The Incredibles Trilogy: A New Threat

[Violet_Parr]

Great chapter, TSS ! Again, you’ve explained everything rather well. I’ll have to be honest, I agree with TDIT that, maybe you don’t need to go so deep into the every-day activities, though I do like hearing about Violet’s day. The only other suggestion that I would have is that, with Violet’s friends being kidnapped and all, it still seems like she’s being pretty nonchalant about it. But you did do a great job showing how Violet’s used to being able to tell her parents everything, and how not being able to is ripping her up inside. And I like how you were able to give Violet an excuse to go patrolling early without her lying. That does remind me of something she would do, as she seems to not be good at lying.

Oh! And I think I did see your cameo .

Violet also saw a skinny Asian guy kissing a 4’11” Filipino girl passionately on the lips behind her.

Were you the Asian man ?

Now for the Father/Daughter scene … all I can say is, very, very sweet. I think you did a good job expressing how Bob’s torn in a way, that he wants Violet to grow up and be independent, but at the same time, he’s gonna miss his little girl. Though I did like the subtlety of the past Father/Daughter scenes, I did enjoy the speech. Not too long, not too short, not too sappy, but still very sweet. What really impressed me was when Violet ran up and hugged him. That and the dialog were the best parts.

I can’t wait to see how things go for Violet at the harbor. Over-all, I was impressed. You definitely haven’t disappointed me, TSS . Awesome job ! I can’t wait to see what happens.

[The_Star_Swordsman]

TDIT:

I can probably agree with you about describing her mundane life. But my english professor two semesters ago told me that there is no such thing as too much detai. It might sound unnessecary, but I thought that it would be useful to give you guys a nice mental picture.

I like your suggestion of Violet asking her father a question about encountering an obstacle. Once again, I wasn’t thinking. But at least you thought it was still well done. Thanks.

Thanks for your review/criticisms TDIT.

Violet Parr:

Well, like I said with TDIT, I thought that more detail could give you more of a defined picture of the chapter. And you noticed that Vi has been acting nonchalant about it. Well, if she acted any differently, would she have aroused suspicion?

I was waiting to read what you would say about the Violet/Bob speech. Really thoughtful of you. I’m glad you liked it. But let me ask you. Which Violet/Bob scene did you like from before? And was it from this story or another story?

All Readers:

Great job! You found me! Here’s a cookie!

Anyways, my next two chapters are just coing to be filler chapters. Their going to be flashbacks of how Violet met Kari and Tony and some other favorable memories. I know, it might seem a little pointless, but I wanted to explore what it could’ve been like when they all met. I mean, I haven’t read any story that gave a definitive theory.

[Violet_Parr]

I see what you mean, TSS. Maybe I was just being a little over-critical. Sorry. Personally, I like the detail, every other time I enjoyed it. It just felt in this instance like it was delaying the story. But it was still okay. And you’re right about Violet being nonchalant. She did have to be like that. I just meant that, maybe she’d be acting a little more stressed or upset. That wouldn’t necessarily hint anything at her parents other other than she’s scared for her friends. But enough with my silly little criticisms. It was an awesome chapter .

The Father/Daughter scene that I really liked from before was from this story, the one after they fought with Morticon, and Bob picked her up and was so nice to her. That was extraordinarily sweet. It just seemed so natural. Maybe that was because it happened by accident. Again, great job with that.

Anyway, great job, TSS ! Keep it up! I can’t wait for the next chapter. It’ll be nice to see how they all met. And if no one’s written a theory on it before, you’re breaking some serious ground.

[The_Star_Swordsman]

Chapter 18: Memories and Flashbacks (Part One)

It was about five o’ clock PM and Violet had about one hour before she had to meet at the Metroville Harbor, Port A113. She began her walk over to the harbor. It wasn’t very far away. Her dad dropped her off a mile away from the coast. At a walking pace, it would take her from between twenty-five to thirty minutes. During her walk over there, she began to recall some of the best memories she had ever had with her best friend Kari.

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Helen had just pulled up in the parking lot of Metroville Elementary School. After finding a parking space, she turned around and looked at her two kids.

“Now listen you two. I want you to have a fun day at school. I know it is hard transitioning to a new school, but I want you to try to enjoy it. Make new friends, and learn. And most importantly, do NOT use your powers while at school. I do not want anyone to see you using your powers or you will be grounded for a week.

Young Dash and Violet nodded then got out of the car with their backpacks and school supplies. Helen first escorted the two children to the main office. After checking in, Helen and Violet walked Dash to his first grade class. Violet waited outside while Helen and Dash entered the classroom. Two minutes later, Helen came out and walked Violet over to her room. As they approached closer and closer, the young girl became more and more nervous. Her entire body was shaking. Helen opened the door and both went inside. Everyone in the class eyed Violet, who was frozen with uneasiness. Helen, holding her daughter’s hand, walked her to the front of the room. She started talking to the teacher. Violet looked at every student. Everyone started whispering excitedly about the new student.

“Listen up class.” said the teacher. “We have a new student joining our class today. I would like you to meet Violet Parr. Now she is very shy, so I want you all to make her feel right at home.”

“Hi Violet.” the class voiced in unison.

The young girl said nothing. The teacher smiled.

“Kari, would you raise your hand please?” she asked.

A young girl with a red ponytail and braces waved. Violet saw her, cracked a small grin and waved back. She slowly walked over to the empty desk next to Kari. After dropping her backpack behind her chair and placing her supplies on the desk, Helen took Violet to the door. She bent down on one knee and brushed on Violet’s clothes and placed her hair behind her ears.

“Okay Violet, I want you to have a good first day at school alright? I’ll meet you at the front of the school to pick you up okay?”

Helen gave her daughter a hug, trying to hold back a tear that was about to shed.

“I love you Violet. Bye.”

“Bye mom.” she replied.

Helen left the room and Violet walked over to her seat. The whole class started chattering while the teacher was preparing her next lesson. Kari smiled at her new neighbor.

“Welcome to Metroville Violet. I’m Kari.”

She extended out a hand. Violet, now feeling more relaxed grabbed it and shook it.

“Nice to meet you Kari. You have got a pretty nice name.”

“Yeah,” beamed Kari, “my guess is that my mom wanted to name me Carrie, but my dad wanted to name me Karen. So they sorta combined both names, only they took out the last two letters of Karen and took out the first four letters of Carrie, dropping the “e” in the process. Or did they leave in the first two letters of Karen and took out the first three letters of Carrie?”

Listening to Kari babble made Violet giggle a bit. Sometime, she could not understand what she was talking about. There were times where she would completely get off-topic. However, both shared a wonderful conversation together. They talked about their families, their hobbies, favorite subjects, movies, and books.

The teacher looked at the two chatting girls and smiled.

“Excuse me Violet and Kari, forgive me for interrupting your introduction, but it is time for our spelling lesson.”

Kari groaned loudly. Most of the class laughed, and so did Violet. The teacher giggled lightly.

“Oh don’t worry Kari. You two will have plenty of time to talk during recess.”

“Yes, Mrs. Richards.” Kari answered.

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Violet smiled, looking back on her first memory with Kari. She had been her first friend since she moved to Metroville and has remained so ever since.

Thirty minutes later, she finally reached the beaches of Metroville. Violet saw people surfing on the waves and couples walking together on the sand. She saw the sun starting to set on the horizon. Violet took a minute to enjoy the beautiful sight.

To her right, not far away was the Metroville Pier, where a lot of rides were lit with bright flashing lights and loud noises echoed in the air. She walked over to the pier. She knew she would not have anytime to go on a ride; however she was feeling a little hungry. She walked to a nearby hot dog stand. While ordering her hot dog and soda, she heard a loud noise. Violet looked up in the air and saw an airplane flying out of the city and across the Pacific Ocean. Violet smiled as another flashback started to play in her mind.

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“You’re not coming!” interjected Helen, shoving her two kids out of her room. “AND I’VE GOTTA PACK!!!”

Helen slammed the door behind her. Violet and Dash stood in the hall, utterly confused.

The teenaged girl turned to her brother and asked in a monotonic voice, “What makes you think it’s special?”

“I don’t know. But why did mom tried to hide it?” replied Dash, taping the costume in Violet’s hand. Dash sprinted away. Violet watched her little brother run off then turned her attention to the Super Suit. If Dash was right about it being special, then there must be something unique about this outfit, compared to her other clothes.

With the costume held firmly in her right hand, Violet made her left hand disappear. She slowly moved her invisible hand to the Super Suit. She touched the sleeve. Upon contact, the suit vanished. Violet gasped with widened eyes. None of her clothes that she wore could disappear. She released the sleeve and made her hand reappear. After registering everything that just happened, she winced back at the door to her mom’s room. Violet placed her ear on the door and could hear her mother talking on the phone.

“Snug, I’m calling in a solid you owe me.” said Helen.

Vi wondered, “What is she talking about?”

“A jet. What do you got that’s fast?” Helen asked. Two minutes later, “Great. I’ll meet you at the airport in two hours. Bye, Snug.”

As soon as Violet heard the word “bye”, she took her ear off of the door and darted into the family room. She hopped on to the couch and began to act casual, expecting her mom to come out of her room. She didn’t. Violet kept an eye on her door. Her head then turned to her Super Suit on her lap. She wondered if it would turn invisible again. Violet made her hand disappear, and after touching the outfit, it vanished right in front of her. Violet took her hand off, making the Super Suit reappear.

“Wow, that was cool!” stated an excited Dash.

“SHHHHHHHHH!” Violet hushed. “Follow me.”

Violet made her way quickly but quietly to her room. Dash followed after her.

“Vi, what’s going on?” asked Dash, a little too loudly for Violet.

“SHHHHHHHHH!”

Dash looked at her sister with an annoyed expression. “You have been acting weird lately since you got that costume. Speaking of which, could you make it disappear again? I think it’s cool.”

Violet sighed. “Dash, don’t you get it? Have you been paying attention to what’s been going on? Dad has been going to these “conferences”, mom is getting suspicious, and now these outfits!”

“So?” asked the young Super. Violet slapped her hand to her forehead.

“Dash, something’s up with mom. I’m going to find out what.”

Dash raised an eyebrow. “Exactly how are you going to do that?”

“Mom just called someone and asked for a jet. I’m going to follow her and find out what is going on.”

”Vi, you probably are worrying a little too much. What if it isn’t a big deal?”

“Dash, I don’t know. Mom suspects something of Dad. It may not be a big deal, but I’m going to find out, just in case.”

Violet got off of her bed and went over to her phone by the head of her bed. She started dialing a number. Meanwhile, Dash made up his mind.

“Vi, I’m coming with you.”

”No you aren’t Dash.”

”But why not?” he complained.

Violet put the phone down and stared at him. “I have got four good reasons: You are loud and immature; I have got invisibility powers, and mom put me in charge and I said so. Any more questions?”

Dash sighed angrily. “No, but just curious, who are you calling?”

“My best friend Kari. She is going to baby-sit you and Jack-Jack while I’m gone.”

“Kari?” asked the young boy. “The ditzy, brace-face girl you call your friend?”

“Dash, I’m going to count to three and if you aren’t out of my room . . .”

Dash sped out of Violet’s room and into the family room. He did not need to be told twice. Violet sighed, picked up her phone and finished dialing the number to Kari’s home.”

“Hello, this is the McKeen residence.” said a voice. It was Kari.

“Kari, it me Violet.”

“Oh hey Vi, what’s going on?”

“Nothing much. Listen Kari, I need to at my house to baby-sit for me in like thirty minutes.”

“This is kind of short notice Vi.” told Kari.

“I know.” she replied. “But it is an emergency. Just for the night please? I promise I will pay you back big time.”

“Oh don’t worry about it Vi. That’s what friends are for. I’ll be there. Just let me gather some toys first.”

“Thank you so much Kari. You are a lifesaver. I’ll see you soon. Bye.”

Thirty minutes later, the doorbell rang. Helen went to go get it. Standing on the doormat was Kari McKeen.

“Hello Mrs. Parr.” greeted Kari happily.

“Uh, hello Kari. What brings you here? Helen wondered with a puzzled look on her face. She saw that Kari had a bag full of baby toys.

“Did Violet tell you?”

“What?” replied Helen.

Before Kari could respond, Violet opened the door, interrupting the conversation.

“Kari, I’m glad you made it. Thanks for bringing the toys. Jack-Jack was getting tired of playing with his old ones.”

Violet hastily escorted Kari inside. Helen started to get a little suspicious.

“Violet, what’s going on?”

Violet turned around and tried to conjure up a believable answer. “I invited Kari over here to help me baby-sit.”

Helen nodded. Violet sighed with relief. Her excuse she gave her mom was not a true lie. Kari was going to baby-sit Dash and Jack-Jack after all.

Minutes later, Kari and Violet were sitting on the couch, watching Jack-Jack sleep in his pen. Violet got up to her feet.

“Kari, I’ll be back okay? I’m just going to use the restroom, and then I’m going to head out and run some errands. I’ll be back in a few hours.”

“Where are you going?” Kari questioned.

“I’m going to get some school supplies for an upcoming project, I’ll be back.”

Kari nodded. “Okay, take your time.”

Violet rushed over to her room and found her Super Suit still resting on her bed. She quickly undressed and got into her Super Suit. She took off her shoes and socks and placed slid on her boots. She placed her hands through the gloves. The outfit fit just snugly and perfect.Violet took a quick glance into the mirror. She looked pretty heroic, if it weren’t for the hair covering her face.

Suddenly, Violet heard a voice outside her room. It was her mother’s.

“Kari, where’s Violet?”

“She is in the bathroom!”

Violet ran out of her room and through the back door of her house. She sprinted to the driveway and quickly opened the door of her mother’s car.

“Well, tell her I’m leaving now.” Helen called.

“Okay!” answered Kari.

Violet could see Helen walking to the car. She got into the driver’s seat after placing a bag on the front seat. As Helen started the car, Violet pondered whether or not she should fasten her seatbelt. Her mom would not notice her at all if her seatbelt were unbuckled. However, if she did, she would be safer, but Helen would probably freak out if she saw a seatbelt fastening a ghost to the passenger seat. Violet decided not to. Helen was a very good and safe driver who rarely took any risks.

After a long, yet nerve-wracking drive, Helen finally arrived at the airport. After parking her car, she got out, and walked over to the entrance. When Helen was at a favorable distance, Violet got out of the car and followed her. She hurried through the entrance, weaving her way past unsuspecting people and luggage carts. Violet saw her mother enter an office with the words Snug labeled on the door. Violet could see though the opening her mother hugging an old man. After spending a few minutes catching up, the man went outside and out to the airfield. Helen followed as well as the invisible Violet.

Snug led Helen into a hangar. Inside was a white jet. While Snug and Helen talked about the aircraft, Violet rematerialized and peeked inside the hangar. She could see her mom talking to the old man next to the jet. Vi assumed this was the jet she asked for.

“Cool jet huh Vi?” said a voice from behind.

Violet almost jumped out of her skin. She was about to gasp loudly but covered her mouth before any noise could escape. Violet turned around and could not believe who was standing with her.

“Dash, what are you doing here?”

“What does it look like? I’m following you. I want to see what’s up with mom.” explained the young Super.

“Little pest, I told you I was going to do this alone. Go back home.”

Dash snickered. “You aren’t my mom. I don’t have to listen to you.”

“Mom put me in charge! Now go back home this instant!”

Dash stuck out his tongue, and in a blink of an eye, he was gone. Violet had an idea where he ran off to, and it was the last place she wished for him to go. Violet peaked inside the hangar and saw the door to the jet was down and open. Violet quickly became invisible and rushed into the hangar and into the jet.

Violet searched though the passenger seats but could not find Dash. Once she got to the very back of the jet, she found her brother sitting in the very back row with his seatbelt fastened across his lap.

“Dash, what are you doing? Get off of this plane now.” Violet whispered, rematerializing in front of her brother.

Dash jumped a bit but did not let a sound exit his mouth.

“Too late.” he whispered back, pointing at the door.

Violet turned around. She saw Helen make her way toward the cockpit as the doors to the jet closed behind her. Violet new there was no turning back now. She made her way to the front row and quickly buckled her seatbelt. Moments later, the three would take off on an adventure they would never forget.

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Violet finished her dinner. She checked the time, and she had fifteen minutes left until six o’ clock. She left the Metroville Pier and walked over to the Metroville Harbor. Once she arrived, she looked for Port A113. She finally found a warehouse with “A113” painted on the side of the building. She opened the door. It was unlocked. She went inside and found two robots waiting for her.

“Invisigirl, our masters have been waiting for you.” said one in a robotic tone.

“I’m ready to go now. Take me to them.” Violet answered back.

The robots escorted her outside to a small yacht parked along the docks. Violet was surprised that Morticon, The Commander, and Metamorph would allow her to travel like this.

“Our master wishes for you to enjoy your journey as it will be your last.” said the other robot.

“Well, that was very kind of him.” Violet stated sarcasticly. She boarded the boat and looked up into the night sky and whispered to herself, “Hopefully, it won’t.”

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First of all, I would like to thank Dash for inspiring me to write this chapter. Secondly, I know the second flashback might seem a bit longer than the first. I apologize for that. I guess I was too much into the moment.

[Violet_Parr]

Oh, man, TSS. That was the best chapter yet ! I loved it! There were one or two mistakes in the English, but I can’t remember them, and they were minor. I loved the flash backs. I really liked how you showed Violet’s nervousness at school, even when she was young. It was great to see how they met in the first place. I also liked how you showed Violet as an outsider, when everyone was staring at her. And you were very attentive and in-character putting in the part were Helen pushed Violet’s hair back behind her ears. Poor thing, even when she’s young, she’s already covering her face with her hair. And I loved that you kept Kari’s talkative personality. That was great! And I like how you brought up the second flash back. I don’t think the second flash back was too long at all. My favorite thing about this chapter was getting to see how Violet and Dash got on the plain. It was kinda similar to what I thought would happen. I think that’s my favorite version of it so far. I particularly liked the conversation between Violet and Dash. That was just like them. I could actually picture it happening! I could tell you were in the zone there. That was some of the best writing I’ve ever seen from you! I’ve gotta applaud you for that. I can’t write that well. I know it’s sometimes hard to say in-character, too. So, AWSOME JOB !

I’ll really love to see how Violet and Tony met. That’ll be awesome. You think you could give us a “sneak peak?” (You know me. I like previews.)

Any way, great job! I loved it, TSS! I can’t wait for the next chapter!

[The_Star_Swordsman]

Thanks for your review Violet Parr. And well, since you asked, I’ll see what I can do for a preview. Look for one in your PM box.

[The_Star_Swordsman]

Chapter 19: Memories and Flashbacks (Part Two)

The yacht made its way out of the harbor and out to the Pacific Ocean. Violet watched from the starboard side of the boat as Metroville started to fade in the distance. The bright lights illuminating the city grew dim until it disappeared in the distance. The only lights that Violet could see were the lights inside the yacht and the bright moon from above. Violet looked up at the moon light sky and remembered the night Tony took her out to the carnival. It was one of the best dates she’d ever had.

One of the robots approached her. Violet saw it coming from the corner of her eye. She was about to assume a fighting pose but figured out that the robot wasn’t there to attack her.

“What do you want?” she asked.

“We won’t reach our destination for another three hours. Would you like some nourishment?” offered the robot, speaking monotonically.

“No thanks.” Violet replied. “But I think I’ll get changed now. Where is the restroom?

“Down the stairs, first door on the left.”

Violet found the restroom and went inside. She took of her jacket, revealing her Super Suit inside. Once she placed her jacket down, she immediately pressed the dot of the “i” of her Super Suit. This deactivated the homing device in her Super Suit. Violet did not want to risk her homing device going off at the wrong time. As she took of her jeans, she looked at her jacket. Instantly, she recalled the first day she met with Tony.

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Violet sat in the lunch hall of Western View Junior High, eating her ham and Swiss cheese sandwich. Kari sat across from her. She was drinking a bottle of water.

A week had passed since the two started middle school. Sixth grade was very different from fifth grade. Instead of staying in one room for the whole day, she would travel to different parts of the campus for different lessons from different teachers. Lockers were a new concept for her, but she was happy that she had them. It was hard enough to carry one or two books to class.

Violet looked around and saw the students sitting at tables on the ground. The whole school grounds were scattered with every clique imaginable.

She was about to take the last bite of her sandwich when someone caught her eye. A boy, slightly taller than Violet, was walking toward the lunch tables. He sat next to a group of handsome boys, with a few pretty girls close by.

“Kari, who is that?” Violet asked.

“That boy?” replied Kari, looking at the crowd of boys. “Oh he is Tony Rydinger. He just moved here from Municiberg. He has only been at this school for the first half of class and every girl is waiting to pounce on him.”

Violet stared at Tony, her mouth drooped and eyes widened. She felt her sandwich slip through her fingers and on to the ground. Kari looked down at the nearly finished lunch and then at Violet.

“Uh, Vi?”

“Kari,” said Violet softly, “I don’t think I am feeling so good right now.”

“Hmm, really? You don’t look sick.” Kari pointed out. “In fact, you dropped your sandwich after you took a bite, so it couldn’t have been something from the. . .” Kari looked at her best friend and a wide grin came across her face. “Hey, you like Tony Rydinger do you?”

Violet turned around. Kari could see her cheeks turn really red under the curtain of hair veiling her face.

“You do like him Violet!”

“No I don’t!” snapped Violet. “And not so loud, someone might hear you.”

“Why would you care if you didn’t like him?” Kari giggled.

Violet didn’t know what to say. Her embarrassment would grow with each passing second. She began to feel incredibly light-headed and queasy inside.

“Excuse me Kari, I need to use the bathroom real fast.”

Kari joked, “Aww, what the matter Vi? You are feeling sick, aren’t you? Don’t you need to see the Love Doctor?”

Kari started to laugh at her own joke as Violet grabbed her backpack and left the lunch hall. Running toward the restroom, she thought to herself.

“Kari is right. I do like him. But it just isn’t right. He’s handsome, funny, smart, and popular. Not like me. What chance do I have with him? Maybe Kari is right. Maybe I do need to see the Love Doctor. At least. . .”

Before she could finish her thought, she crashed into another student. The two of them fell to the floor. Violet rubbed her forehead. She was about to apologize when she saw the person she bumped into. It was Tony Rydinger. He was still nursing the pain in his head. Violet grabbed her backpack and rushed into the girls’ restroom. Once inside, she made her head disappear as she peaked out the door.”

“Tony, are you okay?”

A group of boys came rushing toward his aid. After helping Tony to his feet, they asked what happened.

“I don’t know.” Tony said. “Someone bumped into me and ran off before I caught a glimpse of who he was.”

“Or she Tony.” one friend said. “It could be just one of those girls who just seems to be a tad bit attracted to you.”

The other boys laughed. Tony laughed along with them as they walked away.

When the coast was clear, Violet rematerialized her head and slowly walked out of the restroom.

“He . . .He . . .” she gasped. “He touched me!!!”

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Invisigirl walked out, fully dressed in her Super Suit with her mask on. She made her way up the stairs and toward the bow of the yacht. She looked up at the moon again.

“Mom and dad should be worried sick about me right about now.”

The young Super gazed out into the ocean. The cold air blew right through her face, winding her hair. Tears came to Invisigirl’s eyes, cascading down her face and on to the deck. She wiped away her tears. She then leaned against the railing. Tears still continued to fall from her face, but it landed in the ocean.

Invisigirl sighed heavily, looked up at the moon, and then walked back inside.

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“So Violet, which movie would you like to see?” Tony asked.

The two stood outside of the movie theatre on their first date together. Tony meant to ask Violet out, but she beat him to it. They had been waiting for this date for several days, and it finally arrived.

“I heard that Masked Mercenaries got really good reviews. It’s supposed to be one of the best action-movies of this decade.”

“Maybe next time Tony. I don’t really want to see a action movie tonight” said Violet.

The night before, Violet and her family were called to foil an attempted bank robbery. That entire incident spelled danger. There were about seven robbers armed with shotguns and submachine guns. Police had the building surrounded but when the Supers came to the scene, guns shots were fired.

With her force field, all of the robbers were apprehended. Unfortunately, two of the police officers were shot and rushed to the hospital. One survived. The other wasn’t so lucky. It was Violet’s first time seeing someone on the hero’s side fall.

Back home, she was reminded that Supers’, as well as police officers’, responsibility was to protect the city and its citizens, no matter the cost. Violet felt sorry for the fallen officer’s family. As a result, she requested to her that she would not participate in any Super activities until it all sank in.

“Okay,” said Tony, looking through the other movie choices.

Violet wanted to enjoy a movie, but more importantly, she wanted to spend time with Tony. Finally, her eyes caught the perfect movie.

“How about At First Sight?” she suggested.

In his mind, Tony was a bit hesitant to watch that movie. At First Sight was a movie about a love story about a blind man and how he falls in love with a deaf woman. Romantic movies were not Tony’s favorite movies to watch, but it was his first date with Violet. He did not want to disappoint her.

“Sure Vi. I heard that movie was good too!”

Violet giggled. She knew that Tony said that to impress her. It worked.

After purchasing the tickets, the two went inside the theatre. As promised, Violet bought a tub of popcorn. She also volunteered to pay for the drinks, but Tony insisted that he’d do it.

Minutes later, both were sitting in leather seats in the center in front of a giant movie screen. It wasn’t crowded. Violet and Tony sat dead center in the audience. Both agreed not to sit way to far in front; for sitting close to a the screen could hurt, and possibly damage, their eyes. They also didn’t want to sit in the back either. Sitting in the back row prevents the viewer from experiencing the full enjoyment of the movie.

Both really enjoyed the movie. The occasionally glanced each other and giggled softly. Violet had probably the best time in her life. She was with a boy she liked, who quite possibly liked her back.

During the middle of the movie, Tony looked at Violet. She sat there beautifully, smiling at the screen, grabbing a handful of popcorn with one hand. He looked at her free hand. Tony took a deep breath and slowly inched his hand closer to Violet’s. The young teen grew more and more nervous.

When it was about four inches away, Violet moved her hand, accidentally bumping into Tony’s. Violet snatched her hand back. She looked at what her hand touched, and then slowly traced the hand back to Tony, who was looking at her, blushing. Tony looked away, then right back at the movie. Violet smiled. She planned on grabbing her drink. She then moved her hand toward Tony’s. Then, she wrapped her fingers around it. Tony turned his head and noticed Violet’s hand grasping his. He then moved his eyes toward Violet. Both stared into each other’s eyes romantically. It may have been their first date, but both knew that it was the start of something wonderful.

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It may have seemed like forever for Invisigirl, but finally, she spotted an island in the distance. She breathed a sigh of relief, knowing she was closer and closer to save her two friends. She was so impatient to save them; she would be willing jump out of the boat and into the ocean and swim to shore.

“Excuse me Invisigirl, but our master would like to speak to you.” said a robot from behind him.

Invisigirl turned around and headed back inside but not before she gave one last glance at the island. The robots were annoying her. It showed on her face.

Inside, a TV screen popped up from the ground. Morticon’s face flashed upon the screen. Invisigirl glared at him.

“Ah, Miss Parr, right on schedule. Wonderful!” he grinned. Invisigirl glared back. “Well, you should arrive at my island in about fifteen minutes. However, you Violet will not leave the boat to do any exploring.”

“WHAT!?!?!?!?” snapped Invisigirl. She turned toward the robots. “I’ve been riding this boat for hours, and now I have to wait?”

“Don’t yell at us Invisigirl. Our master can’t hear you. It is a recording.”

Invisigirl gritted her teeth. She then looked back at the screen.

“Forgive me Violet, but I’m in the middle of running a few tests right now. Speaking of which. . .”

Morticon moved to the right, away from the camera. Invisigirl could see his army of androids working on something really huge. She didn’t have any idea of what it was for it was veiled with a really large fabric.

“I’m over here you stupid scrap pile.” roared Nightmare.

The robot operating the camera moved the camera toward Morticon’s direction. Behind him were two unconscious teens, strapped on a metal board in chains.

“Kari! Tony!” Invisigirl gasped, eyes dilating in horror.

“Right now, I’m testing a few . . . toys for my new . . . well, let that be a surprise. I don’t want you snooping around my island and interrupt something so important.”

Morticon laughed. He then walked over to a table with a bunch of electronics, gadgets, and gizmos. He picked up a gadget. It was a rod with prongs at the end with sparks flying out.

“Wait, what are you doing?” asked Invisigirl nervously. Morticon made his way toward Tony. The young Super feared for what would happen next. “No! Please don’t! Tony! TONY!!!”

Morticon jabbed the prongs into Tony’s body, sending painful jolts of electricity throughout his system. His eyes widened in shock as he hollered in pain. Tears filled Invisigirl’s eyes. She started to cry.

“Stop please!” she whimpered. “Stop!”

Her cries, pleas, and tears were futile. After about seven seconds, Morticon took the rod out of Tony. Tony panted in agony before slipping into unconsciousness.

Morticon spoke ton one of his robots. “I like it. But lets get the bolts to be projected out of the rod instead of having it surged though them.”

The robot nodded and returned it to the table. It began to work on modifications. Morticon looked back at the camera.

“Now while I’m finishing my experiments, I want you to get some rest.” Tomorrow is going to be a very busy day for the both of us.” Morticon laughed. After guffawing, he placed a serious expression on his face. “And one more thing Violet. If you do come within fifty feet of my base, I will kill your friends. So I suggest staying on the boat. Don’t worry. Feel free to start your search anytime after 7:00 AM tomorrow.” A sinister grin came upon his face. “See you tomorrow Violet. Sleep tight.”

The screen flashed off. Invisigirl sank to her knees, bawling her eyes out. Never in her whole life has she felt so hopeless.

“You can sleep in the quarters below Invisi. . .” said a robot from behind her.

Invisigirl cut him off. She captured the two robots in a force field. Rage surged throughout her body as she threw the field out of the boat. The force field vanished upon impact with the water. The robots sank toward the bottom.

Invisigirl wanted dearly to search the island. She could find Morticon’s base and rescue Tony and Kari while in her invisible state. However, she suspected that Morticon had a couple of traps planted all over the island. She also believed that there were heat-seeking cameras that could detect her regardless of being invisible. She decided to take his order and sleep in the boat.

The female heroine dragged herself below deck. She found a comfortable bed to sleep on. She took off her boots, gloves and mask and placed them on a stand next to the bed. Violet placed the covers over her. She was very comfortable, but she could not sleep; not without thinking of Tony and Kari. She wondered if she would ever find them . . . or what was left of them.

[Violet_Parr]

This was great, TSS . I’ll have to admit, I think I liked the Kari flash-backs better. I think you did a better job staying in-character there. But these were good none-the-less. I really liked the first one, of when they first met. You did a great job staying in-character for that one, especially the first part. I also liked how you came back to reality with Violet, then, after seeing her friends tortured, she throws the two robots off the boat. I see she’s become a little impatient with them. Also, she’s got just a hit of her dad’s temper and her mom’s “don’t-take-crap-from-no-one” attitude. That was nice to see .

There was really only one thing that kinda confused me. You started using the name “Nightmare,” who, if I remember correctly [spoil]was killed in your V-V story.[/spoil] Did you mean to do that? Or was that just a mistake? If you actually meant that to be in there, maybe you could make it a little clearer when it was him or Morticon. 'Cause I couldn’t follow. Sorry if that sounds mean, I don’t mean it like that at all. I was just really confused. Other than that, no major errors.

Great job, once again, TSS ! I can’t wait to see what happens. I’m guessing there’s gonna be a lot of action in this next chapter .

[The_Star_Swordsman]

Thanks for your review Violet Parr. I am gald you enjoyed it. I’m glad you liked a lot of things about it.

And that was my mistake in writing Nightmare instead of Morticon. I was so close to finishing that my head was thinking of another story. Thanks for pointing that out. I’ll correct it ASAP.

[The_Star_Swordsman]

I have horrible news everyone. My computer has been giving me problems. Basicly, I can’t log in. And my computer has the rest of this story saved on the desktop.

To the point, I have to announce a temporary hiatus on this story until I can get my computer fixed.

The worst that can happen is that I have to get a new computer. And that means I have gotta rewrite every chapter over again.

[Violet_Parr]

Oh, dang ! I hope your computer starts working for you. That would be so frustrating, to have to rewrite a whole story! God bless you. I really hope it works. Do you have it written down somewhere else as a backup?

[The_Star_Swordsman]

It looks like I might need to rewrite everything from chapter 20 on. I need to get a new computer. What a bummer.

[The_Star_Swordsman]

I hope no one forgot about this story! Becasue it is back up and running again! Sorry for the long hiatus everyone. My computer caught a virus and it took about 2 months to fix it. it was a while, but at least I was able to recover all of my chapters.

here is chapter 20. This idea just flashed into my head about 2 days ago, and I had to write this idea of the dream scene. I hope you all like it. Maybe a forshadow of whats to come.

Chapter 20: Nightmares

It was about midnight. Morticon had just finished testing weapons on Kari and Tony. He had thrown away most of the gadgets, but he was able to select a bunch of painful and powerful weapons for his project. A robot took the weapons and brought them to the veiled entity in the far end of the room. Soon after, Metamorph and The Commander approached Morticon.

“Splendid. Everything is going according to plan.” exclaimed the cyborg.

“When will it be ready?” The Commander questioned.

“Patience my friends. We must not rush something so delicate. We must be absolutely certain of its destructiveness.”

“What of the two kids sir?”

“I’m glad you asked Metamorph.” said Morticon. “Please bring them back to their cells. They look really exhausted and need a nice long rest.

Morticon let out a sadistic chuckle before walking away. The Commander followed after him. Metamorph clapped his hands. Two androids made their way up to him

“Unshackle the prisoners and follow me with them.” he commanded.

The robots did. A semiconscious Tony and a dazed Kari were hoisted on to the robot’s shoulders. Tony and Kari looked horrible and miserable. They have been subjected to brutal and excruciating tests for Morticon’s weapons. Whenever he wasn’t satisfied, he would order his robot followers to make adjustments before testing it on them again, with added pain the next time.

Kari and Tony felt excruciating pain surge throughout their body. They have been through so much that they would happily accept death than continue with the torture. Bruises, cuts, lacerations, and marks were all throughout their body. Their clothes were ruined.

When they arrived at their cell, the robots placed them down on the ground. Metamorph slammed the door shut, laughing loudly on his way out.

Tony tried to get to his feet. It was hard enough for him to get on his knees. The pain was so unbearable he collapsed on the ground. Kari slowly crawled to him. It hurt just as much, but she was able to make it to his side.

“Tony, that was horrible.” she cried. “I thought I was going to die. I wanted to die. I never felt so . . .” she couldn’t finish.

Tony managed to sit up. “I know Kari. Those three are sick human beings. They had no right to treat us like animals.”

“Why couldn’t they just be merciful and ended it for us.”

Kari looked at her friend. Her eyes were shedding with tears.

“Kari . . .” sighed Tony, clinging to her in an attempt to comfort her. “we can’t give up hope. Our parents are still looking for us. We’ll be rescued. I promise.”

Kari sniffled, “I wish this nightmare would end.”

“Me too Kari. Me too.”

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Back aboard the yacht, Violet had a very hard time falling asleep. When she did, she began to dream.

Violet was standing in a park filled with green grass, playgrounds, flowers, and people. She took in a breath of fresh air. She saw Kari swinging on the swings. Tony was beside her. Both waved at Violet. The young girl happily skipped over to them. Suddenly, the ground began to shake from under them. Violet lost her balance and fell to the ground. She tried to get to her feet.

When she did, The Commander and Metamorph appeared from out of nowhere in front of the swing-set. The Commander grabbed Tony and Kari and hoisted them into the air. People all over the park ran for their lives away from the park. Robots emerged from under the ground and started trashing the area.

Violet was scared. She was about to hide behind a tree and change into her Super Suit when she realized that it wasn’t with her. She wasn’t wearing it under her clothes. She was about to dash to the rescue when a bunch of robots piled on top of her. They pinned her to the ground. Violet tried to struggle free but to no avail.

Morticon hovered down from the sky in front of The Commander and Metamorph. His eyes met Violet’s. He let out a terrifying roar of laughter. He then raised his arm into the air and gave a thumbs-down sign.

Metamorph nodded, and turned his arms into rifles. He aimed them at Tony and Kari. Violet tried with all of her might to break free from the robots. She tried forming a force field to protect her friends, regardless of her risking her identity. However, she couldn’t do it. She was powerless. Tears came flowing down her eyes. Metamorph had just fired his rifles. The young girl’s eyes widened in terror.

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Then suddenly, Violet woke up. She darted up in bed, panting heavily. She had sweat running down her head.

“It was just a nightmare Violet. Get a hold of yourself. It isn’t real. It wasn’t real.”

Violet looked at the clock. It was 7:00 AM. She decided it was time to begin searching for her friends. Violet got out of bed, placed her mask on her face, and left the yacht. She stepped on to the sandy beach, looking at the jungle ahead of her. She sighed and ventured into the jungle.

[Violet_Parr]

Wow. Very nice, TSS . Especially for you just coming up with it and writing it down! This was a great chapter! I liked how you started it off, showing a little more of Tony and Kari. That was written very well . I loved how Tony was trying to comfort her, telling her not to give up. The dream sequence was good, hectic and a little unreal, but that’s good. That’s how dreams are . I really loved this chapter, TSS! I can’t wait to see what Violet does in her adventuring ! Great job, TSS!

[The_Star_Swordsman]

Thanks for your comments Violet Parr. It’s always comforting and satisfying to read.

[The_Star_Swordsman]

Chapter 21: Exploration and Encounter

Invisigirl had a pretty good idea where to start her search. Since the Super Hero ban was lifted, she had been summoned with her family to a couple of island bases. Most, if not all, of them were located near the center of the island. With that in mind, Invisigirl began her exploration, darting straight into the jungle.

The island was big. It was covered with thousands of trees and tall mountains. The island had a couple of lakes, rivers, and waterfalls that emptied into the lagoons and the ocean.

Invisigirl ran though the jungle, pushing away every thick shrubbery in her way. She was out of breath and her side started to cramp up. Part of her wanted to slow down for a quick breather. However, something in her heart kept tugging her to her friends.

She had just explored for half an hour when she decided to take a rest. She had been sprinting nonstop. She leaned against a tall tree, panting heavily, trying to get oxygen into her body. Her legs felt like they were burning.

“I can’t stop now.” she thought. “I have to keep going.”

She nursed her side until the pain was gone. After taking a couple more deep breaths, Invisigirl stood up. She was about to resume her search when she heard a rustle in the shrubs. The young Super was startled. Another noise was heard from behind her. This time, it was the sound of footsteps running.

“Who’s there?”

No answer, but the rustles of the plants and the footsteps drew closer as they became louder. Invisigirl heard a bush shake from behind and turned around, assuming a fighting stance.

Six androids stood before Invisigirl. They all eyed the young Super. All were ready to strike at her.

Invisigirl smirked, “Hmm, and I thought they would send me a challenge.”

The robots circled around the teenaged Super. Invisigirl moved her eyes around, keeping each and every one in her sights.

In fights, Invisigirl was normally called for defense. She would protect civilians or her family while the rest attacked. That strategy changed when she fought alone. She still had a defensive mindset, but this time, she had to come up with some offense as well. Invisigirl used her brains when she combated robots, evil henchmen, or your average thug on the street.

The young girl analyzed the situation and conjured up options in her head. That was something she learned from her parents: analyze then attack. She would have to think of something fast before the encircling robots got too close.

Finally, she became invisible. The robots stopped. Meanwhile, Invisigirl slipped out of the center of the circle. She did that just in time. The robots then all charged in to the center. A loud crash echoed throughout the jungle as the robots all rammed into each other. This disabled two of the robots.

Now was Invisigirl’s chance to strike. While the remaining robots struggled to their feet, she sprinted up to them. She reappeared, launching a foot into the face of an android, sending bolts and screws flying out. She turned to another robot. She trapped it inside a force field and slammed it down on the robot next to it. Invisigirl turned to the robot she kicked earlier and shoved it to the ground. It landed with a thud. The young Super jumped in to the air and forced her boots into its face. Invisigirl got off of it. Sparks flew out as the robot deactivated seconds later.

Invisigirl turned to the last robot. “Okay buddy, its just you and me now.”

The robot got into a fighting stance. Invisigirl did the same. They stared at each other, waiting for the other to make a move. Invisigirl then turned invisible. The solitary robot looked all around, looking for her. Suddenly, it was swept off of its feet, crashing to the ground. Invisigirl jumped on its back. Both wrestled for a few seconds. The young Super may not be strong, but she used leverage to overpower the robot. She finally held the android in a position where he was immobilized.

“I’m only going to ask you once.” demanded Invisigirl. “Where is Morticon’s base?”

The robot struggled to break free, but realized that it was no use. He turned and jerked its head to the right. Invisigirl looked up and followed his motion. Invisigirl got up off of the robot and started walking in that direction.

The robot got to its hands and knees, and later on to his feet. It summoned all of its strength and charged at the young Super at a full sprint. The robot was about to pounce on her when Invisigirl turned around and formed a force field in front of her. The robot crashed into the field and bounced of on to the ground. Sparks flew out of its system as the robot broke down.

Invisigirl sighed, turned around and ran off into the jungle once again. She knew she was getting closer to Tony and Kari. She could feel that they were in her reach.

[Al-Bob]

nicely done with Invisigirl’s fight scene…i felt it went too fast but other then that it was well done. You can feel the emotions and not just the adventure which makes it easier in flowing together.

[The_Star_Swordsman]

Thanks for your review Al-Bob. In all honesty, I wanted Violet to hae a minii-fight instead of a long big one. Beacuse she is going to have a lot of fights in my TI Trilogy. This is just a mini one. So she’ll get a big one farther down the road.

[Violet_Parr]

AWESOME chapter, TSS ! I really loved this one. I love how you made Violet very determined to save her friends, and that she would would stop at almost nothing to get to them. It shows how devoted she is as a friend. This chapter was written very nicely. There were only two English mistakes that I caught…

Her legs felt like it was burning.

The “it was” should be they were…

He turned and jerked its heard to the right.

You misspelled head.

I hope you don’t take my criticism the wrong way, and I hope it doesn’t sound mean, I was just trying to help .

Anyway, I love the fight scene! I understand the need for some mini-fights instead of all drawn-out fights. This was writen very well and very clear. I also liked Violet’s attitude at the beginning . So long as she doesn’t go overboard and get cocky, I like her having a little attitude and feistiness in her. It shows a little of her mom in her. I liked how confident Violet was and how well she handled herself. It shows how she’s growing, not just as a super, but as a person.

Over all, I think you did a great job on this one! Great job, TSS ! I can’t wait for the next chapter !

So, same time next Friday ?

[The_Star_Swordsman]

Thanks for the review and corrections Violet Parr! I welcome them openly. THanks for pointing them out.

Anyways, my whole goal was to portray Violet’s confidence and attitude in a fight. I’m glad that you felt it was just right: not too cocky, but not to timid. Thanks for the complement.

And yep, same time, same place.