So…how do you guys like my new fan fiction series?
- It’s great! I’m really enjoying it. (Especially since it’s kinda funny.)
- Maybe…but perhaps you could make a few changes to this?
- I can’t really decide what to say about this, so I’ll choose both.
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Just so you guys know, I have a new fan fiction series coming up…gosh, I’ve had this in my head for weeks!
Okay, maybe I’ll let a few things out…just for practice.
Sample Scene #1
The one where Mater is flying around town with Mator
Mater: Hey, Mator! Want to come over with me tonight?
Mator: Dadgum.
Mater: Let’s go to the park.
Mator: Dadgum.
Mater: What are you waiting for?
Mater and the UFM start flying across town towards the park. All of a sudden, Mator gets too near BURN-E, who is trying to fix a broken light on Carl Fredricksen’s front porch!
BURN-E: What the…?! Keep that UFM away from me, please!
Sample Scene 2
[i]Mike Wazowski has planned another night for his show, known to all the citizens of LuxoVille as the Mike Wazowski Comedian Show. Although everyone living in the town had already gathered up in the clubhouse where the event was taking place, it’s a shame that Mike Wazowski could not come up with any funny jokes that night–in fact, he hasn’t been able to do so for weeks!
But this time, he finds funny things being said within anyone in the crowd, as indicated by the whole crowd turning to face whoever would say something funny within the crowd.[/i]
Mike Wazowski: Ladies and gentlemen, welcome to the Mike Wazowski Comedian Show!
(The whole crowd is heard booing, followed by silence.)
George Sanderson: Uh, excuse me! It’s gentle-monsters!
(The whole crowd turns and starts laughing. Wazowski, who is on the stage, tries hard to keep himself from laughing.)
Frozone: What happened to gentle-supers?
(The crowd turns and laughs again.)
Remy: Aren’t I supposed to be a gentle-rat?
(The crowd turns and laughs again.)
Marlin: How about a gentle-fish?
(As the crowd turns to laugh at him, Marlin gets embarrassed.)
Mater: I’m a gentle-truck!
(Crowd turns and laughs again.)
BURN-E: More like a gentle-bot.
(Crowd turns and laughs again. This time, Wazowski lets out a little smirk.)
Merida: How about…gentle-princess?
(Everyone stares in silence. Suddenly, they are finding themselves facing the stage again, for this time Wazowski did burst into laughter!)
Mike Wazowski: Hey, you can’t do that! You’re crazy! There’s no such thing as a gentle-princess! She’s only a female!
(As the crowd boos, several things are being thrown onstage–including Piston Cup trophies, cubes of garbage, chef’s hats, scream can canisters, and an Adventure Book. Wazowski tries to avoid them, because he did not want to get hit. Then the crowd goes to silence, but instead of cheering on him like what was originally planned, they start laughing at him!)
This leaves Wazowski so confused, he immediately leaves the stage. This, of course, left the whole crowd puzzled and confused. But then they decide to stay in the clubhouse for a little while longer, thus continuing on with their own show.
A Girl’s Night Out
It is another Girl’s Night Out at Edna’s. But the resident females are not too happy–apparently most of them had already planned date nights, for which they were already running late.
Edna Mode: Does anyone want to play Monopoly with me?
Celia Mae: No way! I’m supposed to be on a date with Mike Wazowski tonight!
Edna Mode: Oh, but you must do something with me tonight, darling.
Colette Tatou: I can’t do that.
Edna Mode: Why not?
Colette Tatou: Because…I’m supposed to be with Linguini tonight, that’s what!
EVE: Uh, Colette? I though Edna was talking to Celia.
Edna Mode: I can see that, darlings.
EVE: Please don’t call everyone a darling, Edna.
Edna Mode: So? That’s just the way I like to talk.
EVE: Well, I can already see that getting old!
The other females leave the house as fast as they can before Edna could notice.
Outtakes in LuxoVille
M-O and BURN-E playing another game of Star Wars
M-O: Obi-Wan told me you killed my father.
BURN-E: No. I am your father!
M-O: Noooo! No!
BURN-E: You must join me, I insist!
M-O: I’ll never join you!
(They both stare at each other, realizing they had forgotten their light sabers.)
M-O: Something tells me we’re not doing this right…
(Suddenly, Mator passes by. M-O and BURN-E both start acting up, for Mator had come too near…again.)
BURN-E: What the…?! Keep that UFM away from me, please!
Well, I better stop there for the night. So…what do you think of this new series so far?
EDIT: Eliminated one of the segments based on recent feedback.
SECOND EDIT: Decided to eliminate another segment due to a problem with the plot.