Oh boy. You guys have wild predictions, but hey, it could happen
Well, for my next chapter, all I can tell you is to expect the unexpected.
Review of last chapter…
Excitement-9.0
Characters-8.5
Suspence for next chapter-9.5
Very well done chapter that will be hold any reader until the next installment.
Oh boy Al-Bob! Thanks. Where did the 5’s go? 
i’m trying to save 5’s for abslutely mindboggling episodes…like C.S. Lewis or J.R. Tolkein…just trying to be more strict on my reviews…
Well, I guess I am content with 4.5 and 4s then. I hope to earn a 5 in the near future.
This probably isn’t my best chapter in the world, but enjoy okay.
Chapter 13: Syndrome’s Return
Invisigirl gaped at her family’s former enemy. Questions stirred in her mind. She wondered, “How did he survive? Why is he here? And most importantly, when did he become a hero?”
“You look rather pale young lady.” Syndrome said, rather politely. He extended his hand. “Here, let me help you.”
To everyone’s surprised, Invisigirl slapped his hand away. Everyone gasped. The teenaged heroine got to her feet, glaring at the innocent-looking “hero”.
“Don’t touch me.” she growled.
“I know what you are thinking. How in the world did I survive right? And also, my new. . . abilities you are pondering as well right?” he remarked.
Invisigirl’s eyes widened. “Did he just read my mind?” she thought.
Syndrome grinned. “Yes Invisigirl, I did.” he answered, winking at Invisigirl. “Well, to start things off, I’ll explain to you. . .”
“HELP! STOP THEIF!”
The crowd of people looked around. They finally see a speeding car, rushing away from a jewelry store nearby. Invisigirl had just became invisible and was about to take action. Suddenly, Syndrome pointed his finger at the getaway car, fired his zero-point-energy beam, and trapped the vehicle in complete immobilization. Syndrome lifted it up into the air, as the people applauded. At that moment, Syndrome performed another astounding act. He stared at the immobilized car. Then, a blast of red light shot from his eyes. The blasts were aimed at the tires, causing them to melt. After that, he retracted he immobilizing beam and the car crashed to the ground. Police officers cuffed the robbers and took them to jail.
All the while, Invisigirl stared in amazement at Syndrome and his heroic deed. People cheered for him. Syndrome looked at Invisigirl and slowly walked to her. Invisigirl just glared at him.
“You know, this is a rather odd way to appreciate me after I just saved your life.” Syndrome brought his hand toward the young Super’s face. “A simple thanks is all I. . .”
Invisigirl pushed his hand away. “Listen, I don’t know what is going on here, but you are up to something.”
“Are you accusing me, a hero, for doing something wrong? I saved your life young lady!”
“By killing other Supers first?” she snapped.
“Are you calling me a liar? I saved your life and you treat me like dirt? A simple thanks would be good enough.”
People whispered to each other. Invisigirl was able to hear slightly audible rude remarks about her. Suddenly, the Incredibile showed up. Mr. Incredible, Elastigirl and Speedster all jumped out of the car.
“SYNDROME!” said a surprised Speedster.
“LEAVE MY DAUGHTER ALONE!” Elastigirl yelled as she elongated her arms around her daughter and pulled her to her family. “Are you okay?” she asked Invisigirl. She nodded her head.
“GET AWAY FROM HER!” Mr Incredible ordered as he ran up to Syndrome. He brought his arm back and thrusted his fist at him. To everyone’s astonishment, Syndrome caught the powerful punch with his hand. Mr. Incredible gasped in surprise as Syndrome grinned back at him.
“Hello Mr. Incredible, long time no see.” he smirked. “Can you please tell me why are you attcking me after I saved your daughter’s life?
Syndrome released his grip on Mr. Incredible’s fist. As he backed toward his family, people started to unite together, creating a wall of people between the family of supers and Syndrome. The people began to boo and show displeasure at the Incredibles’ actions. Mr. Incredible wanted to barge right through the barricade of humans but Elastigirl wrapped her arms around her husband’s body.
“No, don’t do it. We’ll settle this later.” She tried to convince. Invisigirl and Speedster got into the Incredibile. Elastigirl later got into the car as well. Temptation tried on Mr. Incredible but he reluctantly got into his car and drove off.
The family drove away. Syndrome smiled heroically as everyone praised their new hero. Suddenly, Syndrome heard the cries for help a mile away.
“Well, it seems like someone is in trouble.” he said. “So long civilians!”
Syndrome’s rocket boots activated. A blast of blue spouted from his jet boots as the new hero ventured to perform more heroic acts.
hmmmmm…very perplexing.
A great chapter that made my mind race…9.0/10.0
Maybe he is just trying to get people to like him? That way people would start to go against the incredible family? What surprises me most is that he is so nice to Invisigirl. I’m confused…will wait for the answer…
Syndrome is so up to something. Quite mysterious…
Thanks for reading you guys. Keep the feedback and predictions coming
BDD: hey, he could be. But maybe he could’ve very much turned a new leaf.
Al-Bob: Thanks for th 4.5 dude. And well, if you do something heroic or incredible, you are bound to get someone’s attention. And he could very well trun everyone against the parrs, or maybe just wants them to like him more. I see you smell a Two-Face in Syndrome huh?
yah…very suspicious!
Whatelse do you see? Al-Bob?
…maybe Syndrome is really being good?? I can keep my hatred but will only end up like the Parr family…maybe he has changed.
It is possible. THat is what the Metroville civilians believe.
i just can’t put my mind or finger on a conclusion…
Well, keep pondering. A possibility will show up.
Here is chapter 14 for you guys. Enjoy. We have now reached the half-way point of the story.
Chapter 14: Puzzled Parrs
After Violet showered and put on a pair of purple pajamas, she hung her Super Suit in her closet. While brushing her hair, she heard a knock on the door. Violet placed her brush down and went to answer it. It was Dash.
“Can I help you?” she rudely asked, remembering his actions before her date this morning.
“Uh, mom and dad want to talk to us downstairs Vi.”
Dash ran downstairs. Violet followed after him. She entered the kitchen and found her family assembled in the living room. She sat down on the couch. Helen joined her. Dash sat on the floor while Bob planted himself on an easy chair.
“Vi, we already told Dash but do you know why we called for a family meeting?” Helen asked.
Violet shook her head but had an idea. “Is this about what happened today with Syndrome?”
“Yes, but there is much more to that.” said Bob.
Helen asked, “Violet sweetie, exactly what happened as soon as you left the house?”
Violet told her family that she and Tony went to the mall then decided to take a walk by the Seaport. Then, she explained that a fire broke out and she abandoned Tony to check it out. She went inside to go rescue a little girl, but because she was so dehydrated and fatigued, she ran out of energy. When the building started to collapse, she threw herself on top of the girl to protect her.
“I guess that was when Syndrome zapped me with his immobi-ray and slammed me through the wall and onto the street before the building collapsed on top of me. And I guess that is it.”
Helen and Bob nodded. Two seconds later, Dash attacked with a storm of questions.
“How did he survive? How did he know you were in trouble? Are you hurt? What about the other girl? And what happened after that?”
Bob laughed. “Take it easy son. One question at a time please.”
“But how did he survive the accident with his jet plane Vi? And exactly what is he up too?” Helen wondered.
“That is not what puzzles me mom.” replied Violet. “What worries me is. . . Syndrome has changed.”
The family gave her an intriguing stare.
“Do you mean he is actually a good guy like us?”
Violet answered, “Not a change of heart Dash. What I meant to say is, he is a more powerful person than the last time we met.”
“What do you mean?” inquired Bob.
“Well, first off, I’m not sure if it counts, but feels like he knew that the little girl and I were in trouble. Secondly, after he rescued me, he had this power that took away my pain and completely healed me. Also, I’m not sure if he upgraded his mask, but he shot laser beams from his eyes.”
The family gasped in amazement.
“I doubt that he upgraded Super Suit.” stated Bob, shaking his head. “When I punched him, it was with all of my power. A punch like that can send you flying. It isn’t like him, or any human, to catch my powerful Incredipunch, upgraded Super Suit or not.”
“Bob, don’t get me wrong, but is it true that the only Super capable enough of catching your punch that was Meta Man?” Helen questioned.
Bob nodded. “Honey, kids, we have an incredibly powerful Super out there. I don’t know what his intentions are, but all I can tell you is to stay alert. Syndrome was an enemy to us once.”
Everyone nodded. Bob walked into the kitchen and grabbed the telephone.
“Who are you calling” asked Helen.
“Rick. We need to get some answers.”
Bob dialed the number to Rick’s office located at the National Supers Agency Head Quarters. Seconds later, Rick picked up the phone.
“Bob?”
“Rick, we need to talk.”
“Let me guess. This is about Syndrome’s return, and you want information right?”
“Obviously.”
“Well, it is an important matter to discuss. But not tonight. It is late and I’m sure your daughter is probably tired from her encounter with your. . . former “admirer.” Tomorrow, you bring your family and we’ll talk.”
A few hours later, Violet looked outside the window from her room, puzzled and apprehensive by the return of the first ever villain she faced. She sighed, feeling a sense of uncertainty and uneasiness. She knew Syndrome has grown in power. But she could not help but ponder. What are is intentions? And how did he get so powerful?
Every Super in the world has a secret. There isn’t a single one who doesn’t. From a secret identity, to a secret lair, even a secret past, every Super has one. This one made Vi and the rest of the Parr family wonder. Since Syndrome is technically a Super Hero, what are his secrets that made him who he is?
Excellent TSS…a great chapter.
Review 9/10
This should set up the rest of the movie and is a comfortable puase to allow the reader to get set for more excitement.
Thanks Al-Bob for the review.
Real suspenseful with just how and why Syndrome changed. Nice way to end the chapter, TSS-it’s like a dark, mysterious closing to leave the reader pondering.
BDD: Well thank you for your review. And it seems like I accomplished something. Until the reader figures it out, I want people to continue to ponder about Syndrome.