Thanks TSS ! Your chapters are coming out good so far too
!
O.k. i’m gonna work on my chapter now .
Gus what everybody ? Today I’m gonna try to write it in paragraph form . You can tell me
what’s better .
Chapter 11 : Shame Shame Angie
Night
time in Radiator Springs . So quiet . Crickets chirping , Mater snoring , Sally’s Motel sign visible by
Lightning’s cone . And then a crash .
Sally woke up , starteled by the noise . It sounded like a
trash can .
Robbers ! Sally though and quickly drove to Lightning’s cozy
cone . He must have went tractor tipping since he fell asleep closing his door , as it was only 1/2 closed .
" Stickers ? Stickers are you awake ? " Sally asked him a little scared .
Lightning
yawned . " I am now " , he mumbled . half asleep . " What’s wrong ? "
" I heard
something . Not too long ago . "
You could hear tires screeching , and they drove right past the
couple . They couldn’t see who it was though .
" What was that ? " , questioned Lightning , now
wide awake .
" Criminals ? "
" Well in that case we should go get the Sheriff ,
" said Lightning . " that is , if he’s not already hot on their tracks . "
Woods
surrounded Angie and Bolts . Angie had sneaked off with Bolts , since he came to say hello . It was Wednesday
Night , and he said he couldn’t stand being so far away from her .
[i] He’s so sweet like
that [/i] . Angie thought .
" So why the woods ? " , asked Bolts , curious for their
location .
" Do you really think I told them I’m dating you ? Lightning would have a fit , and Doc
would definetly tell daddy . "
Before they could get to the real conversation , they heard a siren
not too far from them .
" Oh , no Sheriff ! He must of heard the trash can fall ! Oh , there gonna
kill me ! " , worried Angie ,
Sheriff raced to the scene , Sally and Lightning right behind them .
When they all saw the two , there grills just stayed open , as if they needed to be put back with screws .
" Miss Weathers , I am afraid you’re under arrest . "
" For what ? " asked
Angie , suprised at what she heard . she thought maybe a ’ what in tarnation’s going on here ?! ’ or a simple
shake of the front . But not that .
" Let’s see here , tresspassing , disturbing the peace , and
loiterin’ . "
" What about me ? " , asked Bolts ,afraid he would be locked up to
.
" I’ll tell you what you get , you little punk ," said Lightning ready to kill him , "
you get a tire sandwhich . I’ll have you so beat up you’ll look like a - "
" Calm down dear
," said Sally , much more calm thn her boyfriend .
" Well , your in another town , so it’s not
my problem . Right there’s the line that separates Radiator springs from the town next door , " said
Sheriff .
Now it was Angie’s turn to have her grill wide open .Bolts mouthed ‘Sorry’ and drove off ,
slowly , knowing he got her in big trouble , and didn;t mean to either . That wasn’t part of Chick’s plan .
It was the next morning , and they were all in traffic court . Angie knew last night wasn’t that
bad , but when Doc found out who was the Defendent this time , she was going to get a stern talking to , during
and after the trial .
" All rise for Judge Hudson , " Sheriff said , and gave Angie a look that
said ’ I hope he goes easy on you , because i’ve seen him mad ’ . Angie gulped as Doc entered the court room .
" Alright Sheriff who is it this time ? I hope it not those pain in the bumper kids who always try
to act all tough . " When Doc said this he meant Boost’s crew . when he saw Angie , she looked up at him in
her biggest ’ i’m in so much trouble ’ look and said , " Hey there Doc . "
Doc sighed .
" It’s gonna be a long day . "
It was the afternoon know , and Doc
was pacing the court room .
" What am I gonna do with you Angie ? I never thought I was going to
have to be up there and stare down at you . Over at the Defendent’s spot anyway . " He sighed " Well
i’m gonna have to give you a punishment , even if I don’t want to . Let’s see . what should I do . It’s not
like you can fix a road or anything . I know ! For one week , your going to attend Sarge’s boot camp . "
" What?! "
" You heard
me . Not only that , as your somewhat guardian for the moment , no t.v ( Angie lets her grill fall here ) , no
cellphone ( she gasps) , and no racing !" Now she’s almost at the verge of tears .
" But-
" , she starts
" No buts . " replies Doc . " I don’t like to punish you Angie , but
if i have to use tough love , i have to use tough love . Your stay at boot camp starts tomorrow . And I know
what you were gonna say . You cna use the phone there to talk to you parents only , and you’ll just have to work
harder to get that extra college money your gonna lose . "
Now you guys see why
I called the chapter shame shame angie . Well , is it better than it usually is ?
ooh what if her parents find out? 
Don’t ask me why , but she doesn’t really keep in touch
with her parents that much . There family relationship isn’t so close . That’s what happens sometimes in
celebrity families .
Yeah 
.Oh I was
just going to ask you that. 
,but nevermind good story keep up the good work. 
That’s probably why she like Radiator Springs so much ,
makes her feel like she really has a family .
yup
.I guess Sally is like a sister to her,hey what ever happend to Mia and Tia,if you dont mind me asking.
There still there , just in the background like they usually are .
Here let me
explain it to you what there kind of like to her :
Flo : motherish
ramone , luigi , sarge , sheriff :
uncles
guido , filmore : cousins
mater : close friend
lightning : a much closer brother
sally : aunt
that’s like your sister
doc : an older father
just remember doc’s position . lightning’s too .
oops missed lizzie!
Lizzie : a forgetful grandmother
How long is going to stay there? 
if you mean …
boot camp : 1 week
radiator springs : it’s for convienence . it’s easier being closer to your crew cheif and all so she
can learn . So pretty much as long as her heart desires .
ok.I was laughing when Sally told Lightning “calm down dear”. 
L&S : Well , who else was going to calm him down ? He was ready to beat the shreds out of Bolts .
Chapter 12 : Saved by the Soldier
"I can’t believe he’s making me do this ! " ,
exclaimed Angie , while driving up to Sarge’s Boot Camp the following monday . " I’d rather pick up trash
off the highway instead of this . Then again … " she thought about all the poparazzi that would easily
catch her .
As she entered the setting of her nightmare her grill almost dropped to the floor . The track
, it was devistating . It had about 10 turns , and she had to jump , powerslide , and she knew there was a time
limit . Sarge loved time limits . She remembered the stories about him making sure his troop was back from a
battle in time for some more training . Angie pinched herself , she wasn’t dreaming . She gulped with
disatisfaction and fear .
" Good morning soldier ! " , said Sarge to his new victim
.
" Good morning " , Angie replied softly .
" [b]I can’t hear you
![/b] " , shouted Sarge .
"Good Morning , sir ! " ,
she shouted while trembling slightly .
" As you can see " , explained Sarge , " this is
your first assignment out of 8 . If you finish them faster than your sentence here , Doc said he just might let
you out early . The softie . Can’t even send a teenage girl here without worrying . " Angie’s hopes rised
a bit . " They’re hard though , and he said you must finish them all , if not , you stay longer .
" In this track , you must jump , powerslide , crouch " Angie stared at her tailfin " and
turn quickly between walls of tires . You must do this double-time , in this case , 4 minutes . Are you ready
soldier ? " asked Sarge .
" Sir yes Sir ! " replied Angie ,
a little loud , but loud enough so her voice would get sore by wednesday .
" Then go go go ! "
shouted Sarge .
She drove has fast as she could , dodging each obstacle at light speed . The tire dodging
was hard but she got through it . She just drove a little slower . By the end , she was out of breath , and ready
to take a nap by the shade of a cozy cone umbrella outside of the motel .
" Im sure your tired
soldier . "
" Yes sir . "
" overheated , ready to go take a rest in a nice ,
shady garage while sipping a nice cold refreshing glass of flo’s fuel , watching all of th customers go by .
"
“Oh , yes sir !” , said Anige with a smile .
" Well , you can’t soldier .
" Angie frowned . " The next thing youhave to do is cut my lawn . "
" Your kidding ,
right ? "
" Would you rather have something harder soldier ? "
"Sir no Sir !
"
" Then go go go ! "
She passed that test , and on tuesday she passed the
next two , and wednesday she passed the next two , and thursday she passed the next two . By friday morning she
was happy to go home .
" I bet your ready to leave soldier . "
" Sir , yes sir .
" she replied , her voice a little hoarse . She was covered in dirt , since there were no showers . She
missed her friends , and she talked to her parents before , lying about where she as , saying her cell broke and
was using Sally’s phone . Luckily , her parents don’t like the latest technology , and don’t have caller
i.d. .
" Well , suprise , surprise , you have one more task . " she groaned a bit .
"
Your task … is to beat me on the obstacle course . "
Oh my gooseness , that’s gonna be hard , she
thought .
" On your mark , " said filmore " get set … go ! "
They
raced through the tires , the ramps , everything ! Angie was behind at first , but luckily , sarge bumped into
the tires , giving her the lead . When she saw the finish line she wanted to shout out " kachow " , but
her throat still hurt , so she just whispered it .
" Congratulations soldier , you passed . Even if
you do drive like a girl . "
“Sarge” , said Angie , " I
am a girl . "
" You know what I mean , " he replied with a
smile . " Dismissed! " Sarge saluted her as she left the boot camp .
" Hey guys "
, she said to the gang when she arrived at flo’s .
" What’s wrong with your voice ? " ,
questioned Sally .
" You try shouting ’ Sir , yes sir ’ for five days . It’s just a little hoarse
. "
" How in the world did you finish just in time to get ready for the race ? " asked Doc
. He didn’t know she would finish this fast . He would’ve given her something harder .
" You mean
I can go ? " , Angie smiled ecsaticly .
" Well , you finished , which would mean you can come ,
but I don’t know about that now , your looking a little pale . "
" She needs a new coat of
poly man ! " , said Ramone .
" Oh , please ! " exclaimed Angie , with a small girly
attitude " All I need is a cough drop and i’m fine ! "
The next thing she knew , she was in
her cozy cone with a thermometer in her grill .
" 102.4 . You’re not going Angie . " , Doc
said in a fatherly tone . " We don’t need you sick for next week . "
"What’s next week ?
" asked Angie .
" Next week is the race that you’ll need to win to make sure your in the top 10
. You’re staying , and that’s final . Sally , Flo , you don’t mind if you stay do you ? "
"
I’m fine with it , I usually just watch , " replied Sally .
" I’m working on a new recipe
anyway , " said Flo , " This one should definetly get me the medal for the [i]Cooking
Light[/i] magizine " Best low-fat fuel for on the go " contest . "
" Well
then , it’s settled . You’re staying home with Sally and Flo . I’ll give your parents the message . "
" Humph , " replied an unhappy Angie . She coughed with unsatisfaction .
When Chick
noticed Angie wasn’t there , he also let out a " Humph " .
" This was going to be the
perfect time to get her down ! Oh well , next weekend will do . "
" Oh no , "
whispered Bolts .
This took me all morning and more . I got disrupted
20 times , and one of them was to go food shopping for our New Years Eve party . Hope you liked it !
I just added that Ramone bit . Just like in the movie .
OK
peoples , just wanted to let you know
[b]The next chapter is one of the BIG
ones[/b]
As in i suggest you read it , and maybe reply . After that chapter , the fanfic is
about 1/2 way done . Then all the big stuff comes in and you finally get to see more of the conflict of the story
! I know , it takes a while , but be patient .
Also , when this fanfic’s done , i think i’m going to
make another about The Screamin’ Banshee . I’ll tell
you a little more when we get to the end .
You know what , while i’m at it I mind as well make a short
summary of the story for some people who might have missed some chapters :
[i]Angie
Weathers is the newest racecar in the Piston Cup series . Not only does Angie get Dinoco , she gets many of fans
, mostly because she’s the first girl in Piston Cup history to race and her father is Strip"The King "
Weathers .
Doc decides he’ll be her crew cheif and trainer while being Lightning’s as well . Another
first in Piston Cup history . Lightning doesn’t seem to like the idea , knowing alot of press will think some
other stuff’s between them when he’s really secretly dating Sally , but then once he truely sees who Angie
really is , he starts warming up to the idea , and the two become close friends , almost as brother and sister (
which you’ll see more of later ) .
Bolts is also a new racecar , and he’s partners with Chick . He meets
Angie and they become friends at first , but then Chick forces Bolts to pretend to like her and start dating her
so Chick can make a plan to bring her down . Bolts doesn’t want to do this , but his family has almost no money
, so if he doesn’t want to be homeless , he has to do it .
A little before that , Doc noticed Angie was
watching him taking care of his patients at the doctor’s office . When he asked her why , he found out she
didn’t want to race , she wanted to be a doctor so she could help other cars , and the reason she was racing was
because she needed the money to go to college . Doc then decides to teach her some things ,and Doc & Angie
become like father and daughter , almost more than The King is like Angie’s father . The only difference is
blood ( or would it be oil ?) .
So Angie and Bolts start dating , and Angie is blinded by love . When
Bolts comes to visit Angie secretly , they sneak off into the woods , but then the Sheriff catches them and only
Angie is accused for certain rimes because Bolts was on the other side of the line that separted Radiator Springs
from the next town over .
Angie has to go to Sarge’s boot camp . It was supposed to be for a week ,
but Angie finished all 8 tasks and beat a race with Sarge . Ufortunately , she was too worked out from the Boot
Camp , and became sick with a sore throat and a high fever . Because of this , she stood home with Sally and Flo
instead of going to the race .
Chick was supposed to bring Angie down that weekend , but since she was
sick , he decides to do it the next weekend , the race that tells who will be in the top 10 .
Uh-oh ,
sounds like trouble !
[/i]
wow , now that i look at it , it’s not that short . That’s
like Mitch’s version of short . My version is one paragraph .
arg , curse the wink icon !
Haha – I finally read the
last/current two chapters you recently submitted, and they’re absolutely awesome!
[b]Chapter
Twelve: Saved by the Soldier[/b] has to be my favorite chapter in your series – seriously, I was
cracking up laughing, it was so funny! No offense, but I just love to laugh, and that chapter was hilarious to
me. 
Heheh – again, great job! Your story is wonderful and has an intriguing plot that keeps the
reader going. I wonder what is up with the next “big” chapter. Sounds like Angie will get more than she
bargained for, as will Bolts. And I think Chick has hit a dead end…maybe.
–
Mitch
P.S. Dude, your little short summary would be [i]extremely
short[/i] in my eyes, if it was part of a story. (snigger) Heheh – I’m just kidding with you.
Mitch : Just wondering , what was so funny about the chapter ? I never thought
of myself and my work funny , but that’s just me .
gottalovepixar - I think it was just a combination of things:
Sarge yelling at Angie to speak louder; Angie ending up with a sore throat as a result; etc…
I don’t
know why, but I find things like that funny, especially when I can picture them clearly in my head. I’m that
type of person who likes various crude humor (ie., Team America, etc.), for some
reason.
But hey, it’s a compliment! I love it when someone makes me laugh.
I knew it was a
compliment , i was just asking because i was curious . I never think of myself as funny , my jokes are usually
lame .
ex .
There were 2 muffins in the microwave one muffin said " hey it’s hot in here .
" . The other one said " AAAH !! A TALKING MUFFIN !! "
ok , so it’s not my joke , but
that’s how cheesey mine are .
gottalovepixar - Haha – well, I think it’s funny!
I’ll laugh at
anything; people think I’m crazy.
In any case, I still can’t wait for your next chapter. When will
you write it out, if I may ask?
Hey peoples i think i’ll post the BIG chapter after i’m done with my holiday
homework ( i know , last day and i’m still not finished with it . i’ve been too busy having fun with my second
family a.k.a. u guys )
so as an answer to ur question mitch , about an hour and a 1/2
.
takes me an hour to write it and 1/2 hour for homework . i have to write an essay . Fun for u though
! want to write it for me ? lol
gottalovepixar - Haha – sure, I’ll write it out
for you! Will you get me two free Ratatouille tickets in return? If you do, I think
I might be able to sort something out… (snigger)
An hour, eh? Cool – I can’t wait!