus to land safely on. Then without warning, the Omnidroid grabbed Frozone and threw him into a building.
Elastigirl and Speedster came on the offensive next. The young hero ran circles around the large robot. The Omnidroid tried to shoot lasers at him, but he was so fast. The robot didn’t see Elastigirl spring to the huge robot’s head. She whistled to the robot. The Omnidroid threw a punch to Elastigirl, but she leaped to safety just in time. Instead, the robot punched itself in the face, causing him to crash to the ground. Elastigirl and Speedster were later joined by Mr. Incredible and Frozone.
“Anyone remember how to destroy this thing?” Frozone asked.
Mr. Incredible’s eyes broadened. He exclaimed, “We can’t. It has got to destroy itself.”
“Well, anyone got any ideas?” wondered Elastigirl.
“Okay Incredibles and Frozone. Here is what we are going to do. Offensive Attack: Rush & Crush!” commanded Mr. Incredible.
The Omnidroid continued to destroy cars, wreck buildings, and cause commotion to civilians. All of the sudden, Mr. Incredible delivered a large tackle to the Omnidroid. It stumbled backwards. Elastigirl then stretched her body between two lamp posts, making the robot fall over her. While it was dazed on the street, Frozone fired his freeze ray from his hands at the bottom part of the Omnidroid. This prevented it from getting up. Next, Speedster ran as fast as he could on top of the robot.
“Hey, hit me, if you can.” The young Super teased.
The robot spun it’s fist around so fast. When it stopped, the hand was now formed into a large spear. It lunged its spear hand at Speedster, but he ran out of the way just in time. To Speedster’s surprise, not a dent was left upon impact. He tried the same tactic again. Speedster avoided another swift spear strike, but the blow didn’t effect the Omnidroid at all. Soon, the ice on the bottom side of the robot began to break. Speedster ran off of the robot and rejoined the other adult Supers. Everyone was shocked to see that no damage was done to the exceptionally large robot.
“Dad, Rush & Crush isn’t working!”
“What do we do?” asked Elastigirl. “Its armor must be made of something strong.”
Mr. Incredible thought and thought. The robot began to gradually advance to the Supers. Mr. Incredible finally had an idea. But before he could explain it, the Omnidroid started throwing cars, trucks, and buses at the Supers.
“EVERYONE SCATTER!!!” screamed Mr. Incredible.
Everyone retreated behind a large building as vehicles rained down in the city. There were many crashes and explosions. The Supers then discussed the plan to stop the metallic menace.
Speedster ran from the protection of the building. “Hey, I’m right here you stupid robot! Come and shoot me!”
The Omnidroid found the young hero and started shooting lasers at him. Speedster giggled and dodged every oncoming laser with great agility. He would run up close, then far, right, to left, making extremely unpredictable moves. The lasers never had a chance.
All this was a distraction. While the Omnidroid fired laser after laser at Speedster, Elastigirl slowly wrapped her body around the legs of the robot. She then constrict the legs together, causing the robot to fall once again. Frozone froze the bottom part of the Omnidroid so it can’t escape. Mr. Incredible then ripped the head of the robot apart from its body. That exposed an open target, the central core. Frozone fired his freeze ray inside of th Omnidroid. That shut down the entire robot. But Mr. Incredible wasn’t done yet. Just to be on the safe side, he went in, ripped the main central processor of the robot out, and crushed it with his bare hands.
“Well, that worked.” laughed Speedster.
Elastigirl beamed. “We did it! Great job everyone.”
An inaudible noise was later heard. It got louder and louder with each passing second. Each of the Supers turned their heads and saw people applauding then more people crowded around the team of heroes.
“Wow, haven’t felt this proud in a long time.” smiled Frozone.
“Yeah.” Mr. Incredible agreed. He beamed at his wife and son. “Neither have we.”
Meanwhile, Syndrome was watching the battle from the top of a building. He stared, dumbfounded, at the Supers. A angry look came upon his face as Syndrome flew down to the Supers.
“Have you forgotten that you can’t perform Super Hero Work because your jobs have been terminated?” asked Syndrome.
Mr. Incredible stepped in front of his family. “Really now? Then tell us. Where were you when our daughter was getting beat up by that robot?”
People gasped. Syndrome could feel a sense of unease in his body. Elastigirl was next.
“Tell us why you never showed up when we were fighting?”
People began to murmur to each other. Finally, it was Speedster’s turn. “And why is your robot wrecking havoc on our city?”
Syndrome’s eyes looked right and left. His pupils then settled on the Supers. “So you really want to know do you?” He asked.
An evil grin was placed on his face. His eyes started to change color. At the same time, clouds began to form in the sky. the amorphous clouds began to unite until the sky was covered in dark grey clouds. The sound of thunder could be heard. The civilians and Supers looked up into the sky and saw lighting.
“Syndrome, what are you doing?” asked Elastigirl.
He didn’t answer. All of the sudden, an incredibly large lighting bolt struck down on the crowd of people and on the Supers. The lighting was so bright, even at the edge of the city. When it faded, the clouds began to part, revealing a blue sky and a warm sunshine. Syndrome let out a huge guffaw as he eyed the crowd of unconscious people. The Super made his way through the motionless people and to the unconscious Mr. Incredible, Elastigirl, Speedster, and Frozone. He zapped the Supers with his zero-point-energy beam and levitated them up into the air. Syndrome laughed as he flew from the city of Metroville, with the Supers as his captives.
Ooohhh…Syndrome’s revenge is now in full swing and it looks as if the Parr family and the entire superhero crew are really in trouble. I liked the battle scene although it was rather quick and abrupt. You could have added a little more detail to the superhero’s movements like Mr. Incredible…that way people could follow along with much more ease. After that glitch the story flowed very well…making the battle scene very good.
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You read it pretty fast Al-Bob. BUt thanks for reviewing. And you know, you are the first person to tell me the battle between the SUpers and the Omnidroid seemed fast. I was trying to balace Violet getting thrashed and the actual fighting. BUt its your opinon. Thanks. CHeck for another update next week.
Not that part…the part where they “defeat” the robot…ya now. Mr Incredible chucking the head off of the omnidroid. I found that one part rather quick…
Well, I guess I was trying to aim for a little simplicity. I didn’t want some fancy plan of attack to defeat that huge thing.
ya…that would be hard. You could have just wrote the movements of Mr. Incredible up to the point where he pops the head off.
Next time I write a chapter where anyone of the Incredibles has to fight a giant robot, I’ll remember that.
The battle scene was really intense and action-packed. I admire how you gave Invisigirl such determination and courage. Hopefully she can find a way to defeat Syndrome and save the day.
Chapter 25: Under Pressure
Moments after Syndrome flew away, Invisigirl woke up. She slowly sat up. She tried to recollect everything that occurred. Invisigirl could remember her unfortunate confrontation with the new-and-improved Omnidroid.
“OH MY GOODNESS!” She gasped in surprise, just realizing something important.
She dashed out of the alley where she rested. Looking around, Invisigirl was surprised to see an incredibly large amount of unconscious civilians on the street. Ambulances were everywhere and many paramedics were tending the people. Invisigirl went up to a civilian.
“Hey, wake up.” said she, nudging him.
“I. . . Invisigirl?” He wondered as he started to regain consciousness.
“It’s okay. We’ll get you to a hospital soon.” assured the teenaged heroine. “Tell me, what happened here?”
“I don’t remember.” the man said. “The last thing I can recall is the Incredibles fighting a big robot. Then I saw Syndrome flying in. The last thing I can recall was this bright light. And that is all I remember.”
Invisigirl left the man alone while paramedics took him into an ambulance. She then wandered through the city. Invisigirl looked right, then turned her head to the left. Police were interrogating with probable witnesses. Fire trucks and ambulances were speeding to the hospital and back. She made her way through the city, scared and apprehensive. Invisigirl started to call for her family.
“Mom! Dad! Anyone! Where are you?”
No answer. Her calls echoed throughout the city. She started to worry about them. Invisigirl ran to where she hid her purse. Once she found it, she immediately took out her cell phone. She tried calling home. Unfortunately, no one picked it up. Invisigirl then tried to call her mom. After that attempt failed, she tried calling her dad. Invisigirl just gave up after that.
All of the sudden, a robotic blue bird flew up to the teen heroine. She eyed it carefully until it flew in front of her face. Invisigirl saw it had a brown package in its mouth. Invisigirl took the brown parcel and saw it said “To Invisigirl. Don’t open until 9:00 P.M.” on the front.
“Okay, this is strange.” thought Invisigirl as the robot bird flew away.
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After she changed back into her normal clothes, Violet decided to stop by Edna Mode’s house. Edna Mode, also called E, was the Super Suit designer for all the Supers and is highly recommended. She was very fond of the Parr family and loved visits from them.
“May I have your name please?” asked a security guard. He was displayed on a monitor outside Edna’s estate.
“Violet Parr.” she answered.
“Madam, some girl named Violet Parr is here to see. . .”
“What? Violet Parr? Let her in dahling!” said an excited voice of an old lady.
The laser gate to E’s house opened and Violet made her way up the long, winding driveway to her house. The doors opened and a tiny woman greeted her.
“Violet dahling, such a pleasure to see you again!” Edna proclaimed happily. “Please come in. The sun is setting and it will be getting very cold dear.”
Violet went inside. Once the front doors have been closed, she started a conversation. “So E, how have you been doing lately?”
“Oh just fine dahling. Just fine yet dull. Not much work for me because many Supers are having their jobs terminated by that ugly looking, freak who just had an accident at the barbershop.”
“Syndrome.” Violet whispered.
“Yes, whatever his name was.” E said boisterously. “I can’t believe it! Did you see what he was wearing dahling? You call that a Super Suit? I call that Super Garbage! Just look at the color! Black and white looks so evil. Supers aren’t supposed to look fabulous and heroic! Not an angry villain, seeking revenge. I mean. . .”
“E?” said Violet. Edna did not hear her. She just continued blabbering.
“And look at the cape dahling. Doesn’t anyone ever listen to Edna Mode? Capes are just an fashion disaster waiting to happen! And. . .”
“E?” Vi called a little louder.
“My God that reminds me. The material that he used is so last decade. I mean, who still uses. . .”
“E!!!” shouted an impatient Vi.
“What dahling what?” E enquired.
“My parents and Dash have gone somewhere and I don’t know when they’ll be back. So I’m wondering, can I stay here for a little bit?” lied the teen.
“Dahling, you can stay here as long as you want. I’m glad that you stopped by. It has been a while you know.”
Violet beamed. “Thank you E. I might need to spend the night here. Oh that reminds me.”
Violet gave Edna her thrashed up Super Suit to E. “My God Violet. What happened to you?”
“Nothing really. I just need you to fix it up.”
“Are you sure dahling? You don’t want me to replace the fabric?” E offered.
Violet shook her head. Edna smiled and left to her work lab.
While E was mending Violet’s Super Suit, the teenaged girl decided to grab a bite to eat. She went into E’s kitchen and checked in the refrigerator. She found some left over steamed shrimp and decided to have some. Violet placed her food in the microwave and warmed it up for one minute. One minute passed, and Violet reached in and pulled her food out of the microwave and onto the table. The shrimp tasted so succulent. Violet had never tasted seafood so good. After she finished, she placed the dishes by E’s automatic dishwasher and left.
Violet just sat and waited in Edna’s living room for the next couple of hours. She sat staring at the brown package that she received earlier. Violet pondered what was inside as nine o’clock slowly approached. Finally, it was time. Violet opened the package and found an LCD screen. It was blank, but later, an image was projected on it. Violet was taken aback to see Syndrome on the screen.
“Ah, hello there Invisigirl.” He said.
“Syndrome.” She whispered.
“How are you doing? Alright? Safe? Unharmed? Well, that’s good. I’m going to get straight to the point. You have something that I wish to have Invisigirl.”
“What? What is he talking about?” wondered Violet.
“That video camera of yours.” Syndrome reminded. Violet’s eyes widened in fear. “I believe that it has some. . . confidential material that must not be shown in public. Now listen to me Invisigirl you are going to get that camera and tape and bring it to me. I wish to keep my secret between you and me you see. But I wouldn’t think of not doing it. Because if you do refuse Invisigirl. . .”
Syndrome moved out of the way and Violet was shocked to see Mr. Incredible, Elastigirl, Speedster, and Frozone, stuck on a large boulder, courtesy of a gigantic sticky-ball.
“Oh, and if that isn’t enough, I picked myself a little one.” Syndrome laughed.
Violet was about to break into tears, because she saw her baby brother Jack-Jack in Syndrome’s hand. As the baby cried, the family struggled to break free from the sticky-ball pining them against the large boulder.
“You monster!” Elastigirl glared.
“Once I break out of this, I’ll kill you Syndrome!” threatened Speedster.
Syndrome smiled. “You have until noon tomorrow. The choice is yours Invisigirl. Give up one little video tape, or give up your family.”
And with that, the LCD screen went blank. Violet started to sob excessively. Tears flowed from her eyes. Never in her whole life has she felt so nervous, so scared, so pressured.
“All I wanted was to be normal. So I wouldn’t have to deal with this.” bawled poor Violet.
The sound of her weeping was the only sound in Edna’s room for ten minutes. Finally, Violet wiped away her tears and head out of the living room. She made her way into E’s great common room. She sat herself on one of the couches. Violet looked out the window and saw a full moon in the night sky. She wanted to let all of the tears out again. Violet looked up at the moon once again, and a flashback came to her mind.
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[i]Under a bright full moon was the dark island of Nomanisan. Elastigirl, Violet, and Dash were safe in a cave. Before Elastigirl departed to find her husband she gave her kids one last hug.
“Stay hidden. Keep each other safe. I’ll be back by morning.” She assured her kids.
She stood up and ran out of the cave. Violet, who had her hair veiling her face, chased right after her.
“Mom!” Vi called. Elastigirl stopped and turned toward her daughter. “Mom, what happened on the plane. I’m. . . I’m sorry.” stammered the teenaged, insecure girl. “I wanted to. . . I mean when you asked me to. . . I’m sorry.”
Elastigirl placed a finger on her daughter’s lips. “It isn’t your fault. It wasn’t fair for me to suddenly ask so much of you.” She consoled. Violet continued to look down at the ground in shame. Elastigirl brought her face up so that both mother’s and daughter’s eyes a fixed right at each other. “But things are different now. And doubt is a luxury we can’t afford anymore sweetie. You have more power than you realize. Don’t think. And don’t worry. If the time comes, you’ll know what to do.” Elastigirl brushes Violet’s hair behind her ear. She finishes with one last powerful quote. “It’s in your blood.”
As Elastigirl leaves to search for Mr. Incredible, Violet watches her mother disappear into the jungle. Violet begins to cry as apprehension flowed throughout her body. She looks down at her mask, gripping it with both hands. Vi looks back up, but instead finds an empty jungle, with no sign of her mother anywhere. She puts on a determined look as she places her mask on her face and gazes heroically up into the night sky.[/i]
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As Violet gazed at the moon, the same flashback played in her mind over and over again. Violet wiped away her tears and placed on that same purposeful look she had back on Nomanisan Island. In her mind, she gathered up all of her thoughts and emotions and mentally prepared herself for what was to come.
“There you are dahling.” came a sudden voice from behind Vi. It was E. In her hand was Violet’s newly mended Super Suit.
“Gee, thank you E.”
“Oh, dahling. I love my work. Fabricating, repairing, inventing, mending, it’s all part of the puzzle that make you dear.”
Violet was confused. “Excuse me? I didn’t get that.”
Edna laughed. “Dahling, your Super Suit is what you are. It tells what kind of person are you. From what you put me through Violet dahling, your suit showed me what kind of a heroine you are. You take on all kinds of challenges, no matter how hard they are or how reluctant you are to face them. But no matter what happens, whether it’s hard or easy for you, whether you get hurt a little or get beaten, you always pull through in the end.”
Violet nodded. After thanking E, she headed off to the guest room to sleep. Two things couldn’t escape from her mind. First was E comparing herself to her Super Suit. The second was what she was going to do with the video camera Syndrome wanted. After an hour of tossing, turning, and thinking, Violet finally fell asleep.
She woke up at six o’clock the next morning. She got out of bed and went into E’s room. She woke the sleeping old lady up. Edna slowly opened her eyes.
“Dahling, it’s early. What do you want?” She groggily asked.
“Sorry to wake you up this early E.” apologized Violet. “But I am wondering. Do you have a way that lead to the NSA Headquarters?”
“Down the hall, third door on the right. No code necessary. Accessible to anyone that is a Super.”
Violet left the room and found the door. H hand scanner popped out. She placed her hand on it. After her identification was verified, the door opened up, revealing a long, winding slide down to the NSA HQ. Violet arrived minutes later. She walked up to the front desk.
“Good morning Invisigirl.” greeted the desk clerk. “You’re here quite early.”
Violet smiled. “I know. Listen, do you still have that video camera I gave to you yesterday?”
The desk clerk nodded. “Yes I do. Rick hasn’t returned yet.”
She handed Violet the camera. Her hands trembled as she held it in her hands. She was still debating and pondering on what she should do. Finally, after five long minutes, she took the camera and left the NSA HQ.
Here we go…Violet needs to really be cautious with that tape…
If i were her i would copy the tape over to anther media source then bring the tape with me for the family. Unfortunitly you can never trust syndrome so he will probably trick you.
Review-Great chapter…a real thinker. Lets you relax and work over the puzzle that Violet has gotten herself into. 9.5/10
Thanks for the review Al-Bob.