I think my cutoffs are my best parts…
update sometime on thursday-sunday …maybe earlier
so just hang in there…
I can’t wait.
Man, Al-Bob!!!
“You leaves me no choice”! Whenever you write a chapter of this, I just have to read it!!!
You ROCK! (leaves–u made a typo, but other than that, it was pretty freakin’ awesome!)
I have some really good news… Due to some work by myself my story is actually completed on paper. The only thing to do now is copy it to text so hang in there…we’re almost done… 
Chapter 11
Estaban turned around to see two supers standing in the doorway.
“You won’t get away with brain washing my sister!”
“Oh yah…take this.”
Dash flinched jumping at Estaban.
WOOSHHH…blue laser surrounded both supers.
“HAHAHA!!! Now I’ve got you! You won’t be interfering with my plans now.”
With that he started to move away from the prostrate Invisiforce and towards the command center. Dash and Flex watched as he dumped them under a large chute in the ceiling. They felt themselves rising to the ceiling and flying through the chute towards an unknown destination.
“Now where was I?”
“Hoping no one else showed up to stop your plan.”
A voice said behind him. There stood Electragirl and Frozone. Frozone had even dared to take one step towards him.
“There’s more of you?!?”
“Yes there is Estaban…have some ice.”
Frozone the ice man started his attack. A nice glacier sped towards Estaban who reacting normally shot out a mind wave. Frozone started by the tactic couldn’t resist the onslaught. His ice started to shrink into a pillar and then into a popsicle.
“Pull back….all back…Take back this ice from that nice man!!”
Frozone struggled desperately as his ice and mind started to shrink. He crumpled to the floor in exhaustion but Estaban continued.
At last!!! Estaban started to say. 25 years and now I can finally get back at you for ruining my chances for the new superhero of the year award. 25 years!!! Now my revenge is full…I will conquer you…I will win…I wil…THUMP!!! Estaban staggered to the floor in pain as Electragirl who had waited patiently for her turn stood over him. Estaban held his head due to a monstrous blow that had fallen upon his mask. He grimmiced in pain but just as his head hit the floor his grin grew and he started to recover himself.
Thump…Crash!!! Electragirl was upside down on the opposite wall. With one swift motion both supers had delivered blows. One from Electragirl to the stomach of Estaban. The other from Estaban to the chest of Electragirl. This blow had unfortunately been much harder and sent the poor super flying across the room.
She starred starry-eyed as Estaban looked at her. He turned to finish off Frozone!
“WHOOOSSHHH!!!”
“NOOOOOOO!!!”
“AUUUGGHHHH!!!”
Estaban wasn’t quick enough and in consequence was covered head to foot with clear through ice. His eyes glanced everywhere like a tiger eyeing a hunter.
Electragirl and Frozone comforted each other on their nearly fatal event. As soon as Electragirl was calmed she said.
“Where’s Flex and Dash??”
Flex fell on top of something…it moved and spoke to him!
“GET OFF ME!!!”
“Sorry Dash. Are you okay?”
“NO!!”
Ignoring his unhappy friend Flex continued his questions…
“Where are we?”
You are in my secret chamber. Said a voice from the end of the room.
Flex starred in amazement as the lights went on. He shuddered and fell backwards when he say the adversary!
It was the Omnidroid!!!
Ooh, nice fighting scene. Really well done. Great way to end it too. A very exciting chapter.
Chapter 12
“Welcome to the center of all evil, boys! Please take a seat.”
“We aren’t taking any seats thank you.”
The droid seemed put out by this response.
“Shall we fight now or should I tell you about my indestructible plan first?”
“Fight now…plan later.” Was Flex’s response.
“Very well defend yourselves!”
The droid sped towards them! The boys ducked as it flew over them! Flew…Flex was delighted to see that! He took off after it with all haste. Dash not being able to fly instead ran below the two just trying to keep up.
The droid seemed to like this.
“Oh, come on you slow pokes! I thought you both were fastest of your kinds! You won’t ever catch me at that rate…and even if you do catch me what can you do to break me! HAHAHA!!!”
“We’ll think of something to get rid of you by!” Flex said in response.
The droid didn’t like this kind of encouragement and confidence…
“Well then…lets kick it up a notch shall we?”
With that he started to go much faster almost gaining ground on Flex.
“How about now suckers!!!”
“Still possible…”added Dash.
Flex who was starting to tire decided that facing his adversary was much better. Hovering in the path that they had been running for five minutes he waited for the droid. It came around the room. The droid upon seeing his opponent waiting for him sped up all the more and ran straight into Flex. Flex fell to the ground. Dash halting as soon as Flex was hit raced over to where he was going to land. Flex fell right on top of the command panel that the droid had at the end of the room. His body hit some of the buttons and suddenly the room started to move. The panels on the walls slid down revealing glass windows looking out over the facility. In the east window a sight came into view. Dash and Flex starred in awe as Estaban appeared in the window completely covered in ice. Next to him was Frozone and Electragirl.
“The…y’re…safe.” Sighed Flex going in and out of consciousness.
“Yeah but we’re not!”
Invisiforce was helped up by a young super who she didn’t even recognize.
“You must be Violet? I’m Heather.”
Heather?
Yep…it’s a long story and Dash and Flex are in trouble…
Flex?
“Another long story…I need to find something in the facility to stop that droid with.”
“Yes there is. Come with me!”
Frozone looked from the room over to Estaban.
“I always thought you would be a problem. Why did you have to do all of this.”
He looked back at the droid.
Estaban started to feel his feet again. The ice was melting quickly due to the volcano he was in. His smirk grew larger!
Oh boy, I can feel something exciting coming up! Great chapter. I love it. I wonder whats going to happen next? I also wonder if the parents are doing fine.
Anyways, nice chapter. Well written and quickly updated too.
OH MY GOSH!!!
This is awesome!!!
You should see if DOOM comics could do this (maybe?).
Update soon…
maybe sunday.
Wow, really exciting, Al-Bob! I liked when Electragirl (Heather) says ,“Yep, it’s a long story…another long story.” And that’s just one of the many things I like about this. Real intense on those fights.
Well, I was hoping a little sooner, but an update is an updateno matter how long it takes. I can’t wait for it.
Sunday… Sunday… SUNDAY!!!
yep…sunday.
I lost yesterday to school and afternoon work with dad (8 hours of photography)
got home this morning at 1;00 then had to answer a call about a new software on his pc. This software is for new photography supplies and cool sports themed stuff. That went from 11-1 and i woke up at 9 so i’ve had a busy day already. Now i just got on for the first time in 2-3 days so it’ll be saturday or sunday when i can get my brothers away from the pc enough to post another chapter.
its all writen…now to post the finale next…its over
Chapter 13
Dash was soon running for his life as the Droid seeing the prosterate Flex turned all of its attention of him. It would swoop low trying to run him over. Then after several tries it brought out a laser gun but even this was useless because Dash was too fast to even aim at. Dash started to get tired…
“How does this thing get its energy from?”
The droid stopped to answer him…
“I have a secret external power source that only I know about. I can power up every 20 minutes without having to stay still. I am UNDEFEATABLE!!!”
Electragirl and Invisiforce had just rounded the bend when to their astonishment a herd of bots stood in their path. Invisiforce instantly threw up a force field protecting Electragirl. The robots started to attack the duo via laser guns and metal arms. Electragirl knew exactly what to do. She plunged headfirst into the oncoming bots sending them crashing into the walls on either sides. Then she would plunge into them and compelling them into the field would send them into history. 17 droids lined the walls after the small group stopped. They swiftly left them behind and rushing into the supers room they walked over to the cylinder-like containers.
“Hey Heather! Can you break glass?”
“Why there is nothing inside these containers?”
“Just break them and watch.”
“Sure one glass container coming down!”
Smash!!! The container broke and shattered to the floor. Nothing happened except that the light inside of them went from the center of the cases to the floor still in their circular shape.
Electragirl watched in surprise as the two lights slowly grew taking shape and forming two superheroes.
“OHHHH…my back hurts!” Mr. Incredible said as soon as he was reformatted.
“Speak for yourself dear!” Elastigirl was rather cranky from her occupied confinement. “I ache all over.”
Mr. Incredible looked around. “VIOLET!!”
“Violet?”
“MOM! DAD! Oh thank goodness your safe!”
“Oh violet…who’s this?”
“Mom…Dad this is Heather she is also a super. She came with Dash, Flex, and Frozone and rescued me.”
“Where did you come from Heather?”
“It’s a long story Mr. and Mrs. Parr. But right now we have to get you guys back with Frozone. Flex and Dash are still fighting that droid.”
“Flex?”
“Another long story.” Violet and Heather said in unison.
“Common we gotta help Dash!”
“Hold on Violet…we don’t have to do anything.”
“What?”
Dash was just about to give up on dodging the lasers when the droid stopped over its command desk. It quietly started to hover over Flex who was still inconscious. It started to talk again.
You are a little creep who deserves to get punished. You have successfully dodged all of my physical powers so I’m going to get crafty with you instead. As you can see I’m directly over your friend. If that is what you call him…more like your arch-nemesis friend. You need to obey my command or I will smash his skull in.
Dash starred in amazement as the Droid starred at him.
“Now! Walk towards the circle in the middle of the room!”
Dash walked briskly towards the center. A slight glitch from Flex made him slow down.
“Faster!” The droid sensing he was slowing down started to rise itself. “Or I’ll smash your friend.”
Dash arrived near the center…
Suddenly the droid was hit from below and started to spin out of control towards the wall. Flex who had regained conscience delivered a uppercut blow with his foot on the wing of the droid. Dash sensing an opportunity at hand rushed over to the wall and delivered his own blow. The droid was sent spinning like a top towards the opposite wall. Suddenly the droid started to slow down. Dash and Flex watched as the droid actually started to lost control as it sped towards the wall. It regained control after a furious attempt to level itself out.
The droid was getting confused.
Hey what’s going on. How come I’m losing power. NO! [battery level low] NO!
Flex leaped onto the droid delivering a blow to the wing. The droid spun out to the left. Dash positioned himself for a final blow. His kick sent the machine realing towards the window! It hit the wall with a sickening THUMP!!!. The impact dented in parts of the top revealing a major compartment of cables and hardware. Blue electricity emitted from the socket covering the droid. ZZZZZzzzzttttt……It sputtered to a stop. The great droid was dead.
i’m such a over estimator…i said sunday and what do you know i get it finished on friday night…
i’ll have the whole story up sometime soon…next 15 mintues…
Editted by TSS (combined bothe posts)
Oh wow! A very exciting chapter Al-Bob. You really delivered on those fight scenes. I’m glad that the droid menace is over. I can’t wait to read the finale.
and here it is…rather hard to correct but still great…
Chapter 14
As Dash and Flex emerged from the room their parents, Heather, and Violet appeared in the doorway.
“Mom! Dad!”
“Dash…I love you sweetie.”
“Oh I love you guys too. Come meet my friend Flex. Flex this is your uncle and aunt.”
“Chris?”
Flex could only manage a cheesy smile to the remark.
Mr. and Mrs. Incredible were soon asking Flex and Electragirl questions about their secret identities and their personal lives. They also learned that many other supers from the city of Los Angeles were hidden. Unable to appear because of gang violence against them they had stayed hidden almost forgetting their powers.
“That’s not right.” Mr. Incredible said. “They should be able to reveal their powers without hurting themselves.”
Suddenly Invisiforce said, “Where’s V.E. and Frozone?”
The group looked around but the two had totally disappeared!
“They must have gone outside! Quick to the exit!”
The group burst outside to find Frozone and V.E. talking together on the edge of the cave.
Frozone and V.E. didn’t even notice the group until Frozone looked around.
“Oh, hey guys! Come meet my College Room mate Vernon. Vernon he goes by a different name then Van Estaban. His real name is Vernon Equila Matthews. He was my roommate from college. A real smart kid if I remember?”
“No you were the smart kid,” Vernon said in response. “I was the one playing all those Grand Theft Auto games. Especially when you were home.”
Electragirl was the first to notice the change in Vernon. “What happened to your mask?”
“Frozone my good friend removed my mask with his ice. You see my mask is heat sensitive. Once I die or get cold the mask would have removed itself to seek another super to attach itself too. This device was just one of the many inventions that the droid made. Once Frozone applied the ice the mask removed itself and I was back to my normal self.”
“So your back to your original character?”
“Yes I am and I have Frozone to thank for.”
“What about your master plan? You know to create a super-powerhouse?”
“Unfortunately that was just the droid using my creativity to try and persuade you to agree to my demands. I never really had that in mind.”
Suddenly from inside the volcano a violent shaking began. The group looked around as little holes began to appear around the mountainside. From these holes little containers shot forth.
“GermX!” Shouted Vern. “They’re headed towards strategic destinations. We must stop them.”
“I can do that,” Said Flex. He looked over at Dash.
Dash looked at him. “Go for it!”
Flex started to grin and he jutted away.
Where did he go?
There he is!
Now where?
“Ummm…over there do you see him. He’s throwing the containers into the sea to destroy them.”
“Are there any more containers?”
“Noooo…that’s all of them.”
Flex soon returned and was congratulated on his flight.
“Great Job Flex! Well Done!”
Dash wasn’t looking at Flex though he was searching for something on the horizon.
“Hey! What’s that?”
Elastigirl saw it first. “Its another container we missed! How did we miss it?”
Vern looked at it. “It’s a specialty container. It has a specific location that only the droid and myself know of. If that is off to the north….its for your house. It’s a slow one because it requires more energy to travel you might be able to catch up to it.”
Flex was instantly after it. Dash also started after it on the water. They gained ground every mile gradually catching up to the missile of destruction.
Soon they started to see the coast of California come into view.
“It’s now or never Dash!” Flex called from above.
They started into the landscape. They passed crops and businesses. They were gaining but the distance was getting less and less. Dash was just about to see Flex grab it when his house could be seen over the horizon!
“Grab it!!!”
Flex reached for all he was worth! The device suddenly plummeted towards earth. It was too late! The device hit the house square on. In 2 minutes the whole house was gone leaving nothing but the earth and foundations. Flex and Dash watched the entire deconstruction from a safe place. Dash watched as his bedroom fell apart with all of his fanfare and trophies inside. Flex attempted to encourage him…
“Dash?”
“Yah.”
“Look at the bright side.”
“What bright side? My house is gone!”
“Dash?”
“What!”
“Thank You!”
Dash looked at him.
“Thanks for all the help you have done saving your family from an evil mastermind, helping get Frozone and Heather to land, and for saving me twice. I think a house going down would be better then losing any of the things you did today.”
Dash smiled.
“Common lets go back to the island.”
Later that afternoon the Super group had loaded onto another Learjet and were soon heading away to California. Mr. and Mrs. Parr sat in the front driving the plane while Flex, Violet, Heather, and Dash sat in the middle. Dash was still feeling upset when he heard his dad say…
“We could change the island.”
Dash rushed over to the cockpit.
“Change the island? What do you mean?”
Dash, your mom and I have been thinking. Supers who can’t reveal their powers should be given the chance to show what they have in an environment that is comfortable. We want to change Nomanisan into a super’s academy island. Supers could actually live there and respond to calls instantly. There they could train and learn and grow into the super they always wanted to be. We are also thinking that since we have just lost our house we could live there and be the owners of the academy.
“Sweet…does that mean that Flex and Electragirl would be able to live there too?”
Flex would be able to live there but Electragirl would have to visit occasionally because she lives in L.A. But Flex could easily stay there.
“Sweet!!!” Dash started to turn back towards the group. He stopped and turned around. “Does this mean we will have to move again?!?!”
The End
Wow, that was a pretty incredible story you wrote. I like that you finished it off with a bang. Really nicee chapter. The only problem I have with it is the “Grand THeft Auto” game part. That wasn’t made until the 21st century right? Way out of the time from of the Incredibles.
Oh well, pretty sick story. I loved it. I hope to read more TI stories from ya.
one last thing…the epilogue
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3 Years Later
Flex was searching for that person. He had just missed being hit by a flying bomb when he noticed the man sneak off. Down below Dash was searching the area for any signs. Suddenly a black object moved in the corner of Flex’s eye.
“I see him.” He radioed down to Dash. “He’s heading towards the car dealership.”
“Roger that…”
At the car dealership, the man snuck in and turned the light on inside an office. He turned around to the doorway to find two supers standing arms crossed in his way.
“Bomb Voyage!! I should have known!”
“You too…you litle mongerals.”
With a flick of the wrist two mini bombs flew towards the supers, the two dodged them with ease. Suddenly Bomb Voyages eyes turned back and he fell forward. In his place stood Electragirl.
“Ohhh man!!”
“Not again!!”
“What he was going to kill you two. Besides, it’s getting late and I didn’t want him getting away. Flex the facility closes all portals after 11 better get back before you miss it.”
“Yikes…see you guys tomorrow. And with that he pressed a blue button on his watch and soon disintegrated away.”
“Those watches are really cool.” Dash said as soon as he was gone. “Good thing my portal stays open all night. Well I gotta take care of this guy be right back.” He was soon carrying the unconscious Voyage to jail. He returned shortly.
Electragirl looked at him. “Would you walk me home? I hate to walk home alone in the dark unprotected.” She said sarcastically.
“Sure.”
As soon as they started, she asked Dash about what had happened over the past three years.
“Well,” he began. “A few years after our remodeling of Nomanisan Violet and Tony engaged and now are having their wedding date for August. They have both moved to Nomanisan where they both help Chris and the students learn about their powers.”
“How old is Violet now…”
“Let me see…22. She is 22 years old. She just graduated from college with a degree last summer.”
“How is Jack-Jack?”
“After moving he really started to grow. He’s now 8 almost ready to start training.”
“What happened to Frozone and Vern?”
“Vern disappeared two years ago but Frozone says he bought an island and lives there alone. Sometimes he goes out to see him and they spend a couple days together. Frozone has started an elite training program at Nomanisan since it’s so easy to get there. He is retired mostly. Vern is also retired and does nothing but write article about supers know.”
“Well that sounds good.”
The party started to approach Heather’s house as they finished their conversation.
“Well you seem very well set for the future Dash. Good night.”
“Good night Heather see you sometime next week.”
Heather walked into her house and Dash pressing his watch slowly disintegrated into the night.
sorry to double post…
stats-13 Chapters
in 4 weeks time!!!
I wrote a 13 chapter story in 4 weeks [does dance]
now i’m looking at Monsters 2, Walle 2, or Ansonia…will tell which one picked and threaded…and when.
Thank You for reading and i hope you enjoyed this as much as i did.
Thank You!!! 